2017中考一模（記敘文）【教師版】

第頁(yè)2019寶山一模Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic“MyPocketMoney”.（以“我的零花錢”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）（學(xué)校舉辦主題為“MyPocketMoney”的英語(yǔ)征文活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你就以下三個(gè)方面談?wù)勛约旱目捶ǎ︰sethefollowingpointsasaguide（短文須包含以下要點(diǎn)）1)Howmuchpocketmoneydoyouhaveeverymonth?2)Howdoyouusuallyspendyourpocketmoney?3)Howcanyoumanageyourpocketmoneybetter?（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇針對(duì)pocketmoney展開描述的生活類作文，要求講述自己零花錢的情況和更好管理零花錢的方式。本文開頭應(yīng)先引入零花錢這一話題，然后過(guò)渡到自身的情況介紹。在內(nèi)容較多的部分要注意層次和連詞。案例分析：此處添加學(xué)生案例范文范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：MyPocketMoneyAsfamiliesarenowlivingabetterlife,almosteverychildhassomepocketmoney.Asforme,Iusuallyhave300yuaneverymonth,whichIcanusetobuybreakfast，tobuysomereferencebooks,tohangoutwithfriendsandsoon.However,whatcanIdotomanagethepocketmoneybetter?Firstly，makingaplanatthebeginningofeverymonthcanhelpmedevelopagoodhabitofnotspendingmoneywastefully.Inaddition,keepingtheaccountscanhelptrackmoneyeasily.Inbrief,aslongasIfollowtheaboveways,Icanmanagethepocketmoneymorewisely.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①as;liveabetterlife自身情況介紹②asforme;300-yuanpocketmoney花錢方式③，whichIcanusetodo,todo,todoandsoon.管理零花錢④However具體方式一⑤First;makeaplan具體方式一⑥Inaddition;keepaccounts總結(jié)⑦Inbrief,語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：非限制性定語(yǔ)從句Iusuallyhave300yuaneverymonth,whichIcanusetobuybreakfast，… 定語(yǔ)從句有限制性和非限制性兩種。限制性定語(yǔ)從句是先行詞不可缺少的部分，去掉它主句意思往往不明確；限制性定語(yǔ)從句起補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明作用，是先行詞的附加說(shuō)明，缺少也不會(huì)影響全句的理解，它與主句往往用逗號(hào)隔開。關(guān)系詞分關(guān)系代詞和關(guān)系副詞，關(guān)系代詞that，which，who，whom，whose在定語(yǔ)從句中充當(dāng)主語(yǔ)，賓語(yǔ)，表語(yǔ)或者定語(yǔ)，關(guān)系副詞where，when，why在定語(yǔ)從句中充當(dāng)?shù)攸c(diǎn)，時(shí)間和原因狀語(yǔ)，關(guān)系副詞可以用介詞+which代替。本句為which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，和主句用逗號(hào)隔開，關(guān)系which可以代替前面的名詞也可指代整句話，本句中which指代300yuan?？梢栽谧魑闹杏脕?lái)合并簡(jiǎn)單句。詞典例句：Increasingteenagersarenowaddictedtoelectronicbooks，whichmakesparentsworried.越來(lái)越多的青少年沉迷于電子書，這讓父母?jìng)兒軗?dān)憂。（which指代主句）Ihavekepttheviolinfortenyears，whichwasboughtbymyfatherasabirthdaypresent.這個(gè)小提琴已經(jīng)跟隨我十年了，這是我爸爸作為禮物賣給我的。練習(xí)：Ericreceivedtrainingincomputerforoneyear,____________hefoundajobinabigcompany.A.afterthat B.afterwhich C.afterit D.afterthisBetweenthetwopartsoftheconcertisaninterval,____________theaudiencecanbuyice-cream.A.when B.where C.that D.which答案：B;A翻譯鞏固：我經(jīng)常忘了帶作業(yè)，這讓老師非常生氣。____________________________________________________越來(lái)越多的中國(guó)人能夠說(shuō)英語(yǔ)了，這對(duì)于中國(guó)的發(fā)展來(lái)說(shuō)是一件好事。____________________________________________________在上海高峰期的時(shí)候經(jīng)常會(huì)有交通堵塞，這給人們的生活帶來(lái)很多的不便。____________________________________________________1.Ioftenforgettotakemyhomework，whichmakesmyteacherveryangry.2.MoreandmoreChineseareabletospeakEnglish，whichisagoodthingforChina’sdevelopment.3.ThereareoftentrafficjamsduringpeakhoursinShanghai,whichbroughtmuchinconveniencetopeople’slife.developagoodhabitofnot(doing)…“養(yǎng)成(不)做…的好習(xí)慣”也可以用gointoagoodhabitof…；如果是“戒掉…的壞習(xí)慣”可以說(shuō)“getridofthebadhabitofdoing…”詞典例句：Weshouldpaymoreattentiontoourenvironmentinthehopethatitwillbebetterandcleaner.