【省級(jí)公開課課件】高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練

題目：讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩端，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip

icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis

parents

andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized

pool

forthebigswimmeet.Whenhis

race

cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust

won

firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup."Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Ikepttrying911,redialingevenasIpickedupspeed.

Tomydisappointment,thecellphonestillhadnosignal.Iwasworriedsick.

(建議收藏，因?yàn)橛泻芏鄨?chǎng)合可以用到)Icontinuedclimbingup,despitebeingoutofbreath.Whenapproachingthetop,Ieventuallydialed911andtoldthemwhathadhappenedtomyhusbandandwherewewere.ThenIretracedmystepsandreturnedthephonetotheowner..ItbrokemyhearttoseeMike’spainedexpression.Stayingonthefreezingmountainside,wehadnothingtodobutwaitforrescue.Tomakemattersworse,acoldwindwasblowingfromthenorth.Atlast,arangerappeared,shoulderingagreenbackpack.HeexaminedMike’slegcarefullyandmade

aquickandsimpletreatmentofhisinjury.Shortlyafterwardsseveralmorerescuerscame.TheycarriedMikeonastretcher

tothefootofthemountainandtookhimintotheambulancewhichhadwaitedthereforquitesometime.Fortunately,afterthreemonths’stayinhospital,Mikewaswellenoughtobeallowedtoleave.OurheartsswelledwithgratitudetothepeoplewhohelpedMikeintheaccident.It

was

the

last

meet

of

the

season,

and

Mike

wasn’t

sure

what

to

expect.He

felt

healthyagain,but

he

didn’t

know

if

he

still

had

any

speed

in

the

pool.注意:1.

所續(xù)寫短文的字?jǐn)?shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。Paragraph

1:Ashe

drove

into

the

water,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Paragraph

2:His

jaw

dropped

as

he

realized

he

had

beaten

his

own

best

time

,and

everyone

else

too..第一步：Analyzethestory：5Rs解讀故事1.Readforcharacters:

Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforplot:(故事明線)3.Readforemotionalchanges:（情感暗線）Whenhisracecameup,MikewasconfidentMikewasfeelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.4.Readforconflict/problems：

IcecreamandMike’sperformance:Whether

isitaluckycharm

5.Readfortheme

WhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessin

swimming?第二步：4句定框架

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbodyy.....................................................................................Hedashedtothefinishline.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloomm........................................................................................ItwasnotuntilthenthatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.第二步：4句定框架

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Hedashedtothefinishline.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.ItwasnotuntilthenthatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence./ItwasnotAbutBthatcontributedtohissuccess.Step1:先把最后一句寫好，即：主題句Step2:再把銜接句寫好，即第一段的最后一句：Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:緊接著每段的提示語(yǔ)句寫角色的情感：接下來就是把每段的中間補(bǔ)充完整，記住三大原則：1.Action—Response原則：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其它角色的一系列反應(yīng)的。每段對(duì)話1-2句，不一定兩個(gè)人都要說話，無(wú)聲的動(dòng)作也是一種response.2.Conflict—Solution原則：一般而言第二段會(huì)有問題的solution，但本文solution在所給文章中就已經(jīng)有了。同時(shí)思考：能否在第一段出現(xiàn)一個(gè)問題，然后把它解決了或者沒有解決。一方面是增加看點(diǎn)，另一方面也是給第二段鋪墊。3.Negative—Positive原則：寫作中一定要體現(xiàn)情感的變化，無(wú)論前面是怎樣的變化，最終都是積極的。最終：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Wheneverhecameupforabreath,hecouldseethataboywasaheadofhim.Determinedtoovertakehim,Mikefoundthepowerinhismuscles.Heswamfasterandfaster,speedinguptowardsthefinishinglinewithallhisstrength.Justafewsecondslater,ashishandtouchedtheedgeofthepool,theracewasover.Hequicklyliftedhisswimglassesoffhisheadandlookingaroundfortheelectronicboardeagerly.Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Mikehadwontherace.Hejumpedupanddowninthepool,beatingthewaterwildly.Amazedattheresult,theaudienceandhisteammatescouldn’tstopclappingandcheering.Hisparentsalsogrinnedfromeartoear.“Hey,son,let’sgoandhavesomeofyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisfather.“Thanks,Dad,butI’llpassontheicecream;it’snotsuchaluckycharmafterall!”最終：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace,”thoughthe,histeethclenched(closetightly)andhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.（內(nèi)心獨(dú)白）3.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast(zoom/speed嗖嗖聲),whichstartled(surprise)him.（心情變化）4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpounded(beat)madlyandhismindwentblank.（解釋心情變化和問題）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather’sencouragingsmile.（問題的解決方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.（銜接句）Mike’sjawdro