熱點(diǎn)練01書(shū)面表達(dá)之讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)-2021新高考【熱點(diǎn)-重點(diǎn)-難點(diǎn)】（山東專(zhuān)用）教師版

熱點(diǎn)01書(shū)面表達(dá)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

【命題趨勢(shì)】

新高考英語(yǔ)科目考試題型有重大變化，其中英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作分為兩部分：第一節(jié)為應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作；

第二節(jié)為讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)或概要寫(xiě)作。2015年8月，在教育部考試中心發(fā)布的《普通高等學(xué)校招生全國(guó)統(tǒng)

一考試英語(yǔ)科考試說(shuō)明》（高考綜合改革試驗(yàn)省份試用）（第一版）中，提出了寫(xiě)作新題型：讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)或概

要寫(xiě)作。

【讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題型介紹】

1.任務(wù)要求：提供一段350詞以?xún)?nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求學(xué)生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵

詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與所給材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文（150詞左右）。

2.考查目標(biāo)：讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)是一種將閱讀與寫(xiě)作緊密結(jié)合的綜合性語(yǔ)言測(cè)試。教育部考試中心劉慶思、陳康老師

于2016年指出，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)主要關(guān)注學(xué)生以下四個(gè)方面的能力：

①把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)的能力。學(xué)生需要了解所給短文的主要內(nèi)容，清楚其關(guān)鍵詞和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)的

使用情況，并通過(guò)續(xù)寫(xiě)短文表現(xiàn)出來(lái)。

②語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性。學(xué)生能準(zhǔn)確、恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂盟鶎W(xué)詞匯和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)，還能夠根據(jù)內(nèi)容需要使用

較多、較復(fù)雜的詞匯和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)。

③對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力。學(xué)生需要掌握上下文邏輯關(guān)系，所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文與所給短文及段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)之間要

有連貫性，所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文內(nèi)語(yǔ)句要連貫、有序。

④創(chuàng)造性思維能力。學(xué)生所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文要具有較豐富的內(nèi)容，包含詳細(xì)和生動(dòng)的情景、態(tài)度和感情描述。

【題型分析】

1.在題型設(shè)計(jì)方面：本題是一個(gè)圍繞某一具體的主題語(yǔ)境，基于書(shū)面語(yǔ)篇記敘文連續(xù)性文本的文體形式，在

根據(jù)語(yǔ)境線(xiàn)索理解語(yǔ)篇內(nèi)容、分析語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)，并續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇內(nèi)容的過(guò)程中，運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言技能獲取、梳理、整合

語(yǔ)言知識(shí)，同時(shí)運(yùn)用所學(xué)語(yǔ)言知識(shí)創(chuàng)造性地表達(dá)意義，并通過(guò)運(yùn)用各種學(xué)習(xí)策略，提高理解和表達(dá)效果的

題型。

2.在閱卷要求方面，需考慮所續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容：

（1）與所給短文及段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；

（2）內(nèi)容的豐富性和對(duì)所給關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)的覆蓋情況；

（3）應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；

（4）上下文的連貫性。

3.在評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)方面，需把握的具體原則為：

（1）本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分；

（2）評(píng)分時(shí)，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)衡量、確定或

調(diào)整檔次，最后給分；

（3）詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分；

（4）拼寫(xiě)與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮；

（5）如書(shū)寫(xiě)較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。

不難看出，該題型在考查學(xué)生運(yùn)用所學(xué)語(yǔ)言知識(shí)（如語(yǔ)法知識(shí)、篇章知識(shí)）進(jìn)行書(shū)面語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的同時(shí)，也

在考查學(xué)生對(duì)書(shū)面表達(dá)策略的勝任力。可以說(shuō)，該題型尤其對(duì)英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng)中的“語(yǔ)言能力”和“思維品

質(zhì)”的發(fā)展可以起到很好的促進(jìn)作用。

【滿(mǎn)分技巧】

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)以讀為輔，以寫(xiě)為主,其目標(biāo)是考查學(xué)生的綜合語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力，主要包含以下四個(gè)方面：

1.把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)的能力;

2.語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性;

3.對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把握能力:

4.創(chuàng)造性思維能力。

【熱點(diǎn)話(huà)題】假期生活：生活小故事；哲理故事；寓言故事；學(xué)生生活。

《真題再現(xiàn)》

（2020年新高考全國(guó)1卷山東英語(yǔ)試卷）

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（滿(mǎn)分25分）

話(huà)題：幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的故事難度：★★★建議用時(shí)：25分鐘

47.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhad

losttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeet

thechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknew

theyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,his

wife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-had

interestedherverymuch.

“IwishyoucouldseehimJshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.

Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.^^

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.4<Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearn

money,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^

“SodoI,“saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,UIhaveagreatidea!Ihave

asolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyou

whatwecando,"saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米

花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

【答案】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothe

localsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,

theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard'shome.Theytold

Bernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltvery

happytohelpthisfamily.

WitheverythingreadyBernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehouses

andsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.

Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamand

salttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.Hedidnotforgetthehelpof

Meredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.

【解析】

【分析】本文是根據(jù)短文進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之成為一個(gè)完整的故事。

【詳解】1.認(rèn)真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個(gè)小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個(gè)貧困的家庭。

那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無(wú)法外出賺錢(qián)，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生

活十分困難。后來(lái)，Meredith的孩子想出了一個(gè)主意——制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣(mài)爆米花。

2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過(guò)制作和賣(mài)爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的。

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合

乎情理。

4.根據(jù)第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.（當(dāng)Meredith太太

聽(tīng)到John的主意時(shí)，她也認(rèn)為這是個(gè)好主意）可以針對(duì)如何實(shí)現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個(gè)提議展開(kāi)構(gòu)思：根據(jù)第二段

首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstarledoutonhisnewbusiness.（一切準(zhǔn)備就緒后，Bernard開(kāi)始了他的新生

意）可以針對(duì)Bernard如何通過(guò)實(shí)爆米花讓家庭擺脫困境展開(kāi)構(gòu)思。

【點(diǎn)睛】續(xù)寫(xiě)的語(yǔ)言要盡可能與原文的語(yǔ)言保持風(fēng)格上的一致。文章時(shí)態(tài)以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主。應(yīng)使用自己

熟悉的句型和短語(yǔ)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高

級(jí)詞匯，以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合題干要求，句子

結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。

《精選最新試題模擬訓(xùn)練》（定時(shí)訓(xùn)練，建議每篇15到20分鐘）

模擬演練1（2020屆浙江杭州市長(zhǎng)征中學(xué)高三上期中試題）

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

話(huà)題：寓言故事難度：★★★建議用時(shí)：7分

Therewasathickforestonthesidesofamountain.Manykindsofanimalslivedintheforest.Adeerwas

eatinggrassandleaveswithhertwoyoungones.Theyoungoneswanderedhappilyhereandthere.Thedeer

followedherfawns（幼鹿）intoacave.Thedeerwasfrightenedbecauseitwasatiger'scave.Therewerebonesof

deadanimalsalloverthecave.Fortunately,thetigarwasnotinsidethecaveatthetime.

Thedeerwastryingtoleadheryoungonesoutofthecavewhensheheardaloudroar.Shesawthetigerata

distancecomingtowardsthecave.Itwasdangeroustogooutofthecavenow.Shethoughtofaplan.Thedeer

raisedhervoiceandshouted,"Mydeeryoungchildrendonotweep.Ishallcapture（捕捉）atigerfbryoutoeat.

Youcanhaveagooddinner.11

Thetigerheardthesewordsandbecamefrightened.Hethought,"Whoseisthatstrangevoicefromthecave?

Adangerousanimalisstayinginsidetocaptureme.Ishallrunawaytoescapedeath."Thetigerbegantorunaway

fromthereasfastaspossible.

Ajackal（胡才良）sawtherunningtiger."Whyareyourunningingreatfear?"thejackalasked.Thetigersaid,

“Myfriend,apowerfulandfierceanimalisinmycave.Theyoungonesarecryingforatigertoeat.Themotheris

promisingtocaptureatigerforthem.So,Iamrunningaway."

Thecunningjackalwasnowsurethetigerwasacoward（懦夫）.Itsaid,"Don'tbeafraid.Noanimalis

fiercerorstrongerthanatigerLetusgotogethertofindout."

