2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫 一次難忘的遠(yuǎn)足講義-

讀后續(xù)寫：一次難忘的遠(yuǎn)足閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mr.Taylorcheckedagain:water,food,bandage,medicines,acompass,andamapwrappedinplastic…Bingo!Heputallthathepreparedforthecominghikingintohisbackpack.Mr.Taylorwasfondofhiking,thistimeinparticular,foritwasthefirsttimeforhimtohikewithhistwosons,HarryandJoel.JoellikedreadingbooksaboutexplorersandHarryjoinedthehikingclubinhisschoolthisterm.“Itwillbeanunforgettableexperience,definitely.”hewhisperedtohimself,unconsciouslyasmilespreadingoverhisface.

HarryandJoel,however,arguedforthefirstthreemilesoftheirhikingtrip.HarryaccusedJoelofwearingsmellyoldshoes.JoelblamedHarryforusingallofthebugspray(噴霧防蟲劑).HarrytoldJoelhesmelledterrible,JoelcalledHarryacoward(懦夫).

“Willthetwoofyoujustquietdownandenjoyourhiketogether?”theirfathersaid.“You’remissingallofthebeautifulscenery!”Itwastrue.NeitherJoelnorHarryhadtakennoticeofthebeartheirfatherhadspiedatthestartoftheirtrip.Theyhadn’tlookedupattheeaglehepointedoutoverhead.Worstofall,theyhadn’tpaidanyattentiontotheturnsandtwistsalongthewaywhiletheycontinuedtheirargument.

“Joelthrewastickatme!”Harryscreamed.

“That’snottrue!”Joelshoutedback.

Mr.Taylorcouldnolongercontainhisanger.“Andbothofyouneedtostoparguing!”heerupted.Asheturnedtofacethem,hisleftfootcaughtonaroot.Heslippedbackwardanddownmuddybank,fallingintotheriverthatranalongsidethepath.

