中考英語(yǔ)寫作指導(dǎo)優(yōu)秀課件(共22張)

1、Better Your WritingBetter Your WritingJims parents work very hard and his family has become very rich. Therefore, a lot of pocket money is given to him by his parents every day. But to my surprise, not like others, Jim tries his best to save money as possible as he can instead of wasting money. The

2、reason is that he knows how hard they work to earn the money. Jim loves reading, and he buys books from the Internet. Sometimes he borrows books from the library in order to save money. Apart from that, he always brings water to school instead of buying juice. In addition, he never buys snacks with

3、his pocket money.Some classmates think that it is very strange for him to do so. But in my eyes, his behaviour makes a lot of sense to me. After all it is a traditional virtue to save money.From the point of my view, we are supposed to learn from him. Only in this way can we live a meaningful life.J

4、ims parents work very hard a文章的評(píng)價(jià)要點(diǎn)語(yǔ)言行文齊全準(zhǔn)確連貫語(yǔ)法選詞連接詞過(guò)渡性句子豐富文章的評(píng)價(jià)要點(diǎn)語(yǔ)言行文齊全準(zhǔn)確連貫語(yǔ)法選詞連接詞過(guò)渡性句子豐英文寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)（部分）第五檔: （13-15分） 能寫明全部或絕大部分內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；語(yǔ)言基 本無(wú)誤；行文連貫，表達(dá)清楚。 語(yǔ)法、詞匯、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、大小寫、時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確 分段、連接詞、復(fù)合句、高級(jí)詞匯使用恰當(dāng)?shù)谒臋n：（10-12分）能寫明全部或大部分內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；語(yǔ)言有少量錯(cuò)誤；行文基本連貫，表達(dá)清楚。第三檔: （7 - 9分 ）能寫明大部分內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；語(yǔ)言有較多錯(cuò)誤; 尚能達(dá)意。英文寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)（部分）Stage1:審Stage2:抓S

5、tage3: 擴(kuò)Stage4: 連體裁時(shí)態(tài)人稱斷句動(dòng)詞語(yǔ)塊結(jié)構(gòu)源句內(nèi)化造句并列順序觀點(diǎn)Stage5:改因果思 維 導(dǎo) 圖(mind map)Stage1:審Stage2:抓Stage3: 擴(kuò)Stage2017年河西一模作文Jim 是你的一位同學(xué)。請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的提示寫一篇短文，把他介紹給大家，并說(shuō)出你對(duì)他這些做法的看法。 （1）Jim的父母有錢，給他很多零花錢。 （2）Jim理解父母的不容易，不多花錢，想辦法省錢；他喜歡讀書(shū)，在網(wǎng)上買書(shū)，有時(shí)去圖書(shū)館借書(shū)；別人買飲料喝他卻帶水上學(xué)；從不花錢買零食。 （3）有人認(rèn)為他的做法很怪異，但。參考詞匯：零食 snacks 要求：（1）詞數(shù)：80 100個(gè)。

6、（2）開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 （3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 Jims parents work very hard and his family has become very rich._2017年河西一模作文Jim 是你的一位同學(xué)。請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的提體裁_ 時(shí)態(tài)_ 人稱_敘 事一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)his parents he IStage 1: 審體裁_ 敘 事一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)h2017年河西一模作文Jim 是你的一位同學(xué)。請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的提示寫一篇短文，把他介紹給大家，并說(shuō)出你對(duì)他這些做法的看法。 （1）Jim的父母有錢，給他很多零花錢。 （2）Jim理解父母的不容易，不多花錢，想辦法省錢；他喜歡

7、讀書(shū)，在網(wǎng)上買書(shū)，有時(shí)去圖書(shū)館借書(shū)；別人買飲料喝他卻帶水上學(xué)；從不花錢買零食。 （3）有人認(rèn)為他的做法很怪異，但。參考詞匯：零食 snacks 要求：（1）詞數(shù)：80 100個(gè)。 （2）開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 （3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 Jims parents work very hard and his family has become very rich._2017年河西一模作文Jim 是你的一位同學(xué)。請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的提1.“他（Jim ）的父母都有錢”2.“他們給他很多零花錢?！?.“他（Jim）理解父母的不容易” 4.“他不多花錢，想辦法省錢。”5.“他喜歡閱讀，在網(wǎng)上

