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ContinuationWritingContent?Language?Whatdifficultiesareyoufacedwithincontinuationwriting?評分時,應(yīng)主要從內(nèi)容、詞匯和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個方面考慮,具體為:(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的完整性,以及與原文情境的融洽度;(2)所使用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性;
Whatmakesagoodcontinuationwriting?Assessment
Criteria
coherent(wellconnected)
accurate/rich/vividlogicalandreasonableStep1
AnalyzethestoryHowtoplot?AnalysisofTeachoWhenWhatWReadfortheelementsandmainideaThefeelingofthemaincharacter.BeginningClimaxEndingPara1:Mariaknewherneighbor,Mrs.Hernandez'sroutineandtheyaregoodfriends.Para2:MariadidnotseeMrs.HernandezasusualPara3:Mariatoldthattoherfamily.Para4:ThenextMoring,Mariastilldidn’tseeMrs.Hernandez.Para1:Maria’smotheragreedtogowithworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouseworriedfriendlyalittleworriedmoreworried1.Readfortheplot&emotionalchangePara2:Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Mainideaofthestory
a(n)______,_______,schoolgirlMMMMariaMrs.Hernandez
a_________neighborneighbor&goodfriends2.ReadforCharactersalwaysenjoytheirsmalltalksandspecially-madecookiesfromherneighbor.Alwayssmiledandstoppedtochat,andgaveMairaaboxofherspecially-madecookieswithanote.warm-heartedcaringkindQuestion:
WhydidMrs.Hernandezandherdogfailtoshowupattheregulartime?Step1
Analyzethestory
Step2Frameyouressaywith2givensentences
Howtoplot?Para.1:Maria’smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor’shouse.①
HowdidMariamakesurewhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathomeornot?②
HowwasMrs.Hernandezandherdog?Whathappenedtothem?③whatdidMariaandhermotherdo?
Para.2:Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Momentslater,somedoctorsarrivedinanambulance.
①Whatdidthedoctorsdo?②Whatdidthedoctorssay?③What’sthereactionofMaria、hermotherandtheneighbor?④Theending.(Theyphonedthehospital)(details)knockthedoorbutnobodyanwsered(maybesomethingterriblehappenedtoher)(expressingherconcernforMrs.Hernandez)anydetailscanbereusedtothetextSinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”CoherenceBywritingthearticle,thewriterintendsto______describeaterribleexperienceofMrs.Hernandez
highlightanactofkindnessandthefriendshipbetweenneighbors
It'swiseandnecessarytoshareastorywithabrightandpositivetheme.3.Readforthetheme
thethemePrinciple:Positive1.Careisjustlikethequilt(被子)inthecoldnightthatcangivewarmth.2.Peoplecometotheirneighborsintrouble.人到難處鄰里來。3.Loveandkindnesscanworkwonders.ContinuationWriting
Para.1:Maria'smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouse.
Mariacametothehouseandrangthebelltofind_outwhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathome.MariasawthedogMarisolandMrs.Hernandezlyingonthe___floor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.______________________________________________________________________________________________OrganizelanguagewithEASELinguisticdescription:Emotion,Action,Speech,EnvironmentHowtowrite?(EASE:emotion+actions+speech+environment
)MariacometothehouseandrangthebelltofindoutwhetherMrs.Hernandezwasathome.Peer:tolookcloselyorcarefullyatsth,especiallywhenyoucannotseeitclearlyUneasy,fearful,nervous,anxious,concerned,MariasawthedogMarisol,andMrs.Hernandezlyingonthefloor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.
JumpleaptoitsfeetwagthetailleanagainstthefloorSprawlonthebedlieflatonone'sback
AstheyapproachedMrs.Hernandez’shouse,Mariafeltuneasy,Sherangthedoorbellseveraltimes.Maria’smotherrepeatedlycalledouttoMrs.Hernandez.Inside,Marisolbegantobark.“somethingterriblemusthappentoMrs.Hernandez”,Mariaspoketohermother.Feelingextremelyfearful,Mariapushedasidethebushesbythefrontwindowandpeeredinside.Para.1:Maria'smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor'shouse.2.MariasawthedogMarisolandMrs.Hernandezlyingonthefloor.Sheandhermotherrangthehospital.ThefirstthingshesawwasMarisol,jumpingexcitedlyandbarkingdesperately.ThenshesawMrs.Hernandez’smotionlessbodysprawledonthefloor.Mariafelthelpless.“Mom,”shescreamed,“gethelp!”Maria’smotherrushedtoaneighbor’shouseandtelephonedthehospital.1.Useenvironmentaldescriptionstoimpressreaders.2.Useactionstodevelopthestoryandshowfeelings.4.Userich/accuratelanguagetomakeitvividandauthentic.Writingguidelines3.Useinnerspeechanddialoguesto
illustratefeelingsandthreadeventHomework:FinishPara2.Para.2:
3.Mrs.Hernandezfelloverherselfandhurtherself.Mariaanhermothervisitedherinthehospital.