Butthetigersaid,"Idonotwanttotakeachance.Youmayrunaway.Iwillbeleftalonetodie.So,Iwillnot

comewithyou."

Thejackalsaid,''Trustme.Letusknot（打結(jié)）ourtailstogether.ThenIwillnotbeabletoleaveyou.1'The

tigeragreedunwillinglytothisproposal.Sothejackaltiedtheirtailsinaknot.Nowtheywalkedtowardsthecave

together.

Para.1

Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.............................................................................................

Para.2

Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.................................................

【參考范文】

Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.Sheagainraisedhervoice.Sheshoutedtowardsher

childrenstandinginsidethecave,"Mydearchildren,Irequestedmyfriend,thecleverjackal,tocaptureatiger

forus.Nowlookthejackalhascapturedatigerforus.Hehastiedthetiger'stailtohistail.Thisistopreventthe

tigerfromescaping.Youwillsoonhavethetigerfordinner/1

Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.So,thetigerdecidedtoescape

fromtheteiTibleanimalstandinginsidehiscave.Hestartedrunning.Heforgotaboutthejackal.Hedraggedthe

jackaloverrocksandthorns.Inthemadescapethejackalwascaughtbetweentworocks.Thetigerpulledwithall

hismight.Histailgotcut.Thejackalwaskilledinthisincident.Thetail-lesstigerranawaytoanotherpartofthe

forest.Thedcceandheryoungonesleftthetiger'scave.Theyjoinedtheirherdsafely.Presenceofmindand

intelligencecansaveonefromdangeroussituations.

模擬演練2【湖南師大附中2021屆高三10月第二次月考】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落

開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Therewasonceaboyinraggedclothesrunningtoaskabuildingcontractor（包工頭）whoworeelegantclothes

inaconstructionsiteofaskyscraper（摩天大樓），“HowcouldIbecomeasrichasyouwhenIgrowup?"

Withaglanceattheboy,thetallandstrong-buildcontractorreplied,"Iwouldliketotellyouastoryfirstabout

threediggers.Thefirstdiggerlikedholdingaspade（鍬）withoutdoinganythingbutsayingthathewantedtobea

bossinthefuture.Theseconddiggerlikedcomplainingaboutthelong-timeworkandhislowsalary.Thethird

diggeralwaysquietlydevotedhimselftodiggingwithoutmakinganyclaims.Severalyearslater,thefirstdigger

wasstillholdinghisspadeintheoriginalplaceandthesecondtookanexcuseofworkinjuryforearly

retirement.Onlythethirddiggerbecamethebossofthebuildingcompany.Doyouunderstandthemoralofthis

story?Justgotobuyaredshirtandworkhard.^^

Thelittleboywaspuzzledandcouldnotfigureouttheimplicationofthestory.Soheaskedthecontractorto

explainfurther.Pointingtothebuilderswhowereworkingonthescaffold（腳手架），thecontractortalkedtothe

littleboy,"Lookatthosepeople!Theyareallmyworkers.Ican'trememberalloftheirnames,andevenIhaveno

impressionofsomeofthem.Butifyoulookcarefully,youwillnoticeasunburnedmaninredamongthem.Inotice

himveryearly.Heseemstobeworkingharderwithhigherspiritsthanothers.Heisalwaysthefirstonetowork

everydaywhilethelastonetoleave.ltisexactlyhisredshirtthatmakeshimstandoutamongalltheworkers.Now

IamaboutloaskhimtobemytaskmasterandIbelievehewillworkevenmuchharderfromnowon.Maybehe

willsoonbepromotedtomyassistant.'1

注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thecontractortoldtheboythatwasalsohowhehadgotwherehewasthen.

Afterhearinghiswords,theboythoughtalot.

［答案］Thecontractortoldtheboythatwasalsohowhehadgotwherehewasthen.Actuallythebuilding

contractorhadonceworkedhardandoutperformedothersthroughhisownconstantefforts.Ifhehadwornthe

sameshirtjustlikeotherworkersandhadn'tdevotedhimselftoworking,bynomeanswouldhehavebeennoticed

byhisboss.Asamatteroffactheworehisredshirteverydayandworkedarduously.Soonhisdaycame.He

obtainedhisboss'sappreciationandwasthenpromotedastaskmaster.Afterhehadearnedenoughmoney,he

becameabosseventually.