我們應(yīng)該更關(guān)注環(huán)境，為了環(huán)境變得更好更干凈。Wewilldonatethemoneytothestudentsinremoteareainthehopethattheywillhaveabrightfuture.我們將會(huì)把錢捐給偏遠(yuǎn)地區(qū)的學(xué)生，希望他們有一個(gè)美好的未來(lái)。翻譯鞏固：孩子們應(yīng)該養(yǎng)成節(jié)約水的好習(xí)慣。______________________________________________________________________________我小時(shí)候就養(yǎng)成了收拾用過(guò)的東西的好習(xí)慣。______________________________________________________________________________養(yǎng)成今日事今日畢的好習(xí)慣會(huì)讓你受益終生。______________________________________________________________________________IgotupearlyinthehopethatIcouldcatchthefirstbus.MyparentsworkhardinthehopethatIcanhaveacomfortablelife.Itwillbealifelongbenefitforyoutodevelopagoodhabitofnotputtingoffwhatyoucandotodaytilltomorrow.aslongas“只要”，用來(lái)引導(dǎo)條件狀語(yǔ)從句，比if的語(yǔ)氣更強(qiáng)。如果描述將來(lái)事件，時(shí)態(tài)也需要注意主將從現(xiàn)。詞典例句：Aslongaswehaveconfidenceinourselves，wecanachievewhatwewant.只要我們對(duì)自己有信心，就能獲得我們想要的東西。Iarguethataslongasyoutryhard，youcandoalmostanything.我認(rèn)為只要你努力嘗試，你任何事情幾乎都可以做到。翻譯鞏固：只要你能夠持續(xù)做一件事情100天，就可以把它變成習(xí)慣。______________________________________________________________________________只要你按照我給你的建議做，你就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)和同學(xué)和睦相處不是什么難事。______________________________________________________________________________學(xué)習(xí)去理解別人并不困難，只要你愿意認(rèn)真地站在對(duì)方的角度看問(wèn)題。______________________________________________________________________________Aslongasyoucandothesamethingfor100days，youcanchangeitintoahabit.Aslongasyoutakemyadvice，youwillfinditnotsodifficulttogetalongwellwithclassmates.Learningtounderstandothersisnotdifficult，aslongasyouarewillingtoseriouslystandinothers’pointofview.

二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019嘉定一模Writeapassageofatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Iwanttogive______agift”（以“我想給________一份禮物”為題寫一篇不少于60詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）在過(guò)去的日子里，你一定體驗(yàn)過(guò)收到禮物的欣喜和愉悅。在新年伊始，你最想給誰(shuí)送一份禮物，并談?wù)劄槭裁匆瓦@份禮物。（注意：1、在答題紙上將題目補(bǔ)充完整。2、短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.（以下表達(dá)僅供參考）Iwanttogivehim/herthegiftbecause...Itwillbeuseful/necessary/helpfulto...審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，這是一篇本命題作文。必須包括禮物的內(nèi)容和原因兩部分。案例分析：此處添加學(xué)生案例范文范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：IwanttogivemymotheragiftMymotherhasdevotedherselftoourfamilysinceIwasborn.AtthebeginningofNewYear,Ireallywanttogivemymotherarobotcleanerasagiftforthefollowingreasons:Firstly,sheistoobusywiththehouseworktohaveenoughrestsometimes.Thismachinecanhelphersweepthefloor,whichhelpshersavemuchtime.Furthermore,shewillhavemoreenergylefttodowhatshelikes,thesquaredancing,withthismachinehelpingher.Tosumup,thoughitwilltakeallmypocketmoneytobuyarobotcleanerasagiftformymother,IfeelsohappyImadethisdecisionbecausenothingismoreimportantthanmakingmymotherhappy.