初中英語(yǔ)九年級(jí)主題作文【知識(shí)框架+佳作賞析+能力提升】發(fā)明物品

主題：發(fā)明物品導(dǎo)讀本單元的主題是物品發(fā)明.通過(guò)用英語(yǔ)談?wù)撃承┪锲芳捌浒l(fā)明的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、發(fā)明人、發(fā)明過(guò)程、用途等,掌握被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的用法,同時(shí)在思維方面激發(fā)想象力,培養(yǎng)創(chuàng)造力.本單元的關(guān)聯(lián)話題有很多,如Howwas...invented?Iwanttoinventaflyingbicycle等.題目回放我們的日常生活中有很多發(fā)明,其中一些發(fā)明改變了我們的生活方式.如果你是一個(gè)發(fā)明家,你最想發(fā)明什么?它會(huì)給我們帶來(lái)什么樣的好處和便利?請(qǐng)以Iwanttoinvent...為題,用英語(yǔ)寫一篇文章.寫作要求：1.把題目補(bǔ)充完整；2.文章中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)姓名和校名；3.詞數(shù)90左右.審題指引1審體裁：介紹發(fā)明的物品,屬于說(shuō)明文.2審內(nèi)容：先點(diǎn)題說(shuō)明想發(fā)明的物品,接著闡述此發(fā)明給我們帶來(lái)的好處和便利,結(jié)尾簡(jiǎn)單談?wù)劯惺?3審時(shí)態(tài)：主體時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí).4審人稱：以第一人稱為主.框架設(shè)計(jì)開頭：點(diǎn)題,介紹想發(fā)明的物品是什么.中間：寫出所發(fā)明物品的作用.結(jié)尾：表達(dá)對(duì)實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想的期盼.段落素描1.Firstparagraph:Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology,...playsanimportantrolein...NowIwanttoinvent...(...)2.Thebody:First,...Besides,...Mostimportantly,...(...)3.Lastparagraph:...sb.'sdreamcometrue...makeeffortstodo...Ihopethat...(...)范本淬煉AIwanttoinventaflyingbicycle①Thereisnodoubtthatbicyclesplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.NowIwanttoinventaflyingbicycle,②whichisexpectedtobemoreusefulinourlife.Theflyingbicyclewillhavetwowheelsandapairofwings.Wecanrideitontheground,orflywithitintheair,whichwillhelpusgotoour③destinationsmuchfaster.Whatismore,theflyingbicyclewillbelightersothatwecancarryitconveniently.Inaword,thedesignfortheflyingbicyclewill④betechnologicallypracticable,andIbelievethatitwillbepopularinthefuture.①Thereisnodoubtthat...用此亮點(diǎn)句式點(diǎn)題,寫出本發(fā)明的重要性.②which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句.③destination,目的地.④betechnologicallypracticable,在技術(shù)上行得通.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)1.本文框架設(shè)計(jì)合理,要點(diǎn)全面,條理清晰.2.文中能適當(dāng)運(yùn)用街接詞,如whatismore,inaword等,使文章語(yǔ)言流暢,過(guò)渡自然.3.本文句式多樣,如運(yùn)用了定語(yǔ)從句、目的狀語(yǔ)從句和賓語(yǔ)從句.BIwanttoinventaflyingbike①Withtherapidsocialdevelopment,environmentalpollutionisbecomingincreasinglyserious.Therefore,Iwanttoinventanenergy-savingflyingbike.Firstofall,theflyingbikeis②designedtohavetwowheelsandtwowingssothatwecaneitherrideitonthegroundorflywithitinthesky.Thiswillhelpus③reachourdestinationsmuchfaster.④Anotherpointworthmentioningisthatitwillbeabletoprotectourenvironmentbecauseitusessolarpowertosaveenergy.Whatismore,thereisanumbrellaonthebike.Ifitrains,wewillnotgetwet.Inall,Ilovemyinvention,andIwishitto⑤bringconveniencetopeopleinthefuture.①withtherapidsocialdevelopment,隨著社會(huì)的快速發(fā)展.②design,設(shè)計(jì).③reachourdestinations,抵達(dá)我們的目的地.④anotherpointworthmentioningisthat,值得一提的另外一點(diǎn)是.⑤bringconveniencetopeople,為人們帶來(lái)便利.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)1.本文結(jié)構(gòu)完整,邏輯清晰,從發(fā)明飛行自行車的必要性到其具有的功能等,一氣呵成,可讀性強(qiáng).2.句式富于變化,恰當(dāng)使用了目的狀語(yǔ)從句、表語(yǔ)從句、原因狀語(yǔ)從句、條件狀語(yǔ)從句等,表達(dá)流暢.3.文章銜接自然,使用了firstofall,anotherpointworthmentioning,whatismore等銜接語(yǔ),前后銜接緊密,顯示了作者較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言駕馭能力.4.