Afterhearingwords,theboythoughtalot.Successcanonlybeborninaction.Workinghardisallwinners*

sharedandindispensableexperienceforachievingtheirdreamsintheirlives.Actuallythecontractor'sexperience

wasjustonegoodexampletoprovethetruthofit.Theboyknewthatifhewantedtostandoutamongpeople,there

wasnoshortcutoralternativebuthardwork.Thenhethankedthecontractorfbrhisreplyandsaidgoodbyetohim.

Leavingtheconstructionsiteoftheskyscraperhealreadyhadafirmresolutioninhismindthathewouldstarthis

ownjourneyrighttheninordertofulfillhisdreamintime.

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，本文以小男孩和一個(gè)建筑承包商的對(duì)話(huà)為線(xiàn)索展開(kāi)，

講述了如何取得成功的途徑。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，第一段開(kāi)頭是“包工頭告訴男孩，那也是他當(dāng)時(shí)如何到達(dá)目的地的?！笨芍谝欢慰擅?/p>

寫(xiě)包工頭如何穿著紅襯衫實(shí)現(xiàn)了自己的夢(mèng)想。第二段開(kāi)頭是“聽(tīng)了他的話(huà)，男孩想了很多“可知，第二段可描

寫(xiě)小男孩想明白了一個(gè)道理——成功只能在行動(dòng)中誕生。

續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右，按要求完成寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。

【點(diǎn)睛】

范文內(nèi)容完整，要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范

文中使用了較多主從復(fù)合句，如：Ifhehadwornthesameshirtjustlikeotherworkersandhadn'tdevotedhimself

toworking,bynomeanswouldhehavebeennoticedbyhisboss.這句話(huà)運(yùn)用了if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句的虛擬

語(yǔ)氣；本文也使用了一些固定詞組，如devoteoneselfto;bynomeans;saygoodbyeto等。全文中沒(méi)有中國(guó)式

英語(yǔ)的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語(yǔ)的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章

增色添彩。

模擬演練3【湖南省郴州市2021屆高三第一次質(zhì)檢】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)

續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

“Okay,"saidourteacher,Mrs.Woodland："It'stimeforthegiftexchange.^^Iwasactuallyalittleexcited.I

knewwhatalotofthegirlshadbrought,andanyofthosegiftswouldbegreat,especiallymybestfriendSara's.

Shehadmadesomecandyandputitinthissupercutebearmug（馬克杯）.

Mrs.Woodlandhadusputourgiftsonourclassroomtable.Thenweopenedthegiftslikeagame.Weeach

drewnumbersandwegottothetableandchoseawrapped（包裝好的）giftwhenournumberwascalled.Butwe

didn'tnecessarilyhaveto.Wecouldtakeagiftfromsomebodyelsethathadalreadyhadtheirnumbercalled——if

wethoughtwe'dlikethatgiftbetterthanthewrappedones.

Whenitwasmyturn,Ididn'ttakeawrappedgiftfromthetable.AndIdidn'ttakeSara'seitherthoughIreally

wantedto.Itooktheperfume（香水）Meganhadbroughtinstead.Ididn'thaveenoughmoneytogetMom

somethingspecial,buttheperfumewasreallynice.Shemightreallylikeit.

IwasbusythinkingabouttheperfumeandwhetherMomwouldlikeitornotwhentherewasabigcommotion

（嘈雜）.IthadbeenHannah,sturntochoose.Shewasthelastone.Andunsurprisingly,shedidn'tgoforthelast

wrappedgiftonthetable.Instead,she'dtakenSara'sgiftfromLauren.Well,thatmeantLaurenhadtotakethe

wrappedgift.Shelookedalittleupsetwhenshegottothetable.EveryoneknewthelastgiftwasfromKali.That

waswhynoonehadchosenit.Kaliwasreallypoor.Andshealwaysbroughtgiftsthatnooneeverwanted.This

time,shebroughtapairofold—fashionedcrochetedpotholders（編織的防燙套墊）!

“Idon'twantthese,Laurenwhined（哀怨）.“Iwantmycandyback.^^

“Noway,“Hannahprotested,keepingthemugofchocolateoutofLauren'sreach.

