重慶英語高考書面表達評講課件

書面表達評講探討重慶市高考英語考試說明中對書面表達的要求：

要求考生根據(jù)所給提示與要求進行書面表達。

考生應能：

1.在一定的語境中準確使用英語語法和詞匯；

2.使用一定的句型、詞匯，清楚、連貫地用英語表達自己的意思。

高考英語書面表達評分標準明確了各個檔次的要求和給分范圍,其中高分檔次的第五檔和第四檔都有這樣的要求:覆蓋所有主要內(nèi)容要點;應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯;使用了較復雜的結構或較高級的詞匯;有效地使用了語句間的連接成分,使全文結構緊湊連貫。Open

writing

開放式作文開放式作文試題的要求：1）文章扣題：描述有的放矢，突出主題；2）思維活躍：發(fā)散思維空間，學生從不同的、全新的角度看待分析一個事物或現(xiàn)象。3）內(nèi)容健康充實：內(nèi)容要點樂觀向上，以積極的態(tài)度進行表達。開放作文：

審題最為關鍵關注開放作文文章結構Describeapicture/material/chart

Interpretitsimplied

meaning

PointoutitsimplicationsinourlifeGiveyourowncomment/

suggestion/solutionStructureInterpretationandimplicationByprovidingpurposeandreasonsoreffects/attitude/judgmentByprovidingexamples/proverbs/explanationByanalyzingthepracticalsignificance/reality漫畫的畫面細節(jié)漫畫的夸張寓意

(與現(xiàn)實的矛盾之處）細節(jié)夸張寓意Don’tcopyother’swayofsolvingtheproblemblindly.Doeverythingintherightway.讀圖與立意細節(jié)描圖和議論時注意抓住漫畫所表達的引申含義。請根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于60。InyourEnglishclass，youareaskedtodescribethispictureofawoodenbarrelandexplaintoyourclassmateshowyouunderstandit． 1.審圖：一個由不同長度木板構成的木桶，水從最短板處流出。(thewoodenbarreleffect)2.結論：人要全面發(fā)展，個別缺點會影響人的成功。團隊要共同發(fā)展，個別人落后會影響整體的進步。文體：議論文 時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時 人稱：第一人稱Don’tbetooconfidentinreallife.Behonestandmodest.Don’tjudgeabookbyitscover.3.…,aglassbottle,withonlyalittlewaterinit,istryingtoattachalabeltoitsbody,toannouncetotheworlditisfull.Itsexpressionsuggeststhatit’sveryproudandlookingdownontheothers.1.Inthepicturewecanseeabottleoflesswaterwhoselabeliswrittenfull.2.Fromthepicturewecanseethatthereisabottle.Ithastwohandsandtriestoputanlabelwritten“full”onitsbody.Asmileisontheneckofthebottle.Insidethebottleistherealittlewater.Asaresult,

itiswisetoenrichourselveswithknowledgeandtrytomakeourheadsfull.(Description)(Interpretation&Implication)(Suggestion)AnalysisFortheWholePassageAsisshowninthepicture,thereisahalf-emptybottleisgoingtostickalabelonitsbody,feeling

proudandconfident.(details)Thepictureseemstobereflectingakindofsocialphenomenon.Wemightoftenmeetsomepeoplewholookconfident,tryingtoimpressotherswiththeir“rich”knowledge.(reality/purpose)However,justlikethebottleinthepicture,whattheyreallyknowisjustalittle.Thereisnodoubtthattheyneedtolearnmorebecause

whattheyhaveintheirmindisfarfromenough.(result)AsanoldChinesesayinggoes,“emptybottlesmakestheloudestnoise.”(proverb)寫作一(滿分15分)

2013年重慶卷

請結合材料，按要求用英文寫作。

Amothersaid,“Mysonisalwaysonthephone,sleeping,outwithhisfriends,orinhisroom.Heneverhastimetotalktome.”要求:(1)就此材料發(fā)表你的看法;(2)緊扣材料，有明確的觀點;