8、買書(shū)”6.“他有時(shí)去圖書(shū)館借書(shū)” 7.“別人買飲料他卻帶水上學(xué)”8.“他從不花錢買零食”9.“有人認(rèn)為他的做法很怪異，但我.”斷句Stage 2.1: 抓1.“他（Jim ）的父母都有錢”2.“他們給他很多零花錢。trythinklikebuyborrowspend時(shí)態(tài)triesthinkslikesbuysborrowsspends動(dòng)詞Stage 2.2: 抓try時(shí)態(tài)tries動(dòng)詞Stage 2.2: 抓零花錢pocket money從- - - -借borrow.from語(yǔ)塊Stage 2.3: 抓_更喜歡做某事_prefer to do零花錢pocket money從- - - -借b

9、orrow句子結(jié)構(gòu)Stage 2.4: 抓Its to do sth. 句子結(jié)構(gòu)Stage 2.4: 抓Its to do sMake up the needed sentences Stage 3: 擴(kuò)1.他認(rèn)為水是最便宜的也是最好的飲（drinks）。2.他是一個(gè)好學(xué)生也是一個(gè)好兒子。Make up the needed sentences1.表示并列或遞進(jìn): and, as well as, bothand, not onlybut also, neithernor;2.表示選擇: or, eitheror;3.表示轉(zhuǎn)折: but, however, although, though,

10、after all, 4.表示因果: because, so, therefore5.表示條件: if , unless6.表示對(duì)比: instead, on the one handon the other hand;7.表示解釋: for example, such as, 8.表示順序: firstly, first (of all), second(ly), next, later, from then on, finally, in the end;9.表示強(qiáng)調(diào): also, besides, whats more, actually, in fact, 10.表示結(jié)論: altog

11、ether, in a word, generally speaking, in generalStage 4: 連1.表示并列或遞進(jìn): and, as well as, boStage 5 : 改1全：信息點(diǎn)全2簡(jiǎn)：句子簡(jiǎn)潔明了3準(zhǔn)：詞匯、語(yǔ)法、句型結(jié)構(gòu)、時(shí)態(tài)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)4暢：句子連貫、前后邏輯性強(qiáng)5精：首或尾處需開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山、畫龍點(diǎn)睛。Stage 6: 謄抄Stage 5 : 改1全：信息點(diǎn)全2簡(jiǎn)：句子簡(jiǎn)潔明了practising Here are two compositions written by someone among you on the paper, now lets correct

12、 it and make it better according to the above rules. Now discuss in groups, and then I will ask one group to give your suggestions. practising Here are two comp范文 Jims parents work very hard and his family has become very rich. His parents always give him lots of pocket money. However, Jim tries to

13、save money in many ways instead of wasting it. He thinks its not easy for his parents to make money. Jim likes reading. He often buys books on the Internet because they are cheaper. Sometimes he borrows books from the library. At school, many students like to buy drinks, but Jim likes to drink the w

14、ater that is brought from home instead. He thinks water is the cheapest but best drink. In addition, he never spends his money on snacks. Some students think Jim is strange, but I think he is a good student as well as a good son.范文 Jims parents work very2016年天津中考作文假如你所在中學(xué)的校刊近期開(kāi)辟英文專欄，征集發(fā)生在大家身邊的感人故事。請(qǐng)

15、根據(jù)以下提示，為該專欄投稿。 （1）在一個(gè)寒冷的早晨，你買早餐時(shí)看到前面的女孩買了面包和牛奶。 （2）女孩要離開(kāi)時(shí)，發(fā)現(xiàn)樹(shù)下有一個(gè)老年乞丐，他看上去又冷又餓。 （3）女孩走到乞丐身旁，把食物遞給了他。 （4）乞丐向女孩道謝，女孩微笑著離開(kāi)。 （5）你很感動(dòng) 參考詞匯：乞丐 beggar 感動(dòng) be moved 要求：（1）詞數(shù)：80 100個(gè)。 （2）開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 （3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 On a cold morning, while I was2016年天津中考作文假如你所在中學(xué)的校刊近期開(kāi)辟英文專欄，范文On a cold morning, while I

16、was buying breakfast, I saw a girl in front of me buying some bread and milk. When the girl was about to leave, she found there was a poor beggar under a tree. He looked so cold and hungry that the girl wanted to help him. So the girl went close to the beggar and offered her food to him. The beggar thanked her happily and the girl went away with a beautiful smile on her face.At that moment, I was moved. I felt the touch of something bright and friendly. We should learn from her and help the people in need.范文On a cold morning, while I wHomework :1. Correct the comp