小升初英語作文評講 家庭成員介紹課件

短文寫作評講

（一）家庭成員介紹篇短文寫作評講

（一）家庭成員介紹篇單詞拼寫錯誤：grandfapresentbueatifulgrandprentswormgrandfathergrandpaparentsbeautifulgrandparentswarm單詞拼寫錯誤：grandfathergrandpaparen短語表達(dá)錯誤1.myfamilyphoto【大部分同學(xué)】2.Iammiddleofmygrandparents.【齊嘉寧】3.sheisabout87-years-old.【齊嘉寧】Iamfiveoldyears.【楊銘】4.Helikesdrinkteaanddrawpictures.Heverylikesscience.【張晉祥】5.Sheisahandteacher.【張晉祥】6.Hesometimescomestohome.【張雅雯】aphotoofmyfamilyinthemiddleof....87yearsold87-year-old+n.likedoingsth.headteacher短語表達(dá)錯誤1.myfamilyphoto【大部分句型表達(dá)錯誤1.Mymotherissitbesidemyfather.2.I'mstaynearthetwooldpeople.3.Mygrandmaisleftforme.4.Thisismyfamilyitwarmandhappy.5.Ilovemyfamily,lovemyfatherandmother,lovemyfamily'severything,too.6.Mygrandmotherisnowork.7.Theyarelikeplayingchessverymuch.劉暢、王序瑤句型表達(dá)錯誤1.Mymotherissitbesid1.Thereismyfather,mymother,mygrandmother,mygrandfatherandI.2.Mygrandmotherisonmyleft,sheisveryold,sheisabout87yearsold.3.Theyoungwomanismymother,sheisverybeautiful.4.Thetopoftwopeoplearemyparents.表達(dá)有誤齊嘉寧周意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號大問題1.Thereismyfather,mymother1.Heoftenwithmytoplaying.2.Heveryhardly.3.Mygrandmotherveryfunny.4.Andbefrontofmeismyfatherandmother.5.Nearmeismyoldpresent.張家燃孔令通朱雨悅這樣的表達(dá)，老師也是醉了....1.Heoftenwithmytoplaying.主謂一致問題1.Heoftengototheothercountry.【張雅雯】2.Iamisstudent.【張雅雯】3.Thetwooldpeopleismygrandmotherandgrandfather.【張一萌、張家燃】4.Sheoftencookalotoffoodforme.【張家燃】5.Iamastudents.【張晉祥】主謂一致問題1.Heoftengototheot短文寫作評講

（二）好友介紹篇短文寫作評講

（二）好友介紹篇單詞拼寫錯誤：listeing【張家燃】favourit【張雅雯】quite【劉暢】kindly【周意】he'shobby【齊嘉寧】diffcult【周意】listeningfavo(u)ritequietkindhishobbydifficult單詞拼寫錯誤：listeningfavo(u)ritequi主格、賓格、形代傻傻分不清......1.Ilikesheverymuch.【張一萌】2.Hebesthobbyisplayfootball.【張家燃】3.HenameisPater.【楊銘】4.Herlooksverynice.Herlikesrunning,swimming......【張雅雯】4.SheistallerthanI.Shefavouritesubjectismaths.【朱雨悅】herHisfavoritehobbyisplaying....HisshemeHer主格、賓格、形代傻傻分不清......1.Ilike單三，又是單三....總是記不?。?.Shefeelthemathareverydifficult.

Shealwaysdrawpictureswithme.【周意】3.MybestfriendsisJim.【齊嘉寧、張晉祥】4.Heplaybasketballeveryday.【張晉祥】5.Hewanttobeateacher.Healwaysgotoschoolbybike.【劉暢】單三，又是單三....總是記不住！1.Shefeelth1.Sheishatemusicclass.【朱雨悅】2.Heisstudyveryhard.【齊嘉寧】3.Butheisstudywellthanme.【齊嘉寧】4.Sometingshereadingbookswithme.【張一萌】5.Weoftenplayingfootballattheschool.【張家燃】6.Onweekend,weusuallyreadingandwritinggettogether.【王序瑤】那些雷死老師的句子......1.Sheishatemusicclass.【朱雨悅1Helikessay"Paureisture".【張晉祥】2.Heverythin,butheverytall.【孔令通】3.Heisverykinds.【張晉祥】4.Hernameisone.【周意】那些雷死老師的句子......1Helikessay"Paureisture".【短文寫作評講