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入我出生以來(lái)，我的媽媽為這個(gè)家貢獻(xiàn)了很多（devoteherselfto）。給出主題②新年伊始，我想為我媽媽買一個(gè)掃地機(jī)器人作為禮物（atthebeginningof,robotcleaner）。解釋說(shuō)明③首先，她有時(shí)忙于做家務(wù)以至于沒(méi)有足夠時(shí)間去休息（firstly,too…to,bebusywith,enough+n.），這個(gè)機(jī)器能幫她掃地，同時(shí)也幫她節(jié)約了很多時(shí)間（sweepthefloor,savemuchtime）。解釋說(shuō)明④而且不用掃地的話，我媽媽能有更多的時(shí)間去做他喜歡做的事情：廣場(chǎng)舞（furthermore,haveenergytodo,squaredancing,withoutdoingsth）?？偨Y(jié)體會(huì)⑨綜上所述，盡管我要花費(fèi)所有的零花錢去買一個(gè)掃地機(jī)器人作為禮物給我的媽媽，但我很開心自己做了這個(gè)決定，因?yàn)闆](méi)有什么比讓我媽媽開心更重要了（Tosumup,though…(與but不能連用)，ittakesmetime/moneytodo,makeadecision,nothingisimportantthandoingsth）。語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)Furthermore,shewillhavemoreenergylefttodowhatshelikes,thesquaredancing,withthismachinehelpingher.with引導(dǎo)伴隨狀語(yǔ)，with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)可以分以下幾種:with+名詞+形容詞.表處于一種狀態(tài).Heoftensleepswithwindowsopen.with+名詞+副詞.Thereisatemplewithnotablein.with+名詞+介詞短語(yǔ).Theteachercameintotheclassroomwithabookunderhisarm.with+名詞+現(xiàn)在分詞.這種結(jié)構(gòu)表動(dòng)作的主動(dòng)和進(jìn)行態(tài).Theoldwomanlefttheherhousewithwaterrunningallthetime.with+名詞+過(guò)去分詞,這種結(jié)構(gòu)表被動(dòng)和完成.with+名詞+不定式,這種結(jié)構(gòu)表將來(lái)要做的動(dòng)作.Themanagerhasbeenbusythesedayswithalotofworktodo.詞典例句：Theteachercameintotheclassroomwithapileofnotebooksinhishand..老師手里拿著一摞筆記本進(jìn)來(lái)了教室。Thethiefwastakentothepolicestationwithhishandstiedtohisback.那個(gè)小偷被帶到了警局，手被綁在后面。練習(xí)：1.Withnothing_____home,theboywasafraidtoseehismother.take B.taking C.taken D.totake2.______productionupby60%,thecompanyhashadanotherexcellentyear.A.As B.Have C.Because D.With答案：CD翻譯鞏固：所有的燈亮起來(lái)，廣場(chǎng)看起來(lái)更美了_______________________________________________________________________________隨著這個(gè)問(wèn)題的解決，一個(gè)對(duì)人類很有用的發(fā)明被創(chuàng)造出來(lái)了。_______________________________________________________________________________Tom在教室前面做演講的時(shí)候非常緊張，全班的同學(xué)都在盯著他看。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Thesquarelooksmorebeautifulwithallthelightson.2.Withtheproblemsolved，aninventionwhichisveryhelpfultohumanbeingwascreated.3.Withthewholeclassstaringathim，Tomfeltextremelynervouswhenheaddressedaspeechinfrontoftheclassroom.過(guò)去分詞作后置定語(yǔ)theenergyleft“剩余的精力”在這里left為過(guò)去分詞，修飾theenergy，可以理解為theenergythatisleft.；leave也可以用來(lái)遺留，放在，所以left也可用來(lái)修飾名詞表示“放在…的…”詞典例句：Ispentthemoneyleftbuyingmymomascarf.我用剩下的錢給媽媽買了一個(gè)圍巾。Thepurseleftonthechairbesidethedoorisgone，whichsurprisedmealot.放在門旁邊凳子上的錢包不見了，這讓我非常吃驚。翻譯鞏固：我用光了錢包里剩余的所有錢。_______________________________________________________________________________你看到過(guò)放在抽屜里的一本集郵冊(cè)嗎？_______________________________________________________________________________這個(gè)瓶子剩余的水太少了以至于我們?cè)诖┰缴衬陂g必須節(jié)省每一滴水。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Ihaveusedupallthemoneyleftinthepurse.2.Haveyoueverseenthestampcollectionleftinthedrawer？3.Thewaterleftinthebottlewassolittlethatwehadtosaveevenadropofitwhenwecrossedthedesert.devote…to…致力于…/獻(xiàn)身于… 可以用來(lái)替換contributeto，但是devote為及物動(dòng)詞，后面必須接賓語(yǔ)，可以說(shuō)devoteone’slifeto或者devoteoneselfto等；另外，to為介詞，后面加名詞或者動(dòng)名詞。