TheydiscoveredthatMrs.Hernandezhadslippedandbrokenherhip,andtheytookhertohospitalatonce.Thatafternoon,Mariaandhermotherdroppedbythehospital.
AnursesaidMaria’sconcernforherneighbor’ssafetyhadsavedMrs.Hernandez’slife.
ShesaidMrs.Hernandezwouldrecovercompletely.SinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”Slip,falloveroneselfhaveafallCoherenceAppreciationMaria’smotheragreedtogowithherworrieddaughtertotheirneighbor’shouse.
AstheyapproachedMrs.Hernandez’shouse,Mariafeltuneasy.Sherangthedoorbellseveraltimes.Maria’smotherrepeatedlycalledouttoMrs.Hernandez.Inside,Marisolbegantobark.Nowextremelyfearful,Mariapushedasidethebushesbythefrontwindowandpeeredinside.ThefirstthingshesawwasMarisol,jumpingexcitedlyandbarkingdesperately.ThenshesawMrs.Hernandez’smotionlessbodysprawledonthefloor.Mariafelthelpless.“Mom,”shescreamed,“gethelp!”Maria’smotherrushedtoaneighbor’shouseandtelephonedthehospital.Then,Mariaandhermotherwaitedthereanxiously.Momentslater,somedoctorsarrivedinanambulance.TheydiscoveredthatMrs.Hernandezhadslippedandbrokenherhip,andtheytookhertohospitalatonce.Thatafternoon,Mariaandhermotherdroppedbythehospital.AnursesaidMaria’sconcernforherneighbor’ssafetyhadsavedMrs.Hernandez’slife.ShesaidMrs.Hernandezwouldrecovercompletely.SinceMrs.Hernandezwasasleep,Marialefthersomecookieswithanotethatread:“TomygoodfriendMrs.Hernandez:Feelbetter,I’lllookafterMarisol,andImissyou—Maria.”評分細(xì)則維度序號評價項目立意1緊扣主題、弘揚正能量2結(jié)尾、完整邏輯3邏輯清晰、順承上文4與段首句銜接合理內(nèi)容5適當(dāng)?shù)挠行υ?場景描寫7修辭手法8人物塑造外貌9心理10動作維度序號評價項目語言11時態(tài)正確12詞匯準(zhǔn)確、豐富、地道13有多種高級句式14有效使用語句連接15拼寫、大小寫、標(biāo)點16150詞17書寫干凈、整潔、美觀7個不:一不增加新人物;二不增加旁支情節(jié);三不用過多對話;四不能負(fù)能量結(jié)局;五不在文末設(shè)置懸念;六不偏高原文主題;七不違背邏輯常理Thanksforyourlistening!Mariaknewherneighbor'sroutine.Everyday,Mrs.HernandezwalkedherdogMarisolpastMaria’shouse,usuallyJustasMariawashurryingforschoolinthemorningandagainwhenMariawasreturningintheafternoon.Mrs.Hernandez,alwayssmiling,alwaysstoppedtochat.Mariaenjoyedtheirsmalltalks.ThenonedayMrs.HernandezdiscoveredthatMarialikehomemadecookies.Fromthenon,shegaveMariaaboxofherspecially-madecookieswithanotethatread,”ToMaria-mygoodfriend!”O(jiān)necoldNovembermorningwhenMarialeftforschool,shedidn’tseeMrs.HernandezandMarisol.Mariadidn'tknowwhy.Thatafternoonherneighboragainfailedtoappearattheregulartime.Mariabecamealittleworried.AsshewalkedbyMrs.Hernandez'shouse,shelookedatthehousecarefullyandsawnothingunusual."Mrs.Hernandezjustisn'thometoday,Iguess,"shespoketoherself.Laterthatnight,MariatoldherparentsandherbrotherRamonaboutnotseeingMrs.Hernandez.Sheaskedthemiftheyknewwheretheirneighborhadgone.WhileMariawasworriedRamonthoughtthatnothingwaswrong.Maria'smotheralsotriedtomakeMariafeelbetter:"Sheprobablywenttoseeadoctor.Ormaybeshesinanothercityvisitingherdaughter"Still,Mariawasnotsatisfied.SheaskedherparentsifperhapssheshouldknockonMrs.Hernandez'sdoor.Maria'sfatherwasnotworriedeither.Hethoughtthattheyshouldn'tbotherMrs.Hernandez.“Maria,honey,I'mcertainshesjustfine.Weneedn'tspendtimeworryingabouther.
Thenextmorning,Mariastilldidn'tseeMrs.Hernandez.MariabecameevenmoreworriedInsteadofwaitingfortheschoolbus,sherushedbackhome.Maria'smotherwaswashingthebreakfastdishes."Ididn'tseeMrs.Hernandezagainthismorning,andnowI'mterriblyworriedabouther."Mariasaid."Shedidn'ttalkaboutgoingaway,soIwanttocheckonherbeforegoingtoschool.Ihopeyou'llcomewithme.
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