（三）人物介紹短文寫作評講

（三）人物介紹張晉祥1.Heisforty-year-old.2.andalwayshelpusEnglish.3.Hedoesn'tmakesmoke.4.Studentsarelikehisclasses.5.Welikeheverymuch.張晉祥王序瑤1.Heisgoodattalkwithstudents.2.AfterclassheusuallyhelpsuslearnEnglish.3.Welovehimverymuch.王序瑤朱雨悅1.Hisclassisveryinteresting.2.AndtheclassintheendheusuallyteachesusEnglish.3.Helikesplayingchess.朱雨悅劉暢：改錯的范文!!1.Hewellwithus.begoodwithgetonwellwithsb.2.Hisclassisveryinteresting.3.Afterclass,heusuallyhelpsuswithourlearnEnglish.4.Helikessportsandplayingchess.5.Thestudentslovehimverymuch.劉暢：改錯的范文!!張家然1.Heisbettertostudentsthanotherteacher.Heisgoodwithstudents.2.Welikeshimverymuchandwanthim

toteachusEnglisheveryday.3.Doyoulikeateacherlikehim,too?張家然張雅雯1.Istudyinaverygoodschool.2.Somestudentslikehimverymuch.3.Hisclassisveryinteresting.4.HeoftenhelpsuswithourEnglish.5.Helikessports.Andheoftenplaysthechess.6.Myclassmateslikehim.張雅雯孔令通1.AlltheStudentslikehim.2.AfterclassheoftenhelpsuslearnEnglish.孔令通齊嘉寧1.Afterclass,healwayshelpsuswithEnglish.2.Heneversmokes.3.Heiskind.4.WhataboutyourEnglish?齊嘉寧短文寫作評講

（四）敘事篇短文寫作評講

（四）敘事篇張雅雯1.Welooksomescienceitnice.Wevisitedsomerobotsinthesciencemuseum.Theyweregreat.朱雨悅1.WewenttoBeijing.2.Therewereallkindsofflowersandweatesomuchfood.3.IntheendweleftBeijing.Wewenthome.張雅雯劉暢：寫作再創(chuàng)新高！OnMayDay,MyparentstookmetotheHainan.HaiNanwasverybeautiful.Thereweremanytreesandbeautifulbeach.Wecould

swiminthesea,andplayedonthebeach,andsleptonthechair.Thereweremuchfruit

forexample(suchas)theMangoes,strawberries,andwatermelons.Theseawasblueandbig.Theskywasblue.WewenthomeinMay.Itwasaveryinterestingtrip.1st2nd3rd4th5th.....劉暢：寫作再創(chuàng)新高！張家然1.TheMaydaywascoming.ItwasMayDaylastweek.2.Wegottothegrandparents'houseatteno'clock.3.Wewenttoseeafilm.4.Thefilmwasveryinteresting.arrivein/atreachgetto張家然齊嘉寧1.Thereweremanypeopleinthecinema.2.Itwasaboutafunnycatandaclevermouse.3.WhenIsleptatnight,Idreamtofthecatandthemouse.thecatandthemousecameintomydream.齊嘉寧王序瑤1.OnMayDayIhadahappyandtriedday.2.Iwantedtocleanmyroom.3.Imadeabarrelofwater.trytriedtriedenjoyoneselfhaveagoodtimehavefuntired王序瑤周意1.Itookatrip.2.Afterawhile,wecamebacktohotel.3.Intheend,wewentshoppingandgohome.張一萌1.ThenwewenttotheSummerPalaceonWednesday.2.TherearesomepeopleinYiheyuan.周意孔令通1.Wecouldplayforalongtime.2.Hewasgoodatplayingfootball.3.ButIwasn'tgoodatplayfootball.4.Thisisaninterestingthing!孔令通短文寫作評講

（一）家庭成員介紹篇短文寫作評講

（一）家庭成員介紹篇單詞拼寫錯誤：grandfapresentbueatifulgrandprentswormgrandfathergrandpaparentsbeautifulgrandparentswarm單詞拼寫錯誤：grandfathergrandpaparen短語表達(dá)錯誤1.myfamilyphoto【大部分同學(xué)】2.Iammiddleofmygrandparents.【齊嘉寧】3.sheisabout87-years-old.【齊嘉寧】Iamfiveoldyears.【楊銘】4.Helikesdrinkteaanddrawpictures.Heverylikesscience.【張晉祥】5.Sheisahandteacher.【張晉祥】6.Hesometimescomestohome.【張雅雯】aphotoofmyfamilyinthemiddleof....87yearsold87-year-old+n.likedoingsth.headteacher短語表達(dá)錯誤1.myfamilyphoto【大部分句型表達(dá)錯誤1.Mymotherissitbesidemyfather.2.I'mstaynearthetwooldpeople.3.Mygrandmaisleftforme.4.Thisismyfamilyitwarmandhappy.5.Ilovemyfamily,lovemyfatherandmother,lovemyfamily'severything,too.6.Mygrandmotherisnowork.7.Theyarelikeplayingchessverymuch.劉暢、王序瑤句型表達(dá)錯誤1.Mymotherissitbesid1.Thereismyfather,mymother,mygrandmother,mygrandfatherandI.2.Mygrandmotherisonmyleft,sheisveryold,sheisabout87yearsold.3.Theyoungwomanismymother,sheisverybeautiful.4.Thetopoftwopeoplearemyparents.表達(dá)有誤齊嘉寧周意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號大問題1.Thereismyfather,mymother1.Heoftenwithmytoplaying.2.Heveryhardly.3.Mygrandmotherveryfunny.4.Andbefrontofmeismyfatherandmother.5.Nearmeismyoldpresent.張家燃孔令通朱雨悅這樣的表達(dá)，老師也是醉了....1.Heoftenwithmytoplaying.主謂一致問題1.Heoftengototheothercountry.【張雅雯】2.Iamisstudent.【張雅雯】3.Thetwooldpeopleismygrandmotherandgrandfather.【張一萌、張家燃】4.Sheoftencookalotoffoodforme.【張家燃】5.Iamastudents.【張晉祥】主謂一致問題1.Heoftengototheot短文寫作評講

