中考英語(yǔ)作文敘事記敘文專題復(fù)習(xí)指導(dǎo)省公開課一等獎(jiǎng)全國(guó)示范課微課金獎(jiǎng)?wù)n件

--記敘文(敘事篇)

中考作文指導(dǎo)1/60敘事記敘文寫作主要特點(diǎn)：記敘為主

稍加議論旁帶說(shuō)明或感想2/60記敘文記敘文用于記敘過去發(fā)生事件或經(jīng)歷，以寫人、敘事為主要內(nèi)容。它能夠包含歷史，游記，報(bào)道，回想，故事，瑣事等。這么文章也要有中心。普通從第一或第三人稱角度出發(fā)，表示自己或他人經(jīng)歷或感受，使讀者對(duì)事情十分明了以取得強(qiáng)烈感受。記敘文通常以普通過去時(shí)為主，依據(jù)上下文用各種時(shí)態(tài)。3/60

寫好記敘文基本要領(lǐng)1.頭緒分明，脈絡(luò)清楚2.突出中心，詳略得當(dāng)3.用活語(yǔ)言，準(zhǔn)確生動(dòng)4/60記敘文寫作注意事項(xiàng)一、交代背景文章開頭應(yīng)概括地介紹事件發(fā)生時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物以及事件等二、詳略得當(dāng)過多無(wú)須要細(xì)節(jié)會(huì)沖淡文章主題。所以，在細(xì)節(jié)選擇上應(yīng)注意選擇與主題親密相關(guān)內(nèi)容，從而點(diǎn)明文章中心。三、條理清楚記敘文普通按照時(shí)間次序或空間次序來(lái)描述，要求層次清楚、條理清楚。5/60

中考英語(yǔ)寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

一檔文（17-20分）寫出全部?jī)?nèi)容關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)，層次清楚，語(yǔ)言流暢，有句式改變，有復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，最少2-3個(gè)，基本無(wú)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，只有1-2個(gè)，或有少許因?yàn)槭褂脧?fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)而引發(fā)語(yǔ)法或拼寫錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義了解。

6/60Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition(作文)?7/60第一步：都要認(rèn)真審題，明確寫作體裁、要求和提醒關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition?(Haveadiscussion!)詳細(xì)做法：用筆勾畫8/60

假如你是王林。你所在學(xué)?！皭坌木銟凡?HelpingHandsClub)”將吸收新會(huì)員。你想加入該俱樂部，請(qǐng)依據(jù)下面表格和圖片內(nèi)容，用英語(yǔ)寫一封自薦信。

姓名王林性別男本人特點(diǎn)身體健康；學(xué)習(xí)刻苦；樂于助人；與同學(xué)友好相處“愛心”表現(xiàn)（見圖片）加入目標(biāo)1.…2.…例9/60要求：1.表示清楚，語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫；

2.關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)須包含表格和四幅圖片中信息，但不得使用真實(shí)姓名和校名等；

3.表格中“加入目標(biāo)”一欄內(nèi)容由考生自擬；

4.詞數(shù)：70左右。10/60第二步：列出寫作提要（Outline）。詳細(xì)做法：依據(jù)段落整理寫作關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)不要遺漏關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)！11/60WriteanOutlineIntroductionMainbodyConclusion{{Iwanttojoin…

本人特點(diǎn)

“愛心”表現(xiàn)加入目標(biāo)看表格看表格看圖自擬Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

能夠用英文或漢字姓名/性別易遺漏關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)！12/60自薦信Whatwillyouwrite？王林Whoareyouinthisletter?人稱:

IWhat’syourpurpose?加入該俱樂部時(shí)態(tài)：普通現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主Thinking:13/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.

I’dliketojointheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.Igetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.AndIcanalso

domoreforothers.

扣分原因一詞數(shù)不夠！14/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketojointheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.Igetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.AndIcanalsodomoreforothers.

Introduction本人特點(diǎn)加入目標(biāo)扣分原因二遺漏關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)！15/60WriteanOutlineIntroductionMainbodyConclusion{{Iamaboy…

I’dliketojoin…

本人特點(diǎn)“愛心”表現(xiàn)加入目標(biāo)Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

無(wú)法拿滿分！16/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketobeamemberoftheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.IgetonwellwithmyclassmatesIfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.Besides,Icandomoreforothers.YoursWangLin少了兩個(gè)主要部分，扣5-6分，只好11-12分！缺乏“愛心”表現(xiàn)也缺乏Conclusion17/60“愛心”表現(xiàn)(examples)Picture1

help…with…h(huán)elpclassmateswithlessons我I

oftenhelpclassmateswithlessons.