詞典例句：Hedecidedtodevotetherestofhislifetoscienceresearch.他決定把余生獻(xiàn)給科學(xué)事業(yè)。Howmanyhoursandhowmuchmoneydoyourteamdevotetothisproject?你們團(tuán)隊(duì)在這個(gè)項(xiàng)目上投入了多少時(shí)間和金錢？翻譯鞏固：1.很多老師把自己獻(xiàn)給了教育事業(yè)。____________________________________________________2.我整天的時(shí)間都花在這個(gè)模型船上了。____________________________________________________3.我發(fā)現(xiàn)投入大量大的時(shí)間去尋找我感興趣的和幫助我學(xué)習(xí)的圖書是很有用的。____________________________________________________1.Manyteachersdevotethemselvestotheeducation.2.Ihavedevotedthewholedaytothemodelship.3.Ifinditbeneficialtodevotealotoftimetosearchingforbooksthatinterestmeandbooksthatarehelpfultomystudy.二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019虹口一模Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic“Besidesstudy,Ialsopayattentionto…”（以“除了學(xué)習(xí)，我還關(guān)注……”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格）除了學(xué)習(xí)，你還關(guān)注什么？你怎么想的？怎么做的？請(qǐng)說(shuō)明理由。審題分析：本題圍繞學(xué)習(xí)以外的關(guān)注點(diǎn)展開，可以從個(gè)人興趣愛好入手。盡量回答每個(gè)問(wèn)題，如首先要在作文開頭點(diǎn)明課外的興趣愛好，再寫出為什么會(huì)關(guān)注這一愛好的理由（或好處），接著介紹自己平時(shí)是如何進(jìn)行這一愛好的，在行文時(shí)最好用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞連接上下文，注意句意通順合理。在寫作前可以先針對(duì)問(wèn)題列下提綱（以免寫后涂涂改改），在列下可以適當(dāng)用上的詞組增加文采，寫后要注意對(duì)拼寫，大小寫以及語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤的檢查。案例分析：Besidesstudy,IalsopayattentiontodetectivenovelsBesidesstudy,Ialsopayattentiontodetectivenovels.Topractisemythinkingability,Itookupthishobbyfouryearsago.Ioftenreadthesebooksinschoollibraryinmysparetime.Ithinkreadvarietiesofdetectivenovelscanbroadenmymindandcanimprovelogic.范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：Besidesstudy,IalsopayattentiontosportsAsaJuniorThreestudentunderstressfromstudy,ItrytoseekawaytorelaxandenjoymyselfsothatIcanbephysicallyandmentallyhealthy.Therefore,besidesstudy,Ialsopayattentiontosports.IchoosetoplaybasketballinP.E.lessons.Inthisway,Icanplaywithmyclassmatestodevelopnotonlyskillsofplayingbasketballbutalsoourfriendship.Ialsogojoggingafterclasseveryday.Irunaroundmyschoolafterclass,whichmakesmefeelrefreshed,energeticandmoreconfidentaboutmyself.Sportsteachmetobeahealthierandmoreactivepersontospendeverydayhappily,soI’mdelightedtofindinterestinthembesidesstudy.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①有學(xué)習(xí)壓力(stressfromstudy)，自我放松的方法(awaytorelaxoneself)，身心健康(bephysicallyandmentallyhealthy)，關(guān)注運(yùn)動(dòng)。介紹運(yùn)動(dòng)1及好處②和同學(xué)一起玩籃球(playbasketballwithclassmates)，發(fā)展友誼(developfriendship)，提高籃球技能(improveskillsofplayingbasketball)。介紹運(yùn)動(dòng)2及好處③慢跑(gojogging)，感到精力充沛(feelenergetic)，感到更自信(feelmoreconfident)?？偨Y(jié)④總結(jié)運(yùn)動(dòng)給我的好處：讓每天過(guò)得快樂(lè)(spendeverydayhappily)，讓自己更健康、積極(beamorehealthyandactiveperson)。進(jìn)行體育運(yùn)動(dòng)的其他好處：①helpmebemorefocusedonstudy②practicemytiredbodyandliveamorebalancedlife③beabletoprotectmyselffromdangerwhenwalkinginthedark④knowmoreaboutteamwork⑤getbetterscoresintheP.E.exams語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：which非限制性定語(yǔ)從句解析：which引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句的一種用法是，which前加逗號(hào)，指代逗號(hào)前一整句話，which在從句中作主語(yǔ)，可以翻譯成“這件事”，從句中的謂語(yǔ)注意用三單。