詞匯運(yùn)用豐富,遣詞造句恰當(dāng)準(zhǔn)確,如使用了rapidsocialdevelopment,environmentalpollution,increasinglyserious,energy-saving,design,reachsb.'sdestination,worthmentioning,bringconvenienceto等,彰顯了作者較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力.比起上一篇作文,本文銜接更自然,用詞和句式更豐富.佳作賞析AIwanttoinventaspecialkindofmedicine①Owingtoinfectiousdiseasesoccurringsometimesacrosstheglobe,manypeopleareingreattrouble.Therefore,Iwanttoinventaspecialkindofmedicinethatcan②actonthosepeoplesufferingfromthisdisease.First,thismedicine③willbeusedtocurepatientswithinfectiousdiseases.Second,itcanpreventhealthypeoplefromsufferingfromsuchdiseases.Indeed,④itwillbedifficultformetoinventthismedicine,butIwillworkhardtoachievemydream.①owingto,由于.②acton,作用于.③willbeused是一般將來(lái)時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài).④it是形式主語(yǔ),真正的主語(yǔ)是后面的動(dòng)詞不定式復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)formeto...medicine.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)1.本文立意新穎,結(jié)合現(xiàn)實(shí),表達(dá)了自己對(duì)社會(huì)問(wèn)題的關(guān)注.2.文章思路清晰.從點(diǎn)題到發(fā)明物的用途,再到如何實(shí)現(xiàn)發(fā)明夢(mèng)想,層層遞進(jìn),首尾呼應(yīng),構(gòu)思嚴(yán)謹(jǐn).3.行文流暢,含定語(yǔ)從句等的復(fù)合句與簡(jiǎn)單句穿插自如.4.使用了一些亮點(diǎn)用語(yǔ),如infectiousdisease,ingreattrouble,acton,sufferfrom,prevent...from等,為文章增色.BIwanttoinventaspecialmaskTherearemanygreatinventions①thatarehelpfultopeople.NowIwanttoinventaspecialmask②toprotectpeoplefromcatchingvirus.First,thisspecialmaskcan③isolateanykindofvirusfrompeoplewithinfectiousdiseases.Second,itcanpurifydirtyair.Ifwewearit,wecanbreathecleanandfreshairanywhereandanytime.④Mostimportantly,itismadeofmaterialthatis⑤environmentallyfriendly.Hopefully,thisspecialmaskwillbeproduced,and⑥servepeopleinthenearfuture.①that引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句.②toprotect...,動(dòng)詞不定式充當(dāng)后置定語(yǔ),修飾mask.③isolate,隔離.④mostimportantly,最重要的是.⑤environmentallyfriendly,環(huán)境友好的.⑥serve,服務(wù)于.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)1.本文立意新穎,框架清晰,邏輯性強(qiáng).先介紹想發(fā)明的東西,接著說(shuō)明其作用,最后表達(dá)自己的愿望.2.本文使用了銜接語(yǔ),如first,second,mostimportantly,hopefully等,過(guò)渡自然,行文流暢.3.句式運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確,如使用了定語(yǔ)從句、動(dòng)詞不定式充當(dāng)后置定語(yǔ)、條件狀語(yǔ)從句等.4.詞匯和短語(yǔ)豐富,語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力較強(qiáng),如使用了protectsb.fromdoingsth.,isolatefrom,purify,environmentallyfriendly,produce,serve等用語(yǔ).CIwanttoinventaspecialbedAtpresent,wearelivinginaneweraofintelligence.①Tomeettheneedsoftheera,Iwanttoinventaspecialbedwithmanyfunctions.Firstofall,thebedwillwakeusupontimeinthemorning②sothatwewillnotworryaboutbeinglateforschoolorwork.Besides,duringwinter,thebedwillheatthebedroomto③acomfortabletemperatureatnight.Moreover,whenwearetired,itwillplaymusictomakeusrelaxed.Hopefully,thisinvention④willbemadesoon,andservepeopleinthenearfuture.①tomeettheneedsoftheera,為滿足時(shí)代需要,此處動(dòng)詞不定式短語(yǔ)充當(dāng)目的狀語(yǔ).②sothat引導(dǎo)目的狀語(yǔ)從句.③acomfortabletemperature,舒適的溫度.④willbemade是一般將來(lái)時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài).亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)1.本文緊扣主題,段落設(shè)計(jì)合理,詳略得當(dāng).首段點(diǎn)明想發(fā)明的東西即一種特殊的床,中間主體段落敘述該發(fā)明物的功用,尾段提出期望.2.