看圖18/60Picture2help…cross…“愛心”表現(xiàn)(examples)看圖

helpoldpeoplecrosstheroad

Ihelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadonmywayhome.19/60Picture3“愛心”表現(xiàn)(examples)看圖givemyseatto…

givemyseattopeopleinneed

Ioftengivemyseattopeopleinneedonabus.20/60“愛心”表現(xiàn)(examples)看圖Picture4cleanupthepark

helpcleanupthepark

Ioftenhelpcleanupthepark.21/60“愛心”表現(xiàn)(examples)1.

I

oftenhelpclassmateswithlessons.2.Ihelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadonmywayhome.3.Ioftengivemyseattopeopleinneedonabus.4.Ioftenhelpcleanupthepark.22/60ConclusionI’llbegladifIcanjointheclub.Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.23/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketobeamemberoftheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.IlikehelpingothersIgetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.Besides,Icandomoreforothers.YoursWangLinI’llbegladifIcanjointheclub.Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

andoftenhelpclassmateswiththeirlessons.Onmywayhome,Ioftenhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroad.Onabus,Ialwaysgivemyseattopeopleinneed.Sometimes,Ihelptocleanupthepark.不但關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)完整了，詞數(shù)也夠了。24/60寫作：第一步就是要認(rèn)真審題，明確寫作體裁、要求和提醒關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)第二步就是要列出寫作提要，依據(jù)段落整理寫作關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)。寫作前：確定人稱、時(shí)態(tài)寫作后：

？25/60作文中應(yīng)防止幾個(gè)常見語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤：時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤（扣分多，一個(gè)時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤扣分在1分左右）。中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)（不正確英文表示會(huì)讓整句不得分）。單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤及大小寫（單詞拼寫一定要過關(guān)）。介詞,代詞，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞或形容詞副詞不正確使用（對(duì)單詞詞性要熟悉）。名詞單復(fù)數(shù)（細(xì)心就能夠防止錯(cuò)）。26/60寫作：第一步就是要認(rèn)真審題，明確寫作體裁、要求和提醒關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)第二步就是要列出寫作提要，依據(jù)段落整理寫作關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)。寫作前：確定人稱、時(shí)態(tài)寫作后：

檢驗(yàn)27/60另外作文中書寫不規(guī)范，卷面不整齊也是要失分（中考中有0.5-1分卷面整齊分，不能丟?。?。28/60Writingskills（“寫”技巧）方法一:善用詞匯甚至善用高級(jí)詞匯29/60Whichisbetter?

他們?cè)诤┥下犚魳?。ATheylistenedtothemusiconthebeach.BTheyenjoyedthemusiconthebeach.30/60Whichisbetter?

我希望你能幫助我。AIwishyoucanhelpme.BI’mlookingforwardtoyourhelp.31/60Whichisbetter?

他們很早就到了。ATheyarrivedearly.BTheyarrivedasearlyastheycould.32/60Whichisbetter?

最終，他狗得救了，他感到很詫異。AHisdogwassavedatlast.Hewasverysurprised.BTohissurprise,hisdogwassavedatlast.33/60AIthinklearningEnglishisinteresting.BIfinditreallyfuntolearnEnglish.

我認(rèn)為學(xué)英語(yǔ)很有趣。

我們應(yīng)該保護(hù)環(huán)境。AWeshouldprotecttheenvironment.BIt’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironment.34/60方法二:活用各種句型Writingskills（“寫”技巧）35/60

她還小，搬不動(dòng)這么重箱子。ASheisveryyoung.Shecan’tcarrytheheavybox.BSheistooyoungtocarrytheheavybox.CSheissoyoungthatshecan’tcarrythe…DSheisnotoldenoughtocarrythe…36/60方法三:妙用關(guān)聯(lián)詞Writingskills（“寫”技巧）37/601.表示并列或遞進(jìn):and,aswellas,both…and,what’smorenotonly…butalso,neither…nor2.表示選擇:or,either…or3.表示轉(zhuǎn)折:but,however,although\though,afterall,anyway4.表示因果:because,so,therefore,since,for,asaresult5.表示條件:if,unless6.表示對(duì)比:instead,not…but,while,inthesameway,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand7.表示解釋:forexample,forinstance,suchas,thatistosay,inotherwords,totellthetruth8.表示次序:tobeginwith,firstly,first(ofall),second(ly),next,later,sincethen,fromthenon,finally,intheend9.表示強(qiáng)調(diào):also,besides,especially,actually,infact10.表示結(jié)論:allinall,altogether,inaword,generallyspeaking,inshort關(guān)聯(lián)詞(connectionwords)38/60Let’stry_____________Iamtired,Ikeeponworkingtillmidnight.Hedidn’tgotomovies,hewenttotheconcert______.Welikedoingkindsofsports_____swimming,runningandhiking._____,hestoodup.Thenhegotout._____,hewentback.____________,hesmiled.Though\AlthoughinsteadlikeFirstNextFinally\Atlast39/60Howdopeoplespendtheirvacation?Wemadeasurveyandhereisourreport.Accordingtoit,