(3)詞數(shù)不少于60;

(4)在答題卡上作答。communication寫作一(滿分15分)

2014年重慶卷請結合材料，按要求用英文寫作?！癕yfriendfalls，Ilaugh；myphonefalls,Icry.”要求：(1)就此材料發(fā)表你的看法；(2)緊扣材料，有明確的觀點；(3)詞數(shù)不少于60；(4)在答題卡上作答。寫作一(滿分15分)

2015年重慶一診考試

請結合材料，按要求用英文寫作。Hewholosesmoney,losesmuch;hewholosesafriend,losesmuchmore;hewholosesfaith,losesall.要求：(1)就此材料發(fā)表你的看法；(2)緊扣材料，有明確的觀點；(3)詞數(shù)不少于60；(4)在答題卡上作答。Wherethereisfaith,thereishope.Peopleabusemobilephones,whichmakesthemignorethetruerelationshipwiththeirfriends.評分標準：文章是否扣題----描述與主題一致，自圓其說結構是否完整----三部分內(nèi)容是否健康----樂觀向上邏輯是否清晰----議論要有邏輯性語言是否準確----用詞恰當，無語法錯誤交際是否得體----情境，身份等Outlinewriting

提綱式作文書面表達如何寫？五個步驟1、審題文字信息圖畫信息題材、人稱、時態(tài)、要點2、以詞及點：用一兩個單詞或短語寫出每句

話的細節(jié)要點。3、連詞成句：用連詞成句的方法將上述要點

的詞語擴展成句子。4、連句成文：注意：①主語和謂語②背景（適當增加時間、地點、條件等）③邏輯關系(非謂語動詞）④開頭與結尾（亮點句型）⑤語篇銜接（連接詞）5、檢查修改，規(guī)范抄寫寫作二(滿分20分)

2014年重慶卷

青少年研究專家SusanBeacham在自己的英文網(wǎng)站上開辟專欄，邀請大家分享心目中的”最好禮物”。她認為，禮物貴在心意，應為之付出時間和精力。假設你是李華，請用英文發(fā)帖，內(nèi)容應包括：●贊同Susan的看法●你收到或送出的最好的禮物是什么●該禮物的意義●期待大家回復注意：(1)詞數(shù)不少于80；(2)符合語言規(guī)范；(3)在答題卡上作答；(4)開頭已給出(不計人總詞數(shù))。

Iamahighschoolstudentfrom

China._______________________________________寫作二(滿分20分)2013年重慶卷調(diào)查顯示，中國長江江豚(finlessporpoise)受人類活動影響而頻臨滅絕，目前總數(shù)不足1000只。假設你是李華，現(xiàn)請用英文給WWF(世界自然保護基金組織)寫一封信，請他們關注這一狀況并提供幫助。內(nèi)容應包括:●說明寫信目的●簡述江豚現(xiàn)狀●希望WWF如何幫助（比如：資助江豚保護項目等）●表示感謝并期待回復注意：（1）詞數(shù)不少于80；（2）在答題卡上作答（3）書信格式及開頭均已給出（不計入總詞數(shù)）。

DearSirorMadam, I’mastudentfromChongqing,China.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yourssincerely, LiHua寫作二(滿分20分)

假如你是某公司的產(chǎn)品推銷員，請用英語介紹下面的產(chǎn)品：1.產(chǎn)品名稱：NOAH-DICT2.產(chǎn)地：中國深圳3.廠家：ChengxinCompanyLtd.4.產(chǎn)品特點：電子詞典，儲存百萬單詞和短語,實現(xiàn)中英互譯，仿真人發(fā)音，提供電子書籍下載功能。采用20年的研究成果，由高級電腦科技控制，輕金屬制成，體小，易攜帶，易操作，價格合理。注意：詞數(shù)不少于80詞。fivestepsforthewritingpractice:

Step1:examinethetopicStyle:__________________________________

tense:______________person:___________說明文（IntroductoryWriting）

presentthirdStep2:listthemainpoints1.產(chǎn)品名稱namedNOAH-DICT/theproductwhosenameisNOAH-DICT產(chǎn)地make/produceinShenzhen3.電子詞典electronicdictionary/e-dictionary4.儲存百萬單詞和詞匯storemillionsofwordsandphraseswithacapacityofmillionsofwordsandphrases實現(xiàn)中英互譯performatwo-waytranslation仿真人發(fā)音imitate/resemblearealperson’spronunciation7.提供電子書籍下載功能provide/havethefunctionofdownloadingelectronicbooksStep2:listthemainpoints采用20年的研究成果

adopt/applythetechnicalresultaccumulateby20-yearresearch由高級電腦科技控制

controlbyhigh/advancedtechnology

輕金屬制成

bemadeoflightmetal11.體小

smallinsize/itsvolumeisverysmall12.易攜帶

easytocarry/itisconvenienttocarry13.易操作

easytooperate14.價格合理

priceisreasonable/sellatanattractivepriceStep3:makesomesentences:產(chǎn)品名稱產(chǎn)地電子詞典

NOAH-DICTisanelectronicdictionarymadeinShenzhen.儲存百萬單詞和詞匯

Thedictionarycanstore1millionwordsandphrases.3.實現(xiàn)中英互譯

Thedictionarycanmakeatwo-waytranslationbetweenChineseandEnglishcometrue.4.仿真人發(fā)音

5.提供電子書籍下載功能6.采用20年的研究成果

Itisthetechnicalresultofthecompany’s20-yearresearch.7.由高級電腦科技控制8.輕金屬制成體小易攜帶

Itismadeoflightmetalanditsvolumeissmall,soitisconvenienttocarry.9.易操作價格合理

Itiseasytooperateanditspriceisreasonable.Thedictionarycanimitatearealperson’spronunciation.Italsoprovidesthefunctionofdownloadinge-books.Itiscontrolledbyadvancedcomputertechnology.Step4:Connectthesentencesandmakesomepolishment.Step5:Copyitoutcarefullyandclearly.Onepossibleversion(參考范文)NOAH-DICTisaverypowerfule-dictionarymadeinShenzhen,China.ItisthelatestproductofChengxinCompanyLtd.withalargevocabularyof1millionwordsandtermsstoredinit.SoyoucanlookupanywordyoumeetinyourSeniorperiod.What’smore,thee-dictionarycanperformatwo-waytranslationbetweenChineseandEnglish,whichhelpsyoustudymoreefficiently.Additionally,itcanperfectlyimitatearealperson’spronunciation.Italsoprovidesthefunctionofdownloadinge-books.NOAH-DICTiscontrolledbyadvancedcomputertechnology,whichisthetechnicalresultofthecompany’s20-yearresearch.ThebodyoftheNOAH-DICTismadeoflightmetal.Thereforeitissmallinsizeandveryconvenienttocarry.Besides,itiseasytooperate.Thepriceisreasonable.ItisawisechoiceforEnglishlearners.第五檔（很好）：（17-20分）要點完整，表達清楚，無重大語法錯誤。完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。--覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點。--應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯。--語法結構或詞匯方面有些許錯誤，但為盡力使用較復雜結構或詞匯所致；具備較強的語言運用能力。--有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。完全達到了預期的寫作目的。第四檔（好）：（13-16分）表達基本清楚，缺少個別要點，有些語法錯誤。完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。--覆蓋主要內(nèi)容。--應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求。--語法結構或詞匯方面應用基本準確，些許錯誤主要是因為嘗試較復雜語法結構或詞匯所致。--應用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。達到了預期的寫作目的。第三檔（適當）：（9-12分）尚能表達，缺少多個要點，語法錯誤較多?；就瓿闪嗽囶}規(guī)定的任務。--基本覆蓋主要內(nèi)容。--應用的語法結構或詞匯能基本滿足任務的要求。--有一些語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，但不影響理解。--應用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。整體而言，基本達到了預期的寫作目的。高考短文寫作評分標準學生作品