本文銜接自然,使用了firstofall,besides,moreover等銜接語(yǔ).3.語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)活潑,描寫細(xì)致,運(yùn)用了一些亮點(diǎn)詞匯和短語(yǔ),如eraofintelligence,meettheneedsof,function等.素材寶庫(kù)1.好詞妙語(yǔ)Thereisnodoubtthat...毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)···...Thereisnodenyingthefactthat...不可否認(rèn),·....Itisclearthat...清楚的是,·....playanimportantrolein...在···中起重要作用notonly...butalso...不但·····而且·....becauseof因?yàn)閎eofgreatbenefit大有裨益atpresent目前makeeffortstodosth.盡力做某事achievesb.'sdream實(shí)現(xiàn)某人的夢(mèng)想devoteoneselfto獻(xiàn)身于makeupsb.'smindtodosth.決心做某事Itisbelievedthat...大家相信···.·2.提分佳句Itisbelievedthatinventionsplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.眾所周知,發(fā)明在我們的日常生活中起著很重要的作用.Withtherapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology,therewillbemoreandmorepopularinventions.隨著科技的快速發(fā)展,將會(huì)有越來(lái)越多廣受歡迎的發(fā)明.Thoughitisdifficultformetoinventitatpresent,Ihavemadeupmymindtodevotemyselftotheresearchintotheinvention.盡管目前我發(fā)明它有困難,但我已下定決心致力于此發(fā)明的研究.Ibelievethatitwillbeinventedsomedayinthefutureandusedinourdailylife.我相信將來(lái)某一天它會(huì)被發(fā)明出來(lái)并運(yùn)用到我們的日常生活中.ThatiswhyIwanttoinventtheflyingbike.這就是我想發(fā)明飛行自行車的原因.寫作預(yù)熱1.句子改錯(cuò)1)Iwanttoinventspecialpen.____________________________________________________________________________________________2)Itcantellwhatclothesyouhadbettertoweartoday.____________________________________________________________________________________________3)Thepencanpointoutmymistakesandhelpmecorrectit.____________________________________________________________________________________________4)Let'smeintroduceittoyou.____________________________________________________________________________________________5)Thereisnodoubtthatdohouseworkisatiringandhardjob.____________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)special前面加a2)去掉to3)it改為them4)Let's改為L(zhǎng)et5)do改為doing2.句子翻譯1)我想發(fā)明一輛既環(huán)保又方便的飛行自行車.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2)另外值得一提的一點(diǎn)是它不僅跑得快,而且能保護(hù)我們的環(huán)境.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3)它可以選擇你需要吃的東西幫你保持健康.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4)你的父母需花時(shí)間放松而不是每天都感到疲憊不堪.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5)那是因?yàn)槲蚁雽?shí)現(xiàn)坐在學(xué)校就像躺在家里的夢(mèng)想.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)Iwanttoinventaflyingbikewhichisenvironmentallyfriendlyandconvenient.2)Anotherpointworthmentioningisthatitcannotonlyrunfastbutalsoprotectourenvironment.3)Itcanchoosewhatyouneedtoeattohelpyoukeephealthy.4)Yourparentsneedtotaketimetorelaxinsteadoffeelingtiredeveryday.5)ThatisbecauseIwanttoachievemydreamofsittingatschoollikelyingathome.實(shí)戰(zhàn)練筆中國(guó)是一個(gè)歷史悠久的國(guó)家,其古老的四大發(fā)明改變了世界.隨著科技的發(fā)展,新“四大發(fā)明”即支付寶(Alipay)、共享單車(sharedbike)、網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物(shoppingonline)、高鐵(high-speedtrain)又讓世界刮目相看.請(qǐng)以新“四大發(fā)明”為題寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文.寫作內(nèi)容：1.新“四大發(fā)明”是什么?2.其中你最喜歡的是什么?3.你喜歡它的原因是什么?寫作要求：1.語(yǔ)言流暢通順、思路清晰；2.文章中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)姓名和校名；3.詞數(shù)90左右_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________