含以上可以理解為，逗號(hào)后的一整個(gè)句子在修飾逗號(hào)前的句子，或是在補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明前一件事所產(chǎn)生的影響等等。詞典例句：Shegothomelateatnight,whichmadehermotherangryandworried.她晚上很晚到家，這讓她的媽媽又生氣又擔(dān)心。ScienceandtechnologyisdevelopingrapidlyinChina,whichmakesChinesepeopleproud.中國(guó)的科技正在迅速發(fā)展，這讓中國(guó)人們很自豪。翻譯鞏固：1.她喜歡交各種朋友并且對(duì)人友善，這讓她在人群中很受歡迎。_______________________________________________________________________________2.她喜歡讀古詩(shī)，這讓她十分熟悉中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化。_______________________________________________________________________________3.這部電影得了很多獎(jiǎng)，這使得這部電影在全世界聞名。_______________________________________________________________________________Shelikestomakefriendswithvariouspeopleandiskindtopeople,whichmakesherpopularamongthem.Shelikesreadingancientpoems,whichmakesherfamiliarwithChinesetraditionalculture.Thisfilmwonmanyawards,whichmadeitwell-knownallaroundtheworld.sothat引導(dǎo)狀語(yǔ)從句含義：為了……用法：sothat作為連詞連接兩句完整的句子，前一句是措施，后一句表目的，表目的的句子里常用“can”，“could”等情態(tài)動(dòng)詞。近義詞：inorderthat詞典例句：Hegoesovertextbookseverydaysothathecanbeadmittedintoanidealseniorhighschooloneday.他每日勤奮溫書，就是為了有朝一日能進(jìn)入理想的高中。Shecompletestasksefficientlyeverytimesothatshecanspendmoretimedevelopingherhobbies.為了有更多的時(shí)間培養(yǎng)興趣，她課后每次都高效地完成任務(wù)。翻譯鞏固：1.湯姆為了強(qiáng)身健體，每天都去健身房鍛煉。_______________________________________________________________________________2.為了能減輕壓力，他經(jīng)常聽輕音樂(lè)、讀小說(shuō)書。_______________________________________________________________________________3.為了能夠捕捉生活中的美，他經(jīng)常拿起相機(jī)在公園中拍攝鮮花的照片。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Tomdoesexerciseinthegymeverydaysothathecanstrengthenhisbody.2.Heoftenenjoyslightmusicandreadsnovelssothathecanrelievestress.3.Heoftencarrieshiscameraandtakespicturesoffreshflowersintheparksothathecancatchthebeautyoflife.Therefore含義：因此，于是。近義詞：thus,asaresult詞典例句：Theircarwasbiggerandthereforemorecomfortable.他們的車更大，因此也更舒服。Progresssofarhasbeenverygood.Therefore,weareconfidentthattheworkwillbecompletedontime.目前進(jìn)度非常順利。因此，我們很自信工作會(huì)準(zhǔn)時(shí)完成的。翻譯鞏固：1.他們從小一起長(zhǎng)大，因此，他們的關(guān)系非常密切。_______________________________________________________________________________2.水是生命之源，因此我們必須小心使用水。_______________________________________________________________________________3.人人生而平等，因此我們必須互相尊重。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Theyhavegrownuptogethersincetheywereyoung,andtherefore,theirrelationshipisveryclose.2.Wateristhesourceoflife,andthereforewemustbecarefulwhenweusewater.3.Everyoneisbornequal,andthereforewemustrespecteachother.二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019奉賢一模Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Amoving__________of2019”.(以“2019年，讓我感動(dòng)的___________”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)。盤點(diǎn)即將過(guò)去的2019年，你一定經(jīng)歷了許許多多的感動(dòng)：一句溫暖的話、一個(gè)會(huì)意的眼神，一份特別的禮物，一個(gè)溫馨的畫面請(qǐng)你選取最觸動(dòng)你心弦的部分，寫下來(lái)與大家分享。