高中英語續(xù)寫講評課件

讀后續(xù)寫注意：這八步并不是固定的，可以不按這個順序，也可以省略一些環(huán)節(jié)。readexplorewritecharactersplot…thelogicthemecharactersplottheme…Threestepsofcontinuationwriting

MyfamilyimmigratedtoCanadawhenIwasaboutoneyearold.Inthoseearlyyears,wedidnothavemuchmoney.Ourhomewasasimplerentedapartment,whichwasratherpoorlyfurnished.Therecertainlywasnotenoughmoneyforexpensiveoutings.Asaresult,ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresthatwecoulddoforfree,likepicnics,bikerides,andmyfavorite—tripstothelibrary.Thankstothelibrary’schildren’ssection,Ifellinlovewithstories—sillyones,movingones,andeveneducationalones.Iwouldhavemyparentsreadthebooksthatweborrowedoverandoveragainuntilweneededtoreturnthem,orIwouldpagethroughthemmyself,imaginingthestoriesinmyhead,eventhoughIwastooyoungtoreadthewords.

WhenIwasaboutfiveyearsoldandfinallystartedtoreadonmyown,Ihadacuriousthought:Iknewwecouldgetbooksfromthelibraryorbuytheminstoresifwehadthemoney,butwheredidbookscomefrom?Iaskedmymotherthisquestion,towhichsherepliedthatthestoriesIlovedwerecreatedintheimaginationsofpeoplecalled“writers”.Thesepeoplethenwrotethemdownsotheycouldbesharedwithothers.

Fourdecadeslater,Istillrememberthatmoment.ItwasasthoughIhadbeenstruckbylightning.Thenandthere,Iknewmypurposeinthisworld.Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters.Iwouldcreatestoriesandsharethemwiththeworld.續(xù)寫線索老師表揚回報寫動物、玩具典型的人和事獲獎作家

Para1Para2Para3Para4Para5Ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasures,suchaspicnics,bikeridesandtripstolibrary.Myparentsreadbooksforme.Ihadaquestion:wheredidthebookscomefrom?Mymothertoldmethat“writer”createdbooks.Fourdecadeslater,Iwouldbeawriterandsharemybookswiththeworld.Themainideasofeachparagraph審題失誤1：部分學生讀懂了作者喜歡讀書，但不清楚目標是成為一名作家.審題失誤2：沒有弄清楚作者的人設：我的人設：愛讀書，喜歡去圖書館借書看（Weborrowedoverandoveragainuntilweneededtoreturnthem）好奇（Butwheredidbookscomefrom？）目標明確（Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters）父母的人設：生活簡單快樂（Ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasures），媽媽善于溝通（SherepliedthatthestoriesIlovedwerecreatedintheimaginationsofpeoplecalled“writers”.）Whosestoryisit?Whatdowewant?theauthor

成為一名作家（Iwouldbeoneofthosewriters.Iwouldcreatestoriesandsharethemwiththeworld.）Whatpreventus?1.2.

小時候不會讀讓父母讀（Iwouldhavemypatentsreadthebooks，Iwastooyoungtoreadthewords.)沒有足夠錢進行昂貴的游玩(Therecertainlywasnotenoughmoneyforexpensiveoutings.)進行一些免費的娛樂（Asaresult,ourweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresthatwecoulddoforfree)在腦海中想象（Imagingthestoriesinmyhead）Whatbehindthestory?1.2Setgoals,andthenrefinethetargetforeverysteptotheaction.Practicemakesperfect.Howdowefeel?IParentsOurweekendswerefilledwithsimplepleasuresIfellinlovewithstories.Imagingthestoriesinmyhead,Ihadacuriousthought.

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主題升華Paragraph1:Asayoungchild,Ibeganwritingbymakingupstoriesaboutanimalsormytoys.

Paragraph2Afterafewyearsofconstantwritingpractice,myhardworkeventuallypaidoff.

Asayoungchild,Ibeganwritingbymakingupstoriesaboutanimalsormytoys.WhenIgrewalittleolder,Ifilledcountlessnotebookswithwordsandpictures.Ioftensharemystorywithmyfamily.Everyonecanfindpleasureinthestory.Atthattime,itbecameahabitinmylife.

AsIgrewintoadult,Ifellinlovewithwriting,whichbecamemywholeworld.Paragraph1:

Afterafewyearsofconstantwritingpractice,myhardworkeventuallypaidoff.

Whatmattersmostisthatmywritingskillshaveimprovedgreatly.Fromthis,moreandmorepeoplelikemystory,whichisagreatencouragementtome.Whenlookingbackonthestory,Ifeelthatifyoufindsomethingyoulovetodo,pleasekeepitup.Paragraph2:結(jié)尾寫法句式:1、對比強調(diào)：Itisnot...thatcount/matter.It’s2、倒裝句，引出結(jié)尾句：Never

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