溫州高三二模（教師版）

【2023·浙江省溫州市高三下學(xué)期二?！縅uliaalwaysenjoyedrunningthroughTheDarkWalk隧道的潮濕陰暗，烘托出人物內(nèi)心的害怕towardsthelightattheendofit從黑暗跑向光明，暗示文章最后鱒魚(yú)也得到了救贖.Itwasadark,damptunnel(隧道)madeofsmoothbranches.Thisyearshehadtheextrajoyofshowingittohersmallbrother,Stephen,andterrifyinghimaswellasherself.隧道的潮濕陰暗，烘托出人物內(nèi)心的害怕從黑暗跑向光明，暗示文章最后鱒魚(yú)也得到了救贖Onedaytheyfoundaholeononesideofthewalk.Insidetherewaswater,inwhichtheyperceivedapantingtrout象征著仍在為生活的困難而掙扎的人們,以及他們面對(duì)困難永不放棄的信念(喘息的鱒魚(yú)).Theywerebothsoexcitedthattheywerenolongerafraidofthedarknessastheybentdownandpeeredatthefishpantinginhistinyprison說(shuō)明鱒魚(yú)困在洞里，后文Julia將其放生，鱒魚(yú)從他的prison里重獲自由,hissilverstomachgoingupanddownlikeanengine;otherwisehewasmotionless.JuliawonderedwhatheateandthoughtofhishungerJulia一系列的擔(dān)憂，暗示下文她決定要幫助鱒魚(yú)，放回河里.Shefoundhimaworm.Heignoredthefood,andjustwentonpanting.Bendingoverhim,shethoughthowhehadbeeninthere.Allthewinter,inthedarktunnel,allday,allnight,floatingaroundalone.象征著仍在為生活的困難而掙扎的人們,以及他們面對(duì)困難永不放棄的信念說(shuō)明鱒魚(yú)困在洞里，后文Julia將其放生，鱒魚(yú)從他的prison里重獲自由Julia一系列的擔(dān)憂，暗示下文她決定要幫助鱒魚(yú)，放回河里Nobodyknewhowthefishgotthere.Hermother父母親討論鱒魚(yú)的來(lái)源，但都沒(méi)有表露出想去救他，暗示Julia才是最后拯救鱒魚(yú)的孤勇者suggestedthatabirdhadcarriedtheegg.Herfatherthoughtthatinthewinterasmallstreammighthavecarrieditdownthereasababy,andithasbeensafeuntilsummercameandthewaterbegantodryup.父母親討論鱒魚(yú)的來(lái)源，但都沒(méi)有表露出想去救他，暗示Julia才是最后拯救鱒魚(yú)的孤勇者Beforetheywenttobed,Stephenaskedhismummythewholestoryofthetrout,notreallyinterestedintheactualtrout,butinthestorywhichhismumbegantomakeupforhim弟弟晚上問(wèn)媽媽鱒魚(yú)的故事，媽媽卻編造了一個(gè)，稱最后是仙女救了鱒魚(yú),andJulia,inherbed,presentedherbacktothemandreadherbook.Butshekeptoneearcocked偷聽(tīng).“Andso,intheend,thisnaughtyfishgotbiggerandbigger,andthewatergotsmallerandsmaller...”Passionately,sheturnedaroundandcried,“Mummy,don’tmakeitahorribleoldmoralstoryJulia聽(tīng)到這個(gè)故事后特別不耐煩，也暗示后文她會(huì)拯救鱒魚(yú).”Hermomevenbroughtinafairy(仙子),whohadmadeitrainandfilledthehole,sothatthetroutcouldfloatawaydowntotheriverbelow.Staringatthemoonsheknewtherewasnosuchthingasafairyandthattrout,downinthetunnel,waspantingforhislife.弟弟晚上問(wèn)媽媽鱒魚(yú)的故事，媽媽卻編造了一個(gè)，稱最后是仙女救了鱒魚(yú)偷聽(tīng)Julia聽(tīng)到這個(gè)故事后特別不耐煩，也暗示后文她會(huì)拯救鱒魚(yú)續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep._______________________________________________________________________________

Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver._______________________________________________________________________________5R解讀故事：Readforthebackgroundoneday（when）；tunnel，hole（where）ReadforthecharactersJulia，apantingtrout；Stephen，parentsReadfortheemotionalchangesexcitedbutterrified>worried>annoyed(Julia)ReadfortheplotBeginning：JuliaandStephenwentthroughatunnelDevelopment:TheyfoundapantingtroutClimax:MonmadeupastoryandsaidafairyhelpedthetroutResolution:JuliasavedthetroutEnding:ThetoutswamintheriverhappilyReadforthetheme（人與自然）showkindnesstoanimalsTPT模式Paragraph1：ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.Paragraph2:

Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.TransitionStep2(第4句)：Juliamadeabolddecisiontosavethetroutbyherselfwithapotclutchedinherhands.Step2(第2句)：Thetroutbegantofloatcheerfully,hissilverstomachsparklingunderthemoonlightThePlot（Actions+Emotions)Step3Miniplot1:Julia’sactions+emotionsMiniplot2:thetrout’sactionsMiniplot3:Julia’sresponseStep3Miniplot1:thetrout’sactionsMiniplot2:Julia’sresponse(emotions)Miniplot3:Julia’sresponse(realization)TransitionStep2(第3句)：Sheputhimintothepotcarefullyandrantowardsanearbyriverswiftly.Step1(第1句)：Asmallactofkindnesstowardsanimalscouldbepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifference.Possibleversion:ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.Courageousanddetermined,Juliamadeabolddecisiontosavethetroutbyherselfandslippedawayswiftlyandsilentlywithapotclutchedinherhands.Sodarkandterrifyingwasthetunnelatmidnightthatshedraggedherheavylegstowardsthetroutwithherpalmssweatingandheartpounding.AsJuliaapproachedhim,aflushofexcitementandastonishmentsweptoverher.ThetroutlyingonthecoldgroundbegantopantatafasterspeedasifherealizedJuliawouldhelphimoutoftheprison.Thensheputhimintothepotcarefullyandrantowardsanearbyriverswiftly.(106words)Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.Muchtoherdelight,thetroutbegantofloatcheerfully,hissilverstomachsparklingunderthemoonlight,shininglikeadiamond.Moresurprisingly,hejumpedoutofthewaterasifexpressinghissinceregratitudetowardsJulia.Atthesightoftheinterestingscene,abigsmilecreptonherface.Itwasatthatmomentthatshecametoarealizationthatshewaslikethefairyinhermother’sstory,savingthetrout’slife.Onherwayhome,satisfiedandrelieved,sheknewthatasmallactofkindnesscouldbepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifferenceforthetrout.(103words)解讀ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.Courageousanddetermined,Juliamadeabolddecisiontosavethetroutbyherselfandslippedawayswiftlyandsilentlywithapotclutchedinherhands.（Julia獨(dú)自拯救鱒魚(yú)是因?yàn)楦改负偷艿芏荚诨孟胂膳畷?huì)就他；押尾韻；pot對(duì)應(yīng)下文開(kāi)頭）Sodarkandterrifyingwasthetunnelatmidnightthatshedraggedherheavylegstowardsthetroutwithherpalmssweatingandheartpounding.（darkandterrifying對(duì)應(yīng)原文開(kāi)頭，烘托出半夜Julia去隧道里害怕的心情）AsJuliaapproachedhim,aflushofexcitementandastonishmentsweptoverher.（押尾韻的修辭）ThetroutlyingonthecoldgroundbegantopantatafasterspeedasifherealizedJuliawouldhelphimoutoftheprison.（pant和prison對(duì)應(yīng)原文）Thensheputhimintothepotcarefullyandrantowardsanearbyriverswiftly.（river對(duì)應(yīng)下段的river）(106words)Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.Muchtoherdelight,thetroutbegantofloatcheerfully,hissilverstomachsparklingunderthemoonlight,shininglikeadiamond.（silverstomach對(duì)應(yīng)原文）Moresurprisingly,hejumpedoutofthewaterasifexpressinghissinceregratitudetowardsJulia.（跳出水面寫出鱒魚(yú)獲救后的快樂(lè)）Atthesightoftheinterestingscene,abigsmilecreptonherface.（Julia救助鱒魚(yú)后內(nèi)心也感到快樂(lè)）Itwasatthatmomentthatshecametoarealizationthatshewaslikethefairyinhermother’sstory,savingthetrout’slife.（fairy對(duì)應(yīng)原文，在這里Julia就是一個(gè)仙女，拯救了鱒魚(yú)）Onherwayhome,satisfiedandrelieved,sheknewthatasmallactofkindnesscouldbepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifferenceforthetrout.（文章主旨——對(duì)動(dòng)物要懷有善良）(103words)官方參考范文Shesatup.Stephenwasahotlumpofsleep,lazything!Shele