高考英語一輪復習+海灘酒吧老板的救贖：拯救少年與丟失的戒指+課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習海灘酒吧老板的救贖：拯救少年與丟失的戒指1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文AworriedcallcameintoJimmyGill’sbarthispastMarch.Anewlymarriedwomanwhohadspenttheafternoonatthebeachbarcouldn’tfindherwallet.Shedidn’tcareaboutherID,creditcards,or$150incash-butherweddingringwasputinside.Gilldidn’tliketheideathatatheftcouldhaveoccurredathisplace.Sohesetouttofindthewallet.Hespenthoursscanningfootage(影片片段）from16differentsurveillance(監(jiān)控)，cameras,watchingthewoman’severystepinthebaruntilshewenttositonabenchoutsideandleftwhenherridearrived.Withinminutes,ayoungmaninajacketapproachedthebench,putsomethinghurriedinhispocket,andwalkedoff.Gillpostedacliponthebar’sFacebookpage.“Ididn’twanttoaccusehim,”hesaid.“Ijustaskedifanybodyknewwhotheguywas.”4續(xù)寫原文Withinhours,Gillgotatextfrom17-year-oldRiversPrather,who’dheardaboutthepostfromoneofhisfriends.PratheradmittedhavingtakenthewalletandtoldGillhe’ddoneitbecausehehadn’teatenintwodays.Hesaidhesawtheringbutthoughtitwasfake,sohetookthemoneyandthrewthewalletoffthedock(碼頭)intotheocean.Thenheboughtasandwich.Gill,unsurewhetherhebelievedPrather,toldtheteentomeethimatthedock.There,theygottotalking,andPratherrevealedthathewasn’tgettingalongwithhisfamilyandhadbeenlivinginthewoodsforaweek.Gill,afatheroftwowithanotherontheway,lookcloselyatPrather-hissmallbuild,hispalecheeks-andsawhimforwhathewas:moreofakidthanacriminal.Butthepolicewerealreadyonthecase,andbecauseofthemissingring,Prathercouldbefacingcharges.“Hewouldbegoingtojail,”Gillsays.“Ihadtohelphimsomehow.”5段首句Para1：Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.Para2：Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.6Part2題目分析7續(xù)寫原文分析8這篇續(xù)寫以故事情節(jié)發(fā)展為線索，海灘酒吧的老板Gill接到投訴，一位女士的錢包被偷，里面有她的訂婚戒指。Gill查了酒吧的監(jiān)控，找到了線索，并將視頻片段傳到網上，想通過網絡的力量找到拿走錢包的人。幾小時后，一個叫Prather的17歲少年主動聯(lián)系了他。兩人見面后，Prather講述了拿走錢包的緣由，作為兩個孩子的父親，Gill決定不追究其責任,覺得Prather更是一個孩子。但警察正在跟蹤此案，Prather有可能面臨嚴重的指控。Gill決定幫助這個少年，他請了兩個潛水員去Prather扔錢包的地方搜尋。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。情節(jié)構建的重點9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1:Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.由第一段首句內容“第二天Gill請了兩個潛水員去Prather扔錢包的地方搜尋?！笨芍谝欢蚊鑼憹撍畣T在水里搜錢包的情況，以及岸上等待搜尋結果的警察、Gill和Parther的情況。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.由第二段首句內容“突然，一個潛水員露出水面?！笨芍诙蚊枋鏊褜で闆r，按照讀后續(xù)寫積極向上的導向，應該是找到了戒指，Prather免除指控。11續(xù)寫素材續(xù)寫素材潛水員搜尋——一直沒搜到——警察審問Prather——潛水員搜到戒指——失主解除指控——Gill繼續(xù)幫助Prather12續(xù)寫素材續(xù)寫素材行為類①.審問：question/interrogate②.撤銷指控：dropthecharge/cancelthecharge③.恢復：getononeselffoot/recover④.突然大哭：burstintotears/burstoutcrying情緒類①.擔心：beworriedabout/troubleabout/grewworried②.開心：morethandelighted/extremelyhappy13續(xù)寫素材續(xù)寫素材[高分句型1]Gillgrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeginquestioningPeter,tryingtogethimtoadmitkeepingthering.（運用了when引導的時間狀語從句；運用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語作的伴隨狀語）[高分句型2]Hetoldtheteenhecouldstaywithhisfamilyuntiltheboygotonhisfeetagain.（運用了省略that的賓語從句；運用了until引導的時間狀語從句）14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.Apolicewaswaitingforthemthere.Acrowdhadtogethertowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.Morethananhourpassedwithnosignofthering.Gillgrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeginquestioningPeter,tryingtogethimtoadmitkeepingthering.16范文呈現(xiàn)Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.Inhishandwasthewallet,andinsidewasthering.Cheersbrokeoutinthecrowd.WhenGillcalledthewallet’sowner,thewomanburstintotears.ShewasmorethandelightedandpromptlydroppedthechargeagainstthePratherforstealingthering.Butitwasn'toverforGill.He’dbeentroubledaboutPrathersleepinginthecoldwoods.GillknewhishomewasbigenoughtogivePratheraplacetoliveinforawhile.Hetoldtheteenhecouldstaywithhisfamilyuntiltheboygotonhisfeetagain.17范文譯文第二天，吉爾雇了兩名潛水員在水中搜尋。警察在那里等著他們。一群人聚集在一起觀看兩名潛水員在湍急的水流中搜尋。一個多小時過去了，戒指還沒有出現(xiàn)。吉爾越來越擔心，尤其是當警察開始審問彼得，試圖讓他承認持有戒指時。突然，一名潛水員從水中走了出來。他手里拿著錢包，里面是戒指。人群中爆發(fā)出歡呼聲。當吉爾打電話給錢包的主人時，