alotofpeopletravel.

And

somepeoplestayathome.TheywatchTVorsurftheInternet.

Also

some

otherpeoplevisitfriendsorparents.

However,

afewpeoplework.

Comeandenjoyyourvacation.Peoplewhorelaxwellworkwell.連(connect)40/60Accordingtoit,mostpeoplechoosetotraveltogetawayfromthebusyworldduringtheholidays.Thensomepeopleliketostayathome,watchingTVorsurfingtheInternettohaveagoodrest.However,

afewpeoplehavetowork.

Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Comeandenjoyyourvacation.Peoplewhorelaxwellworkwell.美(beautify)Andtovisitfriendsorparentsalsomakesthemrelaxed.

Proverb（諺語(yǔ)）/saying41/60加諺語(yǔ)(Proverb/saying)可用于”beginning”和”ending”，多用后者。42/60方法四:妙用引文和例子

（多用于“thebody”）Writingskills（“寫”技巧）43/60青少年應(yīng)盡我們所能保護(hù)環(huán)境拯救地球。Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,

wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,stopusingnapkins,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.加例子44/60加例子在家里，我經(jīng)常幫助父母親干家務(wù)活。Ioftenhelpmyparentsdohousework,suchas

washingdishes,foldingtheclothes,takingoutthetrashandsoon.45/60結(jié)尾：感悟體會(huì)46/60Let’spractice!47/60例：請(qǐng)以“AVisittoaFarm”為題，依據(jù)提醒寫一次愉快參觀．48/60

Todaywevisitedafarm.Earlyinthemorningwemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogether.Thefarmworkersgaveusawarmwelcome.Thentheheadofthefarmshowedusaround.Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell！Atnoonwehadapicniclunchinthesunshine.Afterashortrest,wehadgreatfunsinginganddancing,tellingjokesorstories.Twoofusevenplayedagameofchess.Weenjoyedourselves.Thetimepassedquickly.Beforeweknewit,wehadtosaygood-byetotheworkers.范文

AVisittoaFarm49/60例–Atrafficaccident首段：首段概括交代事件發(fā)生時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物等信息

Aweekago,Iwitnessedatrafficaccidentinarainydayonmywaytoschool,whichstillsticksinmymind.50/60例–Atrafficaccident中心段：交待細(xì)節(jié)，重視在how;交待細(xì)節(jié)時(shí)應(yīng)注意事項(xiàng)？過多無(wú)須要細(xì)節(jié)會(huì)沖淡文章主題。51/60例–Atrafficaccident中心段賞析Itwasabout7:00onFridaymorning,(Oct.31st).（補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明時(shí)間）IwaswalkingthroughthepedestrianoverpassnearmyschoolwhenIwasshockedbythescreechofacar.（事情起因）Isawamanknockeddownbyablackcar.Soonmanycarswerejammedthere.IgotthereandfoundthatbesideablackBenzlayamiddle-agedmaninapoolofblood.（交代一些細(xì)節(jié)）Thestreetturnedchaotic.（事情大致經(jīng)過）Afteramoment,thepoliceandanambulancearrived.Thevictimwasinstantlysenttothehospital.（事情結(jié)果）注意空間移動(dòng)：Igotthere…52/60例–Atrafficaccident結(jié)尾段賞析

結(jié)尾段：可適當(dāng)發(fā)表一點(diǎn)議論

Inmyopinion,thepedestrianshouldhavetakentheoverpasswhencrossingthestreet.Besides,thedrivermighthavedriventoofast,regardlessofsuchbadweather.Anyway,Ibelieveaccidentsmaybeavoidedifwebecomeawareoftheimportanceofsafety.（結(jié)尾）

53/60一檔作文鑒賞

Lastyear,aterriblefluspreadacrossthewholeschool.Oneof

myclassmate,John/JaneDoe,becameavictimofit.He/Sheranahighfever,andordinarymedicinedidn’tworkonhim.