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）審題分析：本題適合寫敘述文，注意時(shí)態(tài)，重點(diǎn)是突出“moving”（感人的）的特點(diǎn)，還有注意事情發(fā)生在2019年，可以描述令你感動(dòng)的物件、事件或人等等，如一件禮物，一場(chǎng)電影，一本書，一個(gè)人，用描寫和敘事的方式把“感人”的特點(diǎn)體現(xiàn)出來(lái)，然后可以加些表示感情或態(tài)度的詞語(yǔ)增強(qiáng)文章的立體性，如moving,touching,unforgettable等等。案例分析：此處添加學(xué)生案例范文范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：Amovingpresentof2019Nowadays,withthedevelopmentoftechnology,mostofuswouldliketohaveamobilephoneasagiftbutwhatmyfathergivesmeisanotherone.WhenIgotintothelastyearofjuniormiddleschool,heboughtmeablackwatchinsteadofamobilephone.Whathetoldmeonthatdayisstillfreshinmymind.Hesaidthatifyougetupandgotobedontimeeveryday,yourstudyandworkwillbemoreefficientandorganized,anddonotdependonyourelectronicequipmenttoomuch,whichnotonlyencouragedmebutalsomovedmealot.Theclockisamovingpresentof2019.作文提綱：句子關(guān)鍵詞/句背景介紹①隨著...發(fā)展withthedevelopmentof,nowadays如今主題引入②whatmyfathergivesmeis我爸爸給我的銜接詞語(yǔ)③however然而,so所以,but但是,insteadof而是,notonlybutalso不僅而且具體例子④clock鬧鐘論點(diǎn)一⑤studyandwork工作和學(xué)習(xí),efficientandorganized效率地和有組織地感受⑥encouraged鼓勵(lì),moved感動(dòng)的點(diǎn)題⑦XXisamovingpresentof2019，2019年最感人的禮物拓展詞組：moreandmore越來(lái)越多的……devote...to貢獻(xiàn)……Itis+adj.+todosth做某事是……OnonehandOntheotherhand一方面……另一方面……timeandeffort時(shí)間和精力Greatthingsmaybedonebymasseffort.眾人拾柴火焰高語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：what引導(dǎo)主語(yǔ)從句結(jié)構(gòu)：What+從句謂語(yǔ)+主句謂語(yǔ)。解析：what在從句中是主語(yǔ)，“What+從句謂語(yǔ)”在主句里充當(dāng)主語(yǔ)。含義：其實(shí)包含了這一語(yǔ)法點(diǎn)的句子表明了what的2個(gè)特點(diǎn)，因?yàn)橹骶浜蛷木涞闹髡Z(yǔ)都與what相關(guān)，what可以代指物品或事情，具體用法可以參考例句。詞典例句：WhatmademeworriedwasthatImightmisstheschoolbus.讓我擔(dān)心的是我可能會(huì)錯(cuò)過(guò)校車。Whatattractedmewasthathesatinthesameseateveryday.吸引我注意力的是他每天都會(huì)坐在餐廳的同一個(gè)位置上。練習(xí)：Whatisimportanttome___________unnecessarytohim.seems B.seem C.has D.Are_________playsamoreimportantroleinstudyisrevision.A.It B.What C.Who D.Why答案：AB翻譯鞏固：1.發(fā)生在我5歲的事令我十分難忘。_______________________________________________________________________________2.對(duì)她來(lái)說(shuō)最重要的就是始終給她以支持的家庭。_______________________________________________________________________________3.我們都知道，由于科技的快速發(fā)展，世界正在面臨巨大的變遷，這導(dǎo)致人們不斷面臨新的挑戰(zhàn)。_______________________________________________________________________________1.WhathappenedwhenIwasfivewasveryunforgettabletome.2.Whatismostimportanttoherisherfamilywhichgiveshersupportallthetime.3.Whatisknowntoallofusisthatourworldisfacinggreatchangesduetotherapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology,whichcausespeopletofacenewchallengesconstantly.With引導(dǎo)伴隨狀語(yǔ)詞典例句：Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,it’sincreasinglyconvenientformodernpeopletocontacteachother.隨著技術(shù)的發(fā)展，現(xiàn)代人相互聯(lián)系變得越來(lái)越方便。Withthegrowthofeducationsystem,it’spossibletohaveclassesontheinternetandgraduatefromonlineschool.隨著教育系統(tǒng)的發(fā)展，在網(wǎng)上上課并且從網(wǎng)校畢業(yè)變得可能。翻譯鞏固：1.伴隨著人們對(duì)環(huán)境污染的擔(dān)憂，越來(lái)越多人開始從小事做起來(lái)保護(hù)環(huán)境。