高三英語讀后續(xù)寫人和動物類+The+pet+lamb+講義

01文章原文

THEPETLAMB

Almostallthepossessionshadbeensoldtobuyfoodandclothingforthefamily.Atlast,nothingwasleftbutthe

pet

lamb.Atthethoughtofpartingwiththelittlecreature,Mrs.Grant

feltsadbecausethechildren

loved

itverymuch.Havingstruggledhard,shehadtomakeuphermindtosellthelamb.Butshecouldnotaskanychildtogoforthe

butcher.Finally,shewentherselfwithaheavyheart,draggingherleadenfeetandbargainedwiththebutcherforthesaleofDaisy.

Whilethechildrenwereall

playing

withthelamb,thebutcherandhisboycametothedoor.“YouseeIamhereforthelamb.”Saidthebutcherinaloudvoice.Hearingthis,onechildrantohermother’sside,andaskedwhatwashappeninginalarm.Mrs.Grant

gently

pushedthechildaside,bentdownandwasabouttotellthetruth.

"That'smylambnow,Charlie!"saidthebutcher'sboy,inaplayfultone,goinguptoDaisywitharopeinhishand."No,itisnotyourlamb.Itisourlamb!"saidCharlie,placinghimselfinfront

ofit.Buttheboy,pushinghimaside,threwaroperoundDaisy'sneck,andbegantodragthelittlecreatureaway.Thepoorlambbleatedverysadly.Thecryofgriefwhichfelluponthemother'searswastoomuchforher,andherheartsankwithinher.Inamoment,beggingwith

tearful

eyes,the

children

wereallaroundtheirmotherwithvoices

choking

withsobsfortheirlittlepet.“Praytellyourboytostopamoment,"shesaidinhusky(沙啞的)tonestothebutcher.Theboy,atawordfromthebutcher,stoppeddraggingthelamb,andthelittlecreaturestoppeditsbleating.Inatremblingvoice,Mrs.Grantexplainedtothemhowbadlyofftheywereaftertheirfatherdied.Shealsoaddedthatthekindbutcherhadgiventhe

money

forDaisy.Withthismoney,shecould

buy

herchildrenbreadtoeat.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的次數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；Paragraph1Butthemoresheexplained,thestrongerherchildrenbeggedforDaisy.Paragraph2Thebutcher,whohadbeenwatchingall,wastouchedinhisheart.

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文章注意原文情節(jié)概述：因家境貧寒，媽媽(Mrs.Grant)不得不打算將孩子們十分珍視的羊(Daisy)賣掉，雖然自己也十分不舍。為了不讓孩子們發(fā)現(xiàn)，她偷偷去找屠夫(Butcher)，但是在賣羊的過程中遇到孩子們阻撓，孩子們十分傷心，媽媽便跟孩子們解釋賣羊需要補(bǔ)貼家用接續(xù)部分發(fā)展方向P1段首語“媽媽越解釋，孩子們越想留下羊羔”；P2段首語“屠夫一切看在眼里，非常感動”；P1接續(xù)部分要寫出“孩子們懇求媽媽留下羊羔的過程”，這也是“屠夫非常感動”的關(guān)鍵；P2情節(jié)發(fā)展即為總結(jié)部分，結(jié)果是美好的，屠夫并沒有帶走羊羔，呈現(xiàn)溫暖和諧的場面（總結(jié)），一家人的生計也得到解決（首尾呼應(yīng)）。03

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原接續(xù)部分“No!no!no!”thechildrencried,“wedon'twantyoutosellDaisy!Wewon'thaveourdearlittlelambsold!Itisourlamb,andyoumustnotsellit,mother.Wewillrathergowithoutbreadthanhavethelambsold!”ItwasinvainthatMrs.Granttriedtomakeherchildrenseethatshecouldnothelpsellingthelamb.

Themoreshetalked,thestrongerdidtheypleadforDaisy.

Atlastshehandedbackthesilver,saying,"Icannotsellitjustnow,sir.Waituntilanothertime.Imusttrytokeepupalittlelonger."

Thebutcher,whohadbeenwatchingallthatwenton,wastouchedinhisheart;andwhenMrs.Grantofferedtoreturnthemoney,hesaid,"I'lltakeneitherthelambnorthemoney,Mrs.Grant."ThoughIamabutcher,Ihavenoharderheartthanothermen.I'llnotrobthechildren