Thenewsquicklyreachedeverybodyinourclass.SomeclassmatesrecordedtheEnglishlessonsforhimsothathe/shecouldkeepupwithhis/herstudies.OurEnglishteachercalledonhim/herattheweekendssometimes.Withcareandhelp,he/shewassoonabletobeupandaboutandfinallycamebacktotheclass.

Fromthisevent,Ilearntwothings.Oneisthatwithlove,noillnessordifficultyisterrible.Theotheristhatloveandhelparetwo-waystreets.OurclassmatesofferedJohn/JaneDoekindhelppartlybecausehe/shehimself/herselfhadalwaysbeenahelpfulperson.SoIrealizethatwhenwehelpothers,wearehelpingourselves.54/60

Inthesummersportsmeetinglastyear,oneofmyclassmates,John/JaneDoe,suddenlyfelltothegroundandhurtherleftfootwhenhe/shewaspracticinghighjump.His/Herfaceturnedpaleandshowedgreatpain.

Seeingthis,ourclassmatesimmediatelycametoheraid.Theystruggledtotakehertothetemporaryemergencyroom.Oneboyuntiedhis/hershoeandappliedicerockstohis/herwound.Meanwhile,girlscomfortedherinasoftvoice.SoontheP.E.teachercame.Hecheckedhis/hersoundandtooksomeemergencymeasurestolessenherpain.Fifteenminuteslater,theambulancearrivedandshewassenttohospital.Luckilyenough,withourcareandconcern,John/JaneDoerecoveredquickly.

Suchanincidentimpressedeveryonepresent.Irealizethatloveandcarearethebestmedicineforaninjuredperson

55/60

LastFriday,myclassmateJohnwasabsentbecausehesuddenlycaughtaheavyfluandranahighfever.（時(shí)間、人物、事件交代清楚）

Afterschool,wethreevolunteerstudents,togetherwithourclassteacherwenttoseehim.Johnstayedinbedandhadarunningnose.Hetoldusthathewasanxiousabouthisstudies.Onhearingthat,wepromisedhimwewouldtryourbesttohelp.Therefore,inthefollowingdays,wearrangedourselvestoteachhimeverydayinturn,hopingtoensurethathewouldcatchupwithuswhenhecamebacktoschool.（條理清楚，因果關(guān)系合乎邏輯，細(xì)節(jié)描寫恰到好處）

Inmyopinion,nooneisborntolivealone.Weshouldlove,careandhelpeachother.Moreover,friendshipcanhelpdefeatdifficultiesmoreeasily.

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Asoldsayinggoes,“Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.”Itwassuchagroupoftruefriendswhomeltedmyheartgentlyanddeeplyatonetime.

Thisautumn,Iunfortunatelycamedownwithinfluenzabecauseofnothavingwellpreparedforthechill.Ikeptfeelingdizzyandhadaheadacheaccompaniedwithfever.Myclassmatesandteacherstriedtoarguemeintotakingagoodrestathome;nonethelessIwasterriblyconcernedaboutmissinglessons.Theyhandedmeaglassofhotwater,whichwarmedmyheartalongwiththeirsimplewords,“don’tworry,mydear,we’llhelpyou.”

Atlast,Iaskedforsickleavefor2daysandgotoveritsoon.Withtheearnestaidofmyclassmatesandteachers,Icaughtupwithothersbeforelong.

Doyouhavesuchafriend,orareyousuchapersonwho’salwaysreadytoofferahelpinghand?Onlywhenwerealizethemeaningoflifeliesinwhatwegiveratherthanwhatwegetwillwenolongerbelonelyinthismagicalsociety.Keepinmindthatloveisthebestpolicy.57/60

Toughasthesufferingis,wewillfeelmuchbetterwhenfriendsarearoundus.

Oneday,whenwewereplayingbasketball,anaccidenthappened—Lannesgotwrenchedinhisankle.Fromthepainfullookonhisface,weknewitwasserious.Withouthesitation,FenixandIraisedhimupandhelpedhimwalktotheclinic.Butunluckily,thedoctorwasout.Weknewifwedidn’ttakeactionatoncetheinjurywouldgetworse.Soweplacedsomecold-packonhisankle.Soonafter,thedoctorcamebackandgaveussomedirectionsandthenwetookhimtotheclassroom.

Wewillneverwalkalone.Wheneverwegethurtandfa