AnewproductnamedNOAH-DICThasbeenputonsalelately.ItisakindofelectricaldictionaryproducedbyChengxinCompanyLtd,whichislocatedinShenzhenChina.Thenewproducthasmanyadvantages,oneofwhichisthatthedictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandphrases,anditcantranslateChineseintoEnglisheachotherinavoicewhichresemblesextremelyrealpeople’svoice.What’smore,moreinformationandbookscanbedownloadedifnecessary.Theproductisresearchedbytwentyyears’efforts,anditisthehightechnologythatcontrolsthedictionary,whichmakesyougetinformationmorequickly.Itisconvienientforyoutotakebecauseitismadeoflightmetalandinsmallsize.Itnotonlycanbeoperatedeasilybutalsothepriceisreasonable.Ibelievethatthenewproductwillbeagoodfriendinyourlife.【高分的理由】1.各種句式及結構的合理運用過去分詞作定語的運用定語從句的運用強調(diào)句型，表語從句，形式主語句型，賓語從句的運用【高分的理由】2.連接詞的適當運用【高分的理由】3.要點全面，時態(tài)正確學生作品

AnewproductnamedNOAH-DICThasbeenputonsalelately.ItisakindofelectricaldictionaryproducedbyChengxinCompanyLtd,whichislocatedinShenzhenChina.Thenewproducthasmanyadvantages,oneofwhichisthatthedictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandphrases,anditcantranslateChineseintoEnglisheachotherinavoicewhichresemblesextremelyrealpeople’svoice.What’smore,moreinformationandbookscanbedownloadedifnecessary.Theproductisresearchedbytwentyyears’efforts,anditisthehightechnologythatcontrolsthedictionary,whichmakesyougetinformationmorequickly.Itisconvienientforyoutotakebecauseitismadeoflightmetalandinsmallsize.Itnotonlycanbeoperatedeasilybutalsothepriceisreasonable.Ibelievethatthenewproductwillbeagoodfriendinyourlife.electrical應改為electronicconvienient的正確書寫為convenient【美中不足】部分表達欠準確【分數(shù)不理想的原因】1.多處表達或用詞不準確2.基礎詞匯拼寫錯誤3.過渡銜接不自然4.卷面不整潔學生作品佳句欣賞OurcompanyhasproducedanewproductnamedNOAH-DICT,

whichismadeinShenzhen,China.

DesignedbyChengxincompanyLtd,theelectronicdictionary

namedNOAH-DICTwasproducedinShenzhen,China.

Thenewproductisanelectronicdictionarywhichcanstoremillionsofwordsaswellasexpressions.Thiskindofelectronicdictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandexpressionswhichareessentialforbothmiddleschoolstudentsandcollegestudents.Twodecadesofhardworkwiththousandsoffailures,ourresearchersmakethebreakthrougheventually,thatis,theNOAH-DICT.

Whatdeservesattentionisthattheproductistheachievementofnearly20years’research.

Itismoreasmallcomputerthananormaldictionary.

It

hassomanyfunctionsthatitisalmostassmartasacomputer.

Downloadinge-booksisalsoavailableforyou.

Itprovidesthefunctionofdownloadingtheelectronicbookstobroadenyourhorizons.

ThevolumeofNOAH-DICTissmall,thusitcanbecarriedandoperatedeasily.

Whereveryougoyoucancarryitconvenientlyforitssmallsize.

What’sthemostimportantisthatitspriceisveryreasonable.