（二）好友介紹篇短文寫作評講

（二）好友介紹篇單詞拼寫錯誤：listeing【張家燃】favourit【張雅雯】quite【劉暢】kindly【周意】he'shobby【齊嘉寧】diffcult【周意】listeningfavo(u)ritequietkindhishobbydifficult單詞拼寫錯誤：listeningfavo(u)ritequi主格、賓格、形代傻傻分不清......1.Ilikesheverymuch.【張一萌】2.Hebesthobbyisplayfootball.【張家燃】3.HenameisPater.【楊銘】4.Herlooksverynice.Herlikesrunning,swimming......【張雅雯】4.SheistallerthanI.Shefavouritesubjectismaths.【朱雨悅】herHisfavoritehobbyisplaying....HisshemeHer主格、賓格、形代傻傻分不清......1.Ilike單三，又是單三....總是記不??！1.Shefeelthemathareverydifficult.

Shealwaysdrawpictureswithme.【周意】3.MybestfriendsisJim.【齊嘉寧、張晉祥】4.Heplaybasketballeveryday.【張晉祥】5.Hewanttobeateacher.Healwaysgotoschoolbybike.【劉暢】單三，又是單三....總是記不?。?.Shefeelth1.Sheishatemusicclass.【朱雨悅】2.Heisstudyveryhard.【齊嘉寧】3.Butheisstudywellthanme.【齊嘉寧】4.Sometingshereadingbookswithme.【張一萌】5.Weoftenplayingfootballattheschool.【張家燃】6.Onweekend,weusuallyreadingandwritinggettogether.【王序瑤】那些雷死老師的句子......1.Sheishatemusicclass.【朱雨悅1Helikessay"Paureisture".【張晉祥】2.Heverythin,butheverytall.【孔令通】3.Heisverykinds.【張晉祥】4.Hernameisone.【周意】那些雷死老師的句子......1Helikessay"Paureisture".【短文寫作評講

（三）人物介紹短文寫作評講

（三）人物介紹張晉祥1.Heisforty-year-old.2.andalwayshelpusEnglish.3.Hedoesn'tmakesmoke.4.Studentsarelikehisclasses.5.Welikeheverymuch.張晉祥王序瑤1.Heisgoodattalkwithstudents.2.AfterclassheusuallyhelpsuslearnEnglish.3.Welovehimverymuch.王序瑤朱雨悅1.Hisclassisveryinteresting.2.AndtheclassintheendheusuallyteachesusEnglish.3.Helikesplayingchess.朱雨悅劉暢：改錯的范文!!1.Hewellwithus.begoodwithgetonwellwithsb.2.Hisclassisveryinteresting.3.Afterclass,heusuallyhelpsuswithourlearnEnglish.4.Helikessportsandplayingchess.5.Thestudentslovehimverymuch.劉暢：改錯的范文!!張家然1.Heisbettertostudentsthanotherteacher.Heisgoodwithstudents.2.Welikeshimverymuchandwanthim

toteachusEnglisheveryday.3.Doyoulikeateacherlikehim,too?張家然張雅雯1.Istudyinaverygoodschool.2.Somestudentslikehimverymuch.3.Hisclassisveryinteresting.4.HeoftenhelpsuswithourEnglish.5.Helikessports.Andheoftenplaysthechess.6.Myclassmateslikehim.張雅雯孔令通1.AlltheStudentslikehim.2.AfterclassheoftenhelpsuslearnEnglish.孔令通齊嘉寧1.Afterclass,healwayshelpsuswithEnglish.2.Heneversmokes.3.Heiskind.4.WhataboutyourEnglish?齊嘉寧短文寫作評講

（四）敘事篇短文寫作評講

（四）敘事篇張雅雯1.Welooksomescienceitnice.Wevisitedsomerobotsinthesciencemuseum.Theyweregreat.朱雨悅1.WewenttoBeijing.2.Therewereallkindsofflowersandweatesomuchfood.3.IntheendweleftBeijing.Wewenthome.張雅雯劉暢：寫作再創(chuàng)新高！OnMayDay,MyparentstookmetotheHainan.HaiNanwasverybeautiful.Thereweremanytreesandbeautifulbeach.Wecould

swiminthesea,andplayedonthebeach,andsleptont