“ThenIwantMegan'sperfume/*Laurencameovertotakemyperfume.€tComeon,Melanie,tradewithme.”

Paragraph1：

Mrs.WoodlandadvisedmetotradewithLaurensinceIhadalwaysbeenkind.

Paragraph2：

“HereJIsaidtomymomafterIgothome,handingherthepotholders."TheyareanearlyNewYear

【答案】Paragraph1：

Mrs.WoodlandadvisedmetotradewithLaurensinceIhadalwaysbeenkind.ButIwasunwillingtogiveit

upbecausethatwasformymum.ThenInoticedKalisittingsilentlyinthebackoftheclassroom.SuddenlyIfelt

ashamedofmyself.Shehadobviouslyworkedhardonthepotholders."Sure,Iwilltakethepotholders,1saidto

Mrs.Woodland.IgavemybestefforttosmileandglancedoveratKali."Didyoumakethemyourself?Theyare

reallypretty."IsaidtoKali.Kalinoddedandsmiled.

Paragraph2：

“Here,“IsaidtomymomafterIgothome,handingherthepotholders.4€ThcyareanearlyNewYeargift.”

MomseemedsoexcitedandcheerfulthatIwasworriedshethoughtImadethem.1quicklyexplainedthatthey

weremadebyKali.Momsmiledandtoldmeshehadalreadyknown.ItturnedoutthatMrs.Woodlandhadcalled

totellhereverythinghappeningintheclassroom.Mompraisedmeforhandlingthesituationwonderfullyand

growingtobeathoughtfulyoungwoman.Shetoldmethatwasthebestgiftamothercouldaskfor.

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)考查讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。

從原文可以看出，本文講述了作者的班級(jí)互換禮物，作者為媽媽換到丁香水，但是同學(xué)Lauren對(duì)自己的禮

物不滿(mǎn)意，想要和作者互換。可推斷續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的內(nèi)容也與是否換禮物有關(guān)。結(jié)合續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩個(gè)段首句，可知

第一段主要內(nèi)容“我”不愿意換禮物到愿意換禮物的心理和動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)；根據(jù)第二段首句第二段應(yīng)該寫(xiě)我把禮物

給媽媽?zhuān)瑩?dān)心媽媽不滿(mǎn)意，媽媽已經(jīng)知道「事情的經(jīng)過(guò)，表語(yǔ)了“我“，并告訴我這是一個(gè)媽媽收到的最好的

禮物，我能夠很好的處理事情，已經(jīng)是一個(gè)有思想的人。續(xù)寫(xiě)也可以寫(xiě)其他合理的情節(jié)，但注意一定要與

文章主題有關(guān)聯(lián)兩個(gè)段首句線(xiàn)索。

【點(diǎn)睛】

本文描寫(xiě)詳略得當(dāng),使用了短語(yǔ)和高級(jí)詞匯：tradewith,giveup.feelashamedof,glanceover,turnout,

thoughtful等高級(jí)表達(dá)；高級(jí)句型：But1wasunwillingtogiveilupbecausethatwasformymum.但我不愿意

放棄，因?yàn)槟鞘菫榱宋覌寢?。本句運(yùn)用了狀語(yǔ)從句，并且使用了高頻詞匯"apologisesfor”增添了文章的色彩。

MomseemedsoexcitedandcheerfulthatIwasworriedshethought1madethem.媽媽看起來(lái)很興奮很高興，我

擔(dān)心她會(huì)以為是我做的。本句使用了幾個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，是一個(gè)亮點(diǎn)。

模擬演練4【河北省承德市高中2021屆高三第一次調(diào)研】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)

頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Whiledriving,Isensedsomethingwrongwithmycar.PullingintothefirstparkinglotIfound,Istoppedit

andclimbedouttoassessthesituation.MyheartsankasIdiscoveredthatoneofmyrear（后面的）tireswasflat.

I'dboughtthesecondhandcarseveralmonthsbefore,butitdidn'tincludeasparetire.AlthoughIknewI

neededtopurchaseone,myschedulewassotightthatIhadn'tdoneityet.BecauseIwasworkingfull-timeinthe

emergencyroomatalocalhospitalandtakingeveningclassesatauniversityfiftymilesaway.

