讀后續(xù)寫之無靈主語句課件-高三英語寫作專項

Whatis“無靈主語句”無靈主語句：指用無生命的事物做主語,用人或社會團體的行為或動作做謂語，因此這類句子常帶有擬人化（personification）的修辭色彩。

inanimatesubject(無靈主語)

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animateverb(有靈動詞)無靈主語inanimatesubject

：物品、動作、情感、時間、地點等有靈動詞animateverb：有生命的事物的動作和行為例如：Romewitnessed

manygreathistoricevents.

(在羅馬發(fā)生過許多重大歷史事件)它的主語Rome羅馬，是無生命的事物，但謂語witness目擊，是人的動作。這種“無靈主語+有靈謂語”的句式，就是無靈主語句。普通句

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無靈主語句普通句：Shehadagoodidea.無靈主語句：Agoodideacameacrosshermind.同樣是表達“她有了個好主意”，比起普通句式中的常見句子，無靈主語句中這種“想法跑到腦中”的擬人化表達，在寫作中更加形象具體。無靈主語句的作用1、豐富主語的表達2、豐富修辭手法“無靈主語句”分類1

情感狀態(tài)的抽象名詞+謂語在續(xù)寫中寫到人物的情緒或心理時，別總用sb.feelxx，不如試試無靈主語句，來個高級的情緒描寫?！扒楦袪顟B(tài)的抽象名詞+謂語動詞”的描寫有：①Fear

gripped

thevillage.(整個村莊籠罩在恐怖之中)②Courage

deserted

him.

(他失去了勇氣)③Anger

choked

mywords.

(我氣的說不出話)④Awaveof

nervousness

washedover

him.

(一陣緊張的情緒涌上他的心頭)

⑤Achillof

horror

suddenly

sweptover

him.

(他突然感到不寒而栗)⑥Excitement

seized

him.

(他好興奮)常見的情緒名詞：happiness,joy,delight開心快樂；surprise,astonishment驚奇驚訝；shame羞恥羞愧；anger憤怒；despair絕望；regret遺憾后悔；sorrow悲傷；horror驚恐；anxiety焦慮；disappointment失望沮喪；satisfaction滿意滿足；puzzlement困惑不解；等等。常見的謂語動詞：seize侵襲；choke噎住堵??；flood充滿；creep不知不覺產生；grip緊抓；givewayto被xx代替；washover洗滌侵襲；deserted丟棄遺棄；等等。2

思考/動作行為的名詞+謂語在續(xù)寫中描寫人物動作或思考行為時，也可以整一個無靈主語句，更不錯!“思考/動作行為的名詞+謂語動詞”的描寫有：①Thesightofthescene

filled

me

with

horror.

(看到這個情景我心中充滿了恐懼)②Aterriblethought

suddenly

struck

me.

(我突然想到一個可怕的想法)③Atenminutes’walk

brought

ustothehotel.

(我們步行十分鐘就到了旅館)④Thethoughtofseeing

herson

verysoon

filled

herheart

with

greathappiness.

(想到不久就要見到她的兒子，她心中感到十分快樂)這些句子皆是將人的動作和思考行為擬人化，而不是簡單的sb.feel/doxx，讓續(xù)寫的表達更多樣生動。

Tip：常見詞匯補充，可根據(jù)文中人物動作或思考的行為，挑恰當?shù)脑~自行搭配：常見的人物行為詞匯有：sight看到，thought想法，glance一瞥，look看到，idea想法，feeling感受，walk走路；等等。常見的謂語動詞：overwhelm壓倒；strike打擊侵襲；arouse喚起；remind想起；fill...with充滿xx；change改變；bring帶來；等等。3

身體部位/音容類名詞+謂語在續(xù)寫中描寫人的外貌和性格時，不用一直寫sb.isxx，可以試著寫無靈主語句?！吧眢w部位/音容類名詞+謂語動詞”的描寫有：①Smile

crumpled

hisface.

(他笑得一臉皺紋)②Herface

brightened

whenIgaveherthepresent.

(我給她禮物時，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩)③Hiswords

sent

meaquiverthroughmybody.

(他的話讓我全身不寒而栗)④Laughter

lingeredaround

theroom.(笑聲在房間里縈繞)

⑤Tears

welledup

inAnni’seyes.

(淚水從安妮的眼中涌出)Tip：常見詞匯補充，可根據(jù)文中的人物的外貌或性格，挑恰當?shù)脑~自行搭配：常見的身體部位/音容的名詞有：face；laughter；smile；tear；words說的話；等等。常見的謂語動詞：lightup，brighten照亮；linger繼續(xù)存留；wellup涌出；flash閃爍；crumple弄皺；等等。

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時間/地點/場景類名詞+謂語續(xù)寫中交代故事的時間或背景時，也可以用上無靈主語句去表示xx發(fā)生了xxx?！皶r間/地點/場景類名詞+謂語動詞”的描寫有：①Ahush

fellupon

theclassroom.(教室一片寂靜)②Beijing

haswitnessed

greatchangesinrecentyears.

(北京見證了最近幾年的的巨大變化)③Dusk

found

thechildcryinginthestreet.

(黃昏時，孩子在街上哭)④Thatchilly

afternoon

witnessed

himtrudginginthesnow.

(那個寒冷的下午，他在雪地里跋涉)⑤Night

hasfallenover

thecountry.