HarryandJoelracedtotheirfather’sassistance.Theyhelpedhimupoutofthewater,andthendraggedhiswetbackpackupontoland.Fortunately,theirwet-throughfatherfoundhimselfjustslightlyinjured.注意：所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Paragraph1:Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.Paragraph2:“Justcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”審題：讀前文：人物、性格、背景、情節(jié)、沖突、道具、伏筆。讀銜接句：圈出人物、場景、銜接等信息。對各個(gè)信息自我追問（why,how,what為什么/怎么樣/怎么辦）并回答。續(xù)寫：作用：推動情節(jié)發(fā)展，形成與前文首尾相應(yīng)/有始有終的故事，并凸顯主題（明+暗）?？紤]：主人公所看、聽、想、說、做。情節(jié)合理：符合人物性格、符合常識、符合伏筆、符合主題。細(xì)節(jié)設(shè)置：comment+action+response+conflict+solution+echo/theme主題：明：完成一次遠(yuǎn)足暗：克服困難（父親落水，眼鏡丟了，無法看清地圖），兩個(gè)兒子合作成長伏筆：指南針、地圖、爭吵不休、美麗的風(fēng)景等常用的寫作技巧：現(xiàn)在/過去分詞作狀語獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)形容詞（短語）做狀語with+n.做方式狀語無靈主語動作鏈角色切換，多角度敘事表情+動作+情緒描寫時(shí)間/動作銜接每段的對話盡量不超過一處非限定從補(bǔ)充說明思想+行動+（預(yù)期的）結(jié)果哲理感悟式/定格動作式/景色畫面式結(jié)尾范文：Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.Mr.Taylorsighedbeforehequicklytookoffhiswetclothesandsqueezedthewaterout.WhileHarrywasspreadingtheclothesonahugestone,Joelwalkedtheirhalf-nakedfathertoanopening.Seeinghisfatherwrappingthewoundwiththebandage,Joelfeltstrange.泰勒先生嘆了口氣，然后迅速脫下濕衣服，把水?dāng)D了出來。當(dāng)哈利把衣服鋪在一塊大石頭上時(shí)，喬爾帶著他們半裸的父親走到一個(gè)出口前?？吹礁赣H用繃帶包扎傷口，喬爾感到怪怪的。Athoughtwentthroughhismindlikeanelectricshock.HowcouldtheycontinuehikingifDadwasunabletoseeclearly?一個(gè)想法像電擊一樣掠過他的腦海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他們怎么能繼續(xù)徒步旅行呢？“IfonlyHarrystoppedarguingearlierwithme!”hegrumbled,hisbrowsrisingintohisforehead.“Iheardyou!”Harryyelled,glaringathimwithburningeyes.“要是哈利早點(diǎn)停止和我爭論就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皺到額頭。“我聽見了！”哈利喊道，用燃燒的眼睛瞪著他。寫作手法：Seeinghisfather...動作銜接；Athoughtwentthroughhismind無靈主語；hisbrowsrisingintohisforehead.獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)；glaringathim現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨狀語 “Justcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”Hementionedthemapandcompassbeforetheboysapproachedreluctantlyandfumbledfortheminhisbackpack.Itwasnotlongbeforetheylocatedwheretheywereandheadedoff.他提到地圖和指南針，男孩們不情愿地走過去，在背包里摸索指南針。沒過多久，他們就定位到了他們的位置，然后出發(fā)。JoelsoonfoundhimselfanexpertatusingacompasswhileHarrylearnttobeanexcellentmapreader.Nowandthen,prettybirdssingingmerrysongsandflowersbloomingwithsmilesmadethekidsgasp.喬爾很快發(fā)現(xiàn)自己是一個(gè)使用指南針的專家，而哈利學(xué)會了成為一個(gè)優(yōu)秀的讀圖者。不時(shí)地，漂亮的鳥兒唱著歡快的歌，怒放的鮮花讓孩子們屏氣贊嘆。Laterthatday,theymanagedtocatchsightofsomemountaingoatsandevenagrizzlybearandaneagle.Itwasthehighlightofthedayandtheytalkedaboutitforhours,grinningfromeartoear.那天晚些時(shí)候，他們還看到了一些山羊，甚至還有一只灰熊和一只鷹。這是一天中的亮點(diǎn)，他們談了好幾個(gè)小時(shí)，開懷大笑。寫作手法：...mentioned...approached...fumbled動作鏈；Itwasnotlongbefore..時(shí)間銜接；Seeinghisfather...動作銜接；prettybirds...andflowers...景色描寫；grinningfromeartoear.現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨狀語最終自測：Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.但當(dāng)他掉在水里時(shí)，眼鏡掉了。泰勒先生嘆了口氣，然后迅速脫下濕衣服，把水?dāng)D了出來。當(dāng)哈利把衣服鋪在一塊大石頭上時(shí)，喬爾帶著他們半裸的父親走到一個(gè)出口前?？吹礁赣H用繃帶包扎傷口，喬爾感到怪怪的。一個(gè)想法像電擊一樣掠過他的腦海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他們怎么能繼續(xù)徒步旅行呢？“要是哈利早點(diǎn)停止和我爭論就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皺到額頭?！拔衣犚娏?！”哈利喊道，用燃燒的眼睛瞪著他?！癑ustcalmdown.”Mr.Taylorshouted,“Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.”“冷靜下來！“泰勒先生吼道：“我沒了眼鏡，我們需要一起努力才能找到路?！彼岬降貓D和指南針，男孩們不情愿地走過去，在背包里摸索指南針。沒過多久，他們就定位到了他們的位置，然后出發(fā)。喬爾很快發(fā)現(xiàn)自己是一個(gè)使用指南針的專家，而哈利學(xué)會了成為一個(gè)優(yōu)秀的讀圖者。不時(shí)地，漂亮的鳥兒唱著歡快的歌，怒放的鮮花讓孩子們屏氣贊嘆。那天晚些時(shí)候，他們還看到了一些山羊，甚至還有一只灰熊和一只鷹。這是一天中的亮點(diǎn)，他們談了好幾個(gè)小時(shí)，開懷大笑。語料默寫：脫下濕衣服_______________________把水?dāng)D了出來______________________把衣服鋪在一塊大石頭上______________________用繃帶包扎傷口______________________一個(gè)想法像電擊一樣掠過他的腦海______________________抱怨v.______________________眉毛皺到額頭______________________用燃燒的眼睛瞪著他______________________摸索______________________沒過多久______________________漂亮的鳥兒唱著歡快的歌______________________怒放的鮮花______________________讓孩子們屏氣贊嘆______________________看到______________________一天中的亮點(diǎn)______________________開懷大笑______________________答案：takeoffhiswetclothessqueezethewateroutspreadtheclothesonahugestonewrapthewoundwiththebandag