_______________________________________________________________________________2.隨著小說(shuō)的進(jìn)展，人們對(duì)結(jié)局越來(lái)越感到有興趣了。_______________________________________________________________________________3.手機(jī)的普及讓越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生開始沉迷于在手機(jī)上玩游戲、看小說(shuō)。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Withpeople’sworryaboutenvironmentalpollution,moreandmorepeoplestarttoprotectenvironmentfromsmallacts.2.Withtheprogressofthenovel,peoplegetmoreandmorecuriousabouttheending.3.Withthespreadofcellphones,increasingstudentsbegintobeaddictedtoplayinggamesandreadingnovelswiththeirphones.詞組notonly...butalso含義：不僅……而且……注意：并列主語(yǔ)時(shí)，注意就近原則；并列謂語(yǔ)時(shí)，注意謂語(yǔ)三單和時(shí)態(tài)統(tǒng)一。詞典例句：NotonlyyoubutalsoIamresponsiblefortheresult.不光是你，還有我對(duì)這個(gè)結(jié)果有責(zé)任。Shenotonlyenjoysreadingessays,butalsolikeswatchingTVprograms.她不光喜歡讀散文，還喜歡看電視節(jié)目。翻譯鞏固：1.這段回憶不光讓我學(xué)到一個(gè)教訓(xùn)，而且給我的未來(lái)指明了方向。_______________________________________________________________________________2.這份珍貴的禮物不僅讓我喜歡，而且有教育的意義。_______________________________________________________________________________3.不僅學(xué)生，老師們也應(yīng)該每日學(xué)習(xí)，以求每日進(jìn)步。_______________________________________________________________________________1.Thememorynotonlyletmelearnalesson,butalsotoldmewheretogointhefuture.2.Thisvaluablepresentnotonlywonmypreference,butalsohadameaningofeducation.3.Notonlystudentsbutalsoteachersshouldstudyeverydayinordertomakeprogressdaybyday.二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

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成長(zhǎng)對(duì)你意味著什么？長(zhǎng)大后的你會(huì)是怎樣？請(qǐng)以“當(dāng)我長(zhǎng)大后”為題寫一篇至少60個(gè)字的短文。（標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格）（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名，校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）審題分析：徐匯區(qū)此次的作文走暢想路線，話題給的比較明確，可寫的范圍也比較廣，切合學(xué)生的生活。相比去年的圖片分析類作文，今年的這篇文章確實(shí)比較容易下筆，學(xué)生只要言之有物，應(yīng)該不會(huì)有太大的審題偏差。本文開頭應(yīng)先引入長(zhǎng)大和現(xiàn)狀的不同，然后過(guò)渡到個(gè)人應(yīng)當(dāng)如何去做。在內(nèi)容較多的部分要注意層次和連詞。案例分析：WhenIGrowUpEveryonehasadream,Iamexception.WhenIgrowup,Iliketobeadoctor.BecauseIwanttohelpothers,andadoctor’sjobistosavepeople.Inordertobeadoctor,Iwillstudyharderthanbefore.AndIwilltrymybesttohelpothers,too.Ithinkbeadoctorwillbehelpfultoothers,soIwanttobeadoctorinthefuture范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：WhenIGrowUpIamalwayscuriousaboutwhatIamgoingtobeinthefuture.GrowingupmeansIcandomanyusefulthingstothesocietyandIshouldtakeresponsibilityformyself.Ifpossible,Iwanttobeadoctorinthefuturebecausetherearesomanypeoplewhoaresufferingfromvariousincurablediseases.IhopeIcantrymybesttocurethesepatients.Inordertorealizethisdream,Imuststudyhardernowandbemorematureandmoreintelligent.IamreallysurethatIwillmakeitcometruewhenIgrowup.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①Growing

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加形容詞的省略Ifpossible,Iwanttobeadoctorinthefuture…if+形容詞這類結(jié)構(gòu)通常可視為在if與形容詞之間省略了“主語(yǔ)+動(dòng)詞be的適當(dāng)形式”。Sendthegoodsnowifready.=Sendthegoodsnowiftheyareready.貨物如已備好，請(qǐng)即送來(lái)。