oftheirpet.I'llbuyDaisyfromyou,andgiveitbacktothechildren.“Come,Joe,youmustnottakethatlamb.Itshallneverbekilledbyme.”Andashespoke,hisvoiceshook,andhedashedhishandquicklyacrosshiseyes.Daisywasatoncesetfree;andasthechildrengatheredroundandstrokedthepet,theirlittleheartswerefilledwithjoy.Bythekindhelpofsomefriends,thepoormotherneveragainfoundherselfsohardpressedaswhenshetriedtosellthechildren'spetlamb.注意：1.原版文章在各情節(jié)表達(dá)中語言描寫居多，且多為口語詞匯；2.因續(xù)寫部分評定標(biāo)準(zhǔn)仍然在于“表達(dá)”層面，所以句式的多樣化十分重要，但原版接續(xù)部分并未能體現(xiàn)句式多樣化；3.可以對原版情節(jié)發(fā)展做出修改，第一段可添加Daisy的描寫，可利用動作、心理、語言多角度重筆墨描寫孩子們不舍并懇求媽媽的過程，第二段可添加總結(jié)。04續(xù)寫文章分析—P1“Pleasedon’tsellDaisy,Mom!”thechildrensobbed內(nèi)容設(shè)置：孩子不舍（語言描寫：懇求）However,regardlessoftheirconstantpleading,Mrs.Granthadnoalternativebuttosellittosupportherfamily.內(nèi)容設(shè)置：媽媽堅持賣表達(dá)設(shè)置：核心動詞選擇havenoalternativebut;

添加介詞短語regardlessof;buttosellittosupportherfamily可以選擇用介詞dueto/withtheintentionof等表達(dá)因果/目的邏輯ThejoyfulmomentsDaisyandthechildrenhadspenttogethercrowdedintotheirminds,whichintensifiedtheirsorrow.

內(nèi)容設(shè)置：孩子不舍（心理描寫：回憶美好）表達(dá)設(shè)置：可以利用xxxcrowdedintomind作為心理描寫的句式；添加關(guān)系代詞that引導(dǎo)的定語從句（省略that）；添加which引導(dǎo)的非限制性從句WhileDaisy,

whosestartledgazesshiftedtothebutcher,crouched

quietly

underCharlieasifexpressingtheunwillingnesstoleave.

內(nèi)容設(shè)置：羊的描寫（狀物）表達(dá)設(shè)置：在狀物的場景中添加whose引導(dǎo)的定語從句是非常不錯的選擇；添加asifActually,theyalreadyregardedDaisyasamemberoffamily.DespitethereluctancetosellDaisy,Momstillinsistedonthebutcher'stakingthelambaway.內(nèi)容設(shè)置：雖然不舍，但媽媽仍然堅持賣掉Daisy表達(dá)設(shè)置：insiston后加入動名詞形式實現(xiàn)句式多樣化；添加despite表達(dá)讓步概念05

續(xù)寫文章分析—P2“Iwon’trobthechildrenoftheirbelovedpet.”theButcherdepositedthemoneybackontheMrs.Grant’swrinkledhands.

“Keepthemoney

tobuysomebread!”

內(nèi)容設(shè)置：屠夫沒有拿走羊羔并留下錢（語言描寫）表達(dá)設(shè)置：depositv.放置；wrinkledhands皺巴巴的手Confusedand

surprised,

Mrs.

Granthesitatedforamomentbeforeexpressingthedeepgratitudewithtearsflowingdown,“Thanksforyourkindness.”

內(nèi)容設(shè)置：媽媽表達(dá)感激表達(dá)設(shè)置：hesitate更能表達(dá)媽媽的困惑和對突如其來的好事兒不知所措；形容詞confusedandsurprised作評注性狀語表達(dá)情緒Thecryofgriefofthechildrengavewaytotheastonishmentanddelight.內(nèi)容設(shè)置：孩子情緒由悲傷轉(zhuǎn)為興奮表達(dá)設(shè)置：并沒有采取色彩比較濃重的大情緒表達(dá)，而是利用抽象名詞及核心動詞givewayto來表達(dá)情緒Theystrokedthelambaffectionatelyandtheysnuggledtightly.內(nèi)容設(shè)置：團(tuán)聚喜悅表達(dá)設(shè)置：動作stoke/snuggleWhatreallytouchedthefamilyofMrs.Grantwasthegenerosityandsympathy,onwhichtheemotionalfamilyreuniondepended.內(nèi)容設(shè)置：總結(jié)表達(dá)設(shè)置：介詞+which/whom結(jié)構(gòu)；總結(jié)表達(dá)中比較萬能的結(jié)構(gòu)；what引導(dǎo)的主語從句05

參考答案Themoreshetalked,thestrongerdidtheypleadforDaisy.

"Pleasedon'tsellDaisy,Mom!"thechildrensobbed.

However,regardlessoftheirconstantpleading,Mrs.Granthad

noalternativebuttosellittosupportherfamily.ThejoyfulmomentsDaisyandthechildrenhadspenttogether

crowdedintotheirminds,whichintensifiedtheirsorrow.

WhileDaisy,

whosestartledgazesshiftedtothebutcher,crouchedquietlyunderCharlie

asifexpressingtheunwillingnesstoleave.Actually,theyalreadyregardedDaisyasamemberoffamily.

DespitethereluctancetosellDaisy,Momstillinsi