學生作品佳句欣賞Commonmistakesinourwriting(學生出現(xiàn)的集中錯誤)Driftingoffthetopic（偏題）orleavingoutsomerequiredinformation（要點不全）Simpleanddirecttranslation/ChinglishexpressionsImpropersentencepatternsandimproperwords主要是electric,electrical和electronic的誤用Spellingmistakes長單詞的正確拼寫:convenient,pronunciation易混淆單詞的運用:metal&medalprice&prize過去分詞的正確拼寫:controlledheard雙寫的“l(fā)”書面表達五部曲step1topicexploring審題step2wording構詞step3sentencemaking成句step4essaywriting成篇step5improving修訂Whatmakesagoodpieceofwriting?

1.neatwriting書寫2.content內(nèi)容3.structure結構4.language語言GoodfirstimpressionWellorganizedandsmoothlydevelopedEverythingrequiredincludedNoChinglishNoGrammatical

mistakesexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatternsFivecharacteristicsofoutstandingwriting:(高分作文的五大特性)1.senseoforder(條理性:段落完整，層次分明）2.accuracy(準確性:語法準確，用詞精當）3.fluency(流暢性:層次清晰，行文連貫）4.conciseness&variety(簡潔、多樣性:語言簡潔，不重復）5.ideologicalcontent(思想性:文章立意高，表達個人觀點內(nèi)容積極向上）【反思】Howtogethighmarks?09年高考書面表達（重慶卷）國外某網(wǎng)站舉辦新的一輪網(wǎng)上講座活動，正面向全球中學生征集話題。假設你是新華中學的學生李華，經(jīng)常訪問該網(wǎng)站?，F(xiàn)請你用英文給該網(wǎng)站發(fā)送一封電子郵件，向其推薦話題。內(nèi)容包括:自我介紹寫信目的話題：我們應該感恩（thankful).推薦理由預?；顒映晒ψ⒁猓?.詞數(shù)100左右;2.郵件格式已為你給出；3.郵件不能出現(xiàn)本人信息；4.在答題卡上作答。09年高考書面表達（重慶卷）國外某網(wǎng)站舉辦新的一輪網(wǎng)上講座活動，正面向全球中學生征集話題。假設你是新華中學的學生李華，經(jīng)常訪問該網(wǎng)站?，F(xiàn)請你用英文給該網(wǎng)站發(fā)送一封電子郵件，向其推薦話題。內(nèi)容包括:自我介紹寫信目的話題：我們應該感恩（thankful).推薦理由預?；顒映晒ψ⒁猓?.詞數(shù)100左右;2.郵件格式已為你給出；3.郵件中不能出現(xiàn)本人信息；4.在答題卡上作答。三段式總分總自我介紹寫信目的話題（我們應該感恩）列舉理由預?；顒映晒nbriefindetailinbriefStep2wording

拼寫詞性近義詞同音詞單復數(shù)冠詞大小寫Simplemistakesleaveabadimpression!step3sentencing成句1簡單句2并列句3復合句4非謂語形式5特殊結構時態(tài)，語態(tài)別忘了并列連詞NoChinglish!!各種從句及連詞的正確選擇主語一致避生就熟！強調(diào)句型；倒裝；獨立主格結構……1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.3.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtheme.4.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.5.Ourteacherteachesushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead,weshouldthanktothem.6.Onlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.7.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.8.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveasuccessfulend.1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.IamLihua,(whois)astudentfromXinHuaMiddleschool...Improveyoursentences.Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthenewsthatyou’relookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.3.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.Thatweshouldbegratefulisagoodidea.4.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Thereasonwhyweshouldbegratefultoourparentsisthattheybroughtusupthroughthickandthin.5.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthankthem.Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.6.AsaChinese,weshouldbethankful,andonlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.7.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytopic.Iwouldreallyappreciateit,ifmytopicischosen.Hopefully,mytopicwillbechosen.8.Iwishtheactivitywillhavean

successfulend.Wishtheactivityagreatsuccess.Wishtheactivitysuccessful.Mayyouractivitysucceed.Step4成篇

Thatweshouldbethankfulisagoodidea.Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Wherethereisthankfulness,therearehopestomaketheworldbetter.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.

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