(夜幕已經(jīng)籠罩著鄉(xiāng)間)Tip：常見詞匯補充，可根據(jù)文中需要交代的時間或地點背景，挑恰當?shù)脑~自行搭配：常見的時間/地點/場景類名詞：slience，hush安靜沉默；dusk黃昏；dawn黎明破曉；morning；afternoon；night；等等。常用的謂語動詞有：see看見；witness見證；find發(fā)現(xiàn)；fall降臨進入；等等。5自然現(xiàn)象類名詞+謂語要是續(xù)寫時想來個環(huán)境描寫烘托氛圍，也可以用一個無靈主語句?！白匀滑F(xiàn)象類名詞+謂語動詞”的描寫有：①Asuddenshower

killed

thewind.

(突然下了一陣雨，風停了)②Aheavyrain

visited

thecity.

(這個城市剛下過一場大雨)③Thesun

hascomeout.(太陽出來了)④Thethickfog

blanketed

thefield.

(濃霧籠罩著整個大地)

Tip：常見詞匯補充，可根據(jù)續(xù)寫所需的環(huán)境描寫，挑恰當?shù)脑~自行搭配：常見的自然現(xiàn)象名詞：sun；sunshine；moon；moonlight；fog，mist霧；rain；earthquake地震；等等。常見的謂語動詞：blanket覆蓋；come；bring；prevent妨礙阻止；strike打擊侵襲；threaten

威脅/即將來臨；等等。閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。HaveyoueverhadtoovercomeanextremechallengeinyourlifeMyteenageyearshadbeeninsane.Fromschoolworktoathletics,Ihadalwaysbeenrunningaround.Everythingwassodifficult.ThroughoutmyhecticteenageyearsIhavebeenfacedwithmanyextremechallengesthathaverequiredextremefocusandhardworktoovercome.Ifithadn’tbeenforhardwork,noneofthesechallengesthatIfacedwouldhavebeenconquered.Twoyearsago,whenIwasafreshmaninhighschool,Idealtwithanextremelysignificantinjury.ThistookplaceinmytennistournamentinJanuary.Intheclimaxofmymatch,Ijoltedmybacktotheleftandsoonafterfeltasharp,painfulshockrunthroughmyspine.IknewatthatdifficultmomentIseriouslyinjuredmyback.Iwasrushedoffthecourtandmyparentsmadeanappointmentwithanorthopedist(矯形外科醫(yī)生)forthenextmorning.Iwalkedintotheofficeextremelynervousandsufferingfromexcruciatingpain.MytennisseasonforschoolstartedinthreemonthsandIabsolutelyneededtobuildupthestrength.Afterabouttwentyminutesofwaitingintheoffice,whichfeltlikeaneternity，thedoctorwalkedintoexaminemyX-rays.Withasorrowfulface,thedoctorlookedintomineandmymother’seyesandsaid,“Thereisa50/50chancethatLucaswillbeabletoparticipateinthisyearstennisseason.LucasbrokehisL5vertebraeinhislowerback.”MyheartdroppedandIfeltasadnesscomeoverme.ThedoctorsaidthatIwouldbesittingoutofphysicalactivityfortwoandahalftothreemonths.Thosethreemonthswerethelongestthreemonthsofmylife.Iwassoeagertogetbacktopracticesfortheseason.Everyday,IwouldthinkabouthowitwasgoingtobewhenIwasfullyhealthy.Iaskedmyself,“AmIgoingtobeoutofshapeShouldIevenplaythisyearIprobablywon'thaveasuccessfulseason.”Fromthatdreadfuldayon,IdecidedthatIwasgoingtoputintheworktobebackintopformandhaveasuccessfulseason.Paragraph1：After

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effective.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了青少年時代的作者在學業(yè)和體育等方面都很困難。雪上加霜的是在一-次網(wǎng)球比賽中他的背部受了傷，醫(yī)生的診斷使他十分郁悶，但參賽的強烈欲望迫使他不斷地進行康復訓練而回到賽場。經(jīng)過艱苦的努力最終取得回報的故事?！驹斀狻慷温淅m(xù)寫：①根據(jù)續(xù)文第一段首句“在我的骨科醫(yī)生告訴我“一切都好”之后，我就要開始訓練了”可知本段可描寫作者回到球場去訓練，通過訓練恢復到了受傷前的體質等。②根據(jù)第二段首句“我的努力訓練證明非常有效”可知本段可描寫作者可描寫作者的努力訓練有什么樣的好結果以及自己的感受。續(xù)寫線索：球場訓練——增強體力——艱苦努力——得到回報詞匯激活：行為類①下定決心：bedeterminedto/makeone’smindtodo②增強體質：buildupthestrength/enhancephysicalfitness③實現(xiàn)：achieve/realize情緒類①渴望：hungerfor/aspiration②有成就的：accomplished/achieved【點睛】［高分句型1］Throughpractices,IwouldhitthegymandtrytobuildupthestrengththatIhadbeforetheinjury.（運用了限制性定語從句）

［高分句型2］AlthoughItrulywantedtowin,Iknewthatitwasagreataccomplishmentformetobeinthatpositionevennotinthefirstplace.（運用了although引導讓步狀語從句和that引導賓語從句）［高分句型3］TheinjurywasalmostagoodthingbecauseIprovedtomyselfthatIamcapableofachievinggoalsthatIstrivefor,throughhardworkofcourse.（運用了because引導原因狀語從句，that引導賓語從句和that引導限制性定語從句）Paragraph1：AfterIgotthe“allclear”frommyorthopedistIwasgoingtogettowork.Pr