NowhereIwas,alonefortymilesfromhome.Inthosedays,cellphoneswerealuxury.Ihadnowaytocall

forassistance.

MyspiritsgrewdarkertheminuteIcheckedtheplacewhereIhadpulledover.Noonewasaround,excepta

rusty,redtruck.Itwasgettingdark.Ihadtwooptions:stayinmycaruntilmorningorstartwalkinginhopesof

findingaconveniencestorewithapayphone.Neitheroptionappealedtome.

Iabouttograbmypurseandsetoffonfootwhenamancameoutfromwhatseemedtobealawoffice.

Pullingasetofkeysfromhispocket,helockedtheofficedoor,andthenturnedandsawmestandingnexttomycar.

Imusthavelookedscaredandconfusedasheheadedstraighttowardme.

"CanIhelpyouwithanything?Mheasked.

Judgingfromhisappearance,IdecidedIcouldtrusthim.

"Ihaveaflattirebutdon'thaveaspare/'Isaid,relievedtoseehim.

"Icanhelpyouremovetheflatandthendriveyoutoatireshoptogetitfixed,"hesaid.

Irememberedthecautionary（告誡的）wordsmyparentshaddrilledintomyhead:Nevergetinacarwitha

stranger.

?'That'sokay/Isaid."Thanksanyway.'1

注意：

L續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Themanshrugged,walkedtohistruckanddroveaway.

Halfanhourlater,hewasback.

【答案JThemanshrugged,walkedtohistruckanddroveaway.MyheartsankasIwatchedhimpulloutofthe

parkinglotandontothestreet.Regrettingbitterly,Isetoutonfoottofindthenearestconveniencestore.Tdbarely

walkedtenstepswhenthetruckpulledbackintotheparkinglot.Themangotoutandwalkedovertome."Ican't

leaveyoualonelikethis.I'lltaketheflattothetireshopandgetitfixedfbryou.”

Halfanhourlater,hewasback.t4Thetirestorewasclosingjustas1pulledin,“hesaid,comingovertomycar.

“Itoldthemyouwerealone,andtheyagreedtostayandfixitfbryou.”"Thankyousomuch,“Isaid,watchingas

hereplacedthewheel.uHowmuchdoIoweyou?^^“Itcosteighty-fivedollarsbecausetheyhadtoreplacethetire

itself.Theholewastoobigtorepair.,,Eighty-fivedollars!Thatwouldputaseriousburdenonmybudget.YetIwas

gratefulforallhe'ddonetohelpastrange匚

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，作者獨(dú)自在外車(chē)胎癟了，幾乎沒(méi)有人，在天快黑時(shí)一

個(gè)男人愿意幫助作者把車(chē)胎拆掉并且送他去輪胎店修理，這事作者想起來(lái)了父母和他說(shuō)過(guò)不要和陌生人?

起上車(chē)。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，第一段開(kāi)頭是：那人聳聳肩，走到他的卡車(chē)前，開(kāi)車(chē)走了……所以本段應(yīng)該寫(xiě)這個(gè)男

人開(kāi)車(chē)走后作者的心情，以及之后男人還會(huì)做出怎么樣的舉動(dòng)，是否會(huì)返回。第二段的開(kāi)頭是：半小時(shí)后，

他回來(lái)了……所以本段應(yīng)該寫(xiě)這個(gè)男人回來(lái)之后是如何幫助作者以及和作者之間關(guān)于修輪胎的對(duì)話(huà)，作者

最后很感激這個(gè)人為幫助一個(gè)陌生人所做的一切.

續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)還要注意所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。按要求完成寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。

【點(diǎn)睛】

文章思路清晰，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語(yǔ)篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級(jí)的句式：運(yùn)用原因狀語(yǔ)從句It

costeighty-fivedollarsbecausetheyhadtoreplacethetireitself.運(yùn)用省略that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句YetIwas

gratefulforallhe'ddonetohelpastranger.高級(jí)句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫(xiě)作的檔次，整個(gè)短文顯示出了作者高水平

的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)能力。

模擬演練5【遼寧省丹東市20201屆高三10月階段測(cè)】閱讀下面文章，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭

語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整短文，續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

Mygreat-grandfather,mygrandfatherandmyfatherarefarmers,andsoareallmyfamily.Myfatherhasa

fixedideathatIwouldbecomeafarmertoo.AlthoughIrespecthimandamindeedskilledatdoingsomefarm

work,Idon'tagreethatIshouldautomaticallyfollowinmyfather^footsteps.

WhenIwasateenager,myfatherhappenedtotakemetoanairportwhichbelongedtooneofhisfriends.It

wasthefirsttimeIhadseenanaeroplaneinreallife.KnowingthatIhadneverbeenonboard,myfather'sfriend

Tomofferedmeanopportunitytoflywithhiminhissmallaeroplane.Iquicklyacceptedhisoffer!Whenwetook

off,Ifeltnervousbutthrilled.BeingupinthecloudsandlookingattheviewbelowwasunlikeanythingIhadever

felt.Iwasjustenjoyingit.Iassumedbeingapilotwouldbethemostawesomethinginthewholeworld.Fromthat

dayathoughtcreptintomymindthatIwantedtobecomeapilot,butIdoubtedwhethermyfatherwouldsupport

me.Afterall,itwasatotallydifferentpathfromwhathehadplannedforme.Therefore,Iputthethoughttothe

backofmymind,becauseIknewhewouldstillinsistonholdingontohispreviousidea.

Anyway,besideshelpingmyfatheronthefarm,IwouldfrequentlyvisitTom'sairport.Gradually,Igot

familiarwitheverybuttonandswitchontheaircraftandIlearnedalotaboutplanes,suchashowtofilltheplane

withfuel,howtochecktheenginesandsoon.ButwhatIhadlearnedjustleftmewantingmore,soIdecidedtogo

tocollegetobecomeaprofessionalpilot.

Paragraph1:

ThistimeIwouldnothidemydesireanymore.

Paragraph2:

Atthegraduationceremony,withmyfatherpresent,I,as"BestPilot"，hadtodeliveraspeech.

【答案】Possibleversion:

ThistimeIwouldnolhidemydesireanymore.Delerminedtofollowmyheart,IexplainedtomyfatherhowI

felt.ItoldhimthatIwantedtogotoacollegetolearntoflyinsteadofbeingafarmer.Aftersayingthis,Iwaited

nervouslyforhisreaction,lbmysurprise,heapprovedmyrequest,andhetoldmehewasmovedbymy

perseverance.Withhissupportandmyefforts,Iwasadmittedintomyidealcollege.

Atthegraduationceremony,withmyfatherpresent、I,as“BestPilot"，hadtodeliveraspeech.Inmyspeech,I

sharedwiththeaudiencemystoryabouthowateenagerrealizedhisdream.Facedwithdifficulties,Itookapath

thatledmedosomethingthatneededpassion,trainingandpractice.Ialsoowedmysuccesstomyfather^support.

Withouthisunderstanding,Icouldn'thavepursuedmydream.Attheendofmyspeech,Ispottedmyfather's

wateryeyes,andsaid,"Dad,Imadeit!”Hisfacelitupwithpride.

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。文章講述r作者不想成為農(nóng)民，而夢(mèng)想成為一名飛行員的事情。

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，因?yàn)榧依镒孀孑叾际寝r(nóng)民，父親認(rèn)為子承父業(yè)是很自

然的事情，但我卻不這么認(rèn)為。一次偶然的機(jī)會(huì)，爸爸帶我去了他朋友湯姆擁有的飛機(jī)場(chǎng)，第一次坐上了

飛機(jī)的我，非常興奮，并暗下決心成為飛行員。于是，我常到湯姆叔叔的飛機(jī)場(chǎng)幫忙。越「解飛機(jī)的知識(shí)，

越想成為專(zhuān)業(yè)的飛行員。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，第一段開(kāi)頭是：這次我不再掩飾我的渴望了。所以接下來(lái)應(yīng)該圍繞我向父親表達(dá)了想

成為飛行員的夢(mèng)想。根據(jù)第二段己給信息得知，我說(shuō)出自己的想法后，父親應(yīng)該同意并支持了我。在本段

應(yīng)描寫(xiě)我的心理活動(dòng)及父親的做法和狀態(tài)。第二段開(kāi)頭是：父親出席了我的畢業(yè)典禮，我作為“最佳飛行員”

必須發(fā)表演講。本段應(yīng)圍繞我演講的內(nèi)容，描述為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想付出的努力。最后可以描述父子之間感情的升

華，如父親為我實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想而驕傲等。

最后還要注意所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右，注意語(yǔ)言通順，符合邏輯，不要出現(xiàn)單詞拼寫(xiě)和語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。

【點(diǎn)睛】

本文描寫(xiě)詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句子。如：approve,insteadof,understanding,toone'ssurprise等

高級(jí)詞匯；文章恰當(dāng)?shù)氖褂昧速e語(yǔ)從句，如“ItoldhimthatJwantedtogotoacollegetolearntoflyinsteadof

beingafiirmer."和"Tomysurprise,heapprovedmyrequest,andhetoldmehewasmovedbymyperseverance.“使

文章表達(dá)更加地道。

模擬演練6【廣東省2021屆高三新高考適應(yīng)性測(cè)試卷（一）】閱讀下面材料?，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段

落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

Kentwasamanagerofafurnitureagency.Hisestablishmentnearlywentbankrupt（倒閉）becauseofthe

wrongdecisionhehadmade.Hewassoregretfulanddepressedthatheplannedtodrivetoabaralonetorelease

hisemotions.

Itwasnearmidnightinanextremelycoldwinter,andthetemperaturewasminus9degreescentigrade.There

werefewpeopleinthestreet.Suddenly,afigureofanoldmadamenteredhislineofsight.Shewasstanding

sidewaysnearaplatform,dressedinaplaincoat,draggingasuitcase,andholdingaplasticbagintheotherhand.

Theslightoldladywasseeminglymorethan80.Shewastremblingincuttingwind.NowshekeptmotioningKent

foraride.AlthoughKentwassomewhatangryabouttheoldmadam'sdisturbing,hewouldn'tliketoleaveherin

thecoldnight.Henoticedshecoughedviolentlyandthoughtthatshemightbeillandreallyneededhelp.Sohe

brakednearher.

Themadamsaid,nWouldyoupleasetakemeforaride?Icanofferdoublefare...nKentinterruptedher,HI

willchargeyounothing!Comeon!”Themadampointedtoherluggageandsaid,nCouldyouputmysuitcaseinto

thecar?"Kentsteppedoutandputitinthetrunk.

Kentproceededtodrive.Hestoppedatapetrolstationwherehewantedtopurchasegallonsofgasoline（汽油）.

Duringtheintervaltheywaitedinaqueue,themadambeganhernarration,"Couldyoupleasesendmetothe

charityhouseinthesuburbs?Iwanttosendthemsomething.Ihadbeengivenhelpthere50yearsago.The

presidentandworkerswereallgoodguys."Sheburstintotears,“Nowthey'veallpassedaway.Thelifewastough

atthattime,butwealllovedandcaredabouteachother.I'veheldadesiretobebackthereagainforlong.'1Kent

realizedthemadamwasrecallingasectionofthegoodmissingdays.Acomplicatedfeelingsurroundedhim,andhe

decidedtocancelhisplanandstaywiththeoldmadam.

Paragraph1：

Afteratwo-hourdrive,theycametothegateoftheirdestination.

Paragraph2：

Hearingthis,Kentlapsedintosilence,becauseheknewtheresthomewasforpatientswithincurablediseases.

【答案】Paragraph1：

Afteratwo-hourdrive,theycametothegateoftheirdestination.Itwasquietanddark.Thedoorofthe

charityhousewasclosedandaweaklightwentthroughtheguardroom.Kentgotoffthecarandrangthebell.An

olddoorkeepercameout.Makingclearwhytheycame,theywereinvitedin.Theoldmadamhandedhersuitcase

overtothedoorkeeper,insideitbeingclothesaridtoysshecollected.Thentheylookedroundthehouseandleft.

Onthewayback,theoldmadamaskedforanotherride,MPleasesendmetotheresthomeinthetown.sir."

Paragraph2：

Hearingthis,Kentlapsedintosilence,becauseheknewiheresthomewasforpatientswithincurablediseases.

"Ihavebeenseriouslyillforalongtimeandw