Iftrue,thiswillcauseusalotoftrouble.=Ifitistrue,thiswillcauseusalotoftrouble.這事若是事實(shí)，它將給我們?cè)斐稍S多麻煩。詞典例句：Ifnecessary,ringmeathome.如果必要，可往我家里打電話。Ifpossible,letmeknowbeforehand.如果可能，可在事前通知我。寫作建議：這類省略結(jié)構(gòu)中有的已構(gòu)成相對(duì)固定的搭配，ifnecessary(如果需要)，ifpossible(如果可能)等。翻譯鞏固：如果是真的，請(qǐng)立馬給我打電話_______________________________________________________________________________如果可能的話，我會(huì)采取醫(yī)生的意見及時(shí)做手術(shù)_______________________________________________________________________________我們?cè)敢馐跈?quán)總統(tǒng)在必要的時(shí)候使用武力_______________________________________________________________________________Iftrue,pleasecallmeimmediately.Iwillacceptthedoctor’sadvicetooperateontimeifpossible.Wearewillingtoauthorizethepresidenttouseforceifnecessarybecurious

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有些話你可能和自己的家人、老師、朋友或同學(xué)面對(duì)面的時(shí)候不好意思說(shuō)，或者錯(cuò)過(guò)了時(shí)機(jī)沒(méi)有說(shuō)，此時(shí)此刻你想對(duì)他們說(shuō)什么？請(qǐng)你舉例說(shuō)明為什么要說(shuō)這句話。審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇半命題作文，寫出想對(duì)某人說(shuō)的話，發(fā)揮空間較大，合理即可應(yīng)當(dāng)直入主題，寫出這個(gè)人是誰(shuí)，并且想要說(shuō)什么在內(nèi)容較多的部分要注意層次和連詞。案例分析：IwanttosaythankstomyparentsTherearetwopeoplelovemebest.Theyaremyfatherandmother.Inthemorning,mymotheralwayswakesupearlierandshepreparebreakfasttome.AlthoughIoftenwakeuplate,shealwaysaskmetofinishthemup.WhenIgobackhomefromschool,myfathercooksdinner.Hedoesn’thavecooklicensebuthecancookverywell.SoIlovemyparentsandtheygivealltheirlovetome.Iwanttosaythankstomyparents.范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：Iwanttosaythankstomymother Iwanttosaythankstomymother.IhaveagreatmotherandIloveherquitealot.Shegavemelifetoletmeseethiscolorfulworldandexperienceallkindsofpainandhappiness.Besides,shecaresforallthedetailsofmydailylifeandmystudy.Inthemorning,shegetsupearlytomakebreakfastforme.WhenIwaslittle,shepreparedmyschoolbag.Afterschool,whenIfinishmyhomework,shechecksitandpointsoutthemistakes.Sheisverycarefulandhelpsmealot.Iwilldomuchbetterinthefutureandneverletherdownagain.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①Iwanttosaythankstomymother主題引入②IhaveagreatmotherandIloveher分論點(diǎn)引入③shecaresforallthedetailsofmydailylifeandmystudy舉例說(shuō)明④shechecksitandpointsoutthemistakes總結(jié)⑤Iwilldomuchbetterinthefutureandnevermakeherdownagain.語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：quitealotquitealot非常，用來(lái)替換very，verymuchalot前可被such,what,quite,rather飾,詞典例句：Thisisquitealot.這真多Theyattractquitealotofattention.他們吸引寫作建議：可用于各類作文，應(yīng)用廣泛翻譯鞏固：我非常喜歡他。_______________________________________________________________________________Tom一看到我就給了我非常多好吃的東西。_______________________________________________________________________________我注意到很多人提問(wèn)這個(gè)方面，但是我的答案是一樣的_______________________________________________________________________________Ilikehimquitealot.Tomgivesmequitealottoeatassoonasheseesme.Inoticedthatquitealotofpeoplequestionthisaspect,butmyansweristhesame.pointout表示的是給某人指示方向，要點(diǎn)或錯(cuò)誤等，意思為指出，可替