2022年全國(guó)1卷讀后續(xù)寫David'sRun分析故事講義-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)

真題原文Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened."Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,"heexplainedunfortably."Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide."Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊惱）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecrosscountryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.分析故事根據(jù)故事山模型，我們來分析故事的情節(jié)脈絡(luò)。故事背景：故事一、二段交代了背景，包括故事的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物、事件等。舉辦大型越野賽的日子開始，涉及來自不同學(xué)校的學(xué)生。主人公是一位特殊教育老師，注意到戴維站在一邊，發(fā)現(xiàn)他選擇不參賽，因?yàn)楹ε卤怀靶?。故事開端：觸發(fā)事件發(fā)生三、四段在老師從教練那里得知戴維被給予參賽與否的選擇，突顯了教練的善意和戴維對(duì)被接納的掙扎。情節(jié)發(fā)展：第五段故事進(jìn)一步發(fā)展，老師對(duì)教練的決定感到沮喪，試圖理解戴維的觀點(diǎn)。故事高潮：高潮發(fā)生在第六段，情節(jié)到達(dá)了最讓人期待的時(shí)刻，David是否會(huì)參加比賽這件事成了本文最大懸念。通過對(duì)David的側(cè)面描寫，體現(xiàn)了他的不屈不撓的精神，也暗示了下文David會(huì)參加比賽這件事。原文分析之后，我們還需要結(jié)合題目所給的兩段首句來分析故事的走向。Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.從第一句我們可以看出作者將會(huì)在這一段展開交談，根據(jù)前文的描述我們得知作者是希望David不要輕言放棄，所以在這一段需要描寫的是作者如何鼓舞、勸說David參加這次比賽。從第二句我們可以看出David正沖向終點(diǎn)，因此可以得知David被作者說服，勇敢的參加了比賽，我們也可以推測(cè)雖然他身體狀況不佳，不能取得特別突出的成績(jī)，但是大家肯定會(huì)對(duì)David的精神給予肯定。（當(dāng)然，文章最后大家不要忘記升華故事的主旨哦！）因此故事山的后半部分我們分析如下：情節(jié)回落：情節(jié)回落隨著戴維的參與展開，強(qiáng)調(diào)了他的決心和支持的氛圍。老師反思了戴維面臨的挑戰(zhàn)和他周圍人的積極影響。故事結(jié)局：結(jié)局帶來了一種戰(zhàn)勝困難的感覺，戴維在同學(xué)們真誠(chéng)的歡呼聲中完成了比賽。老師為戴維的決心感到自豪，看到故事對(duì)戴維和周圍人的積極影響。整體結(jié)構(gòu)：故事遵循經(jīng)典的故事結(jié)構(gòu)，具有明確定義的導(dǎo)言，推動(dòng)敘述向前發(fā)展的觸發(fā)事件，上升動(dòng)作建立緊張感，高潮發(fā)生在起跑線，回落動(dòng)作展示了戴維的參與，結(jié)局突顯了戰(zhàn)勝困難的成就感。高考真題范文（163words）：Wesatdowntogetheronsomesteps,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Iturnedhimaroundandlookedhimintheeyesincerely.Iquietlysaid,“David,ifyou’renotrunningbecauseyou’reafraidsomeoneisgoingtolaugh,that’snotagoodenoughreason.Areyougoingtoletthemgetinyourway?Ifyoureallywanttorun,David,run!”IheldmybreathasDavidtookthisin.Thenhelookedatthefieldandsaidwithafiercebutquietdetermination,“I’mgonnarun.”IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thestarter’sgunsounded.Buthehadonlygoneafewmetresbeforehetrippedandfellflatontheground.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement,othervoicesaroundmetookupthecall.“eonDavid,youcandoit!”Davidpickedhimselfupandstartedagainuntilhecrossedthefinishlinetowildcheersandapplause.下水作文1：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.【Theatmospherearoundusbuzzedwith(~withsth充滿興奮或活動(dòng)等)excitementastheotherchildrenstretchedandchatted,eagerlyanticipatingthecrosscountryrun.】IcouldsenseDavid'suneaseanddecidedtobreakthesilence."Hey,David,"Ibegangently,"you'vebeenpracticingsohardforthis.Areyousureyouwanttosititout?"Hefinallylookedup,hiseyesrevealingamixofdisappointmentandembarrassment."Idon'twantpeopletoseemestruggle,"headmitted,hisvoicebarelyaboveawhisper.I【placedareassuringhandonhisshoulder,】assuringhimthateveryonewouldbecheeringforhim,justliketheyalwaysdid.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.【Theforestloomedahead,itsdensecanopyfilteringsunlightontothewindingtrail.Theairwasfilledwiththeearthyscentofpine,creatingaserenebackdropfortheimpendingrace.環(huán)境描寫（森林在前方隱現(xiàn)，濃密的樹冠過濾陽光灑在蜿蜒曲折的小徑上?？諝庵袕浡蓸涞哪嗤料銡?，為即將到來的比賽創(chuàng)造了寧?kù)o的背景。）】Asthecoachsignaledthestart,Davidtookadeepbreath,hisdeterminationshiningthrough.Hisclassmates,whohadnoticedhisabsence,begancheeringloudly【,encouraginghimtodohisbest.】Ioverheardoneofthechildrensaying,"Go,David!Yougotthis!"Thegenuinesupportwarmedmyheart.Despitethechallengeshefaced,Davidpushedforward,embodyingresilienceinthefaceofadversity.我一般上課會(huì)給學(xué)生較長(zhǎng)的范文，主要是為了讓他們多讀一些好詞好句，謄抄范文的時(shí)候，我會(huì)要求學(xué)生在不打亂情節(jié)的情況下自行刪減，這樣也可以鍛煉他們精簡(jiǎn)語言的能力。下水文2（161words）：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.IcouldsenseDavid'suneaseanddecidedto

breakthesilence.（動(dòng)作描寫）"Hey,David,"Ibegangently,"you'vebeenpracticingsohardforthis.Areyousureyouwanttosititout?"（對(duì)話）Hefinallylookedup,hiseyes

revealing

amixofdisappointmentandembarrassment.（心理描寫